Eternal Paradise Rewrite:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PeuYGDNJvzI
"Eternal Paradise was a game I made using RPG Maker 2003 a few Months ago. When I released it, the game got a bit of attention, and the comments I received were fairly mixed. However in the long run, it was pointed out to me that I made quite a large number of errors with my design choices, and that my writing wasn't quite up-to-par. I'd dragged scenes on for far too long, and constantly repeated the same things over-and-over ad nauseam.
With the information I've received regarding E.P within the last few Months, I've decided to rework the game and rewrite the script, and hope to make it a much more enjoyable experience than it previously was. The majority of the changes will involve the script and dialogue, which will be completely re-done from scratch to form a more concise and engaging experience."
-From the Youtube video description.
Also,
"IMPORTANT:
During the 28-30+ second range in the video, you'll notice the screen fades out, but fades back in immediately after. This is because there was supposed to be a video in there that I just could not include for some reason. It's viewable in-game, but I couldn't record it.
Scene to play at 28-29 seconds in to the video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GxTZUQONmOY