greenninja89
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I'm sorry, but that sounds like kingdom hearts 2. They did it the first way you discussed. Therefore, you should do the second way so people won't confuse the two.
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I'm sorry, but that sounds like kingdom hearts 2. They did it the first way you discussed. Therefore, you should do the second way so people won't confuse the two.
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crazrick":vi5hkjqe said:
The guy you play at the beginning becomes the main villain (little more complicated than that, but that's the basic idea).
greenninja89
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Sucker Punch":71mgiowb said:
Well, that is different from kingdom hearts 2.
*shuts up and leaves in shame*
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Actually, Roxas used to be one of the main 'villains', the last member of Organisation XIII. He left after he got the keyblade.
Oh and for no.1 either just say 'got potion' or do it as though the character was talking out loud. If you are using something with a name box or face then show the main characters, and do it as speech, like 'Cool! There's a potion in the sand!'
And for no.2, if he joins the party then carry the items across, otherwise don't put in any chests or shops (unless they give equipment). Make the enemies give barely any xp, so they won't level up much and won't bother grinding, and/or make the new character start on level 3 or something.
Actually, Roxas used to be one of the main 'villains', the last member of Organisation XIII. He left after he got the keyblade.
Oh and for no.1 either just say 'got potion' or do it as though the character was talking out loud. If you are using something with a name box or face then show the main characters, and do it as speech, like 'Cool! There's a potion in the sand!'
And for no.2, if he joins the party then carry the items across, otherwise don't put in any chests or shops (unless they give equipment). Make the enemies give barely any xp, so they won't level up much and won't bother grinding, and/or make the new character start on level 3 or something.
greenninja89
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But he had the keyblade when he joined...hmmm... this debate can wait until the ds game comes out. that should clear the air...
ds game? What's that? Are they remaking chain of memories or something?
And no, Roxas joined Organization XIII straight after he was created. You learn in the flashbacks, when the fire guy (axel or something?) was talking to him about it. He was trying to find out why it came to him, when he was just a nobody, so he left.
And no, Roxas joined Organization XIII straight after he was created. You learn in the flashbacks, when the fire guy (axel or something?) was talking to him about it. He was trying to find out why it came to him, when he was just a nobody, so he left.
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Some guy made the shittiest game ever, named it Rocky, and posted it here. Everyone just critisized him as the game was obviously done that way on purpose. They freaked at him, and he said that the community wasn't very helpful. I think he left.Denko":1dihe70r said:
shadownexusruler
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here's mine for a little feedback
HISTORY
Several centuries ago dragons and humans lived in coexistence with each other, until one fine day when the ruler of draconian castle died of natural causes and the new heir to the throne decided that the dragons should be wiped from existence over something that happen earlier in his childhood. But some of the servant’s believe there previous king didn’t die from natural causes but was murdered somehow.
Story
Centuries later draconian became a huge empire and the dragons nearly extinct with only a handful of dragons left to survive along with some humans who sided with the dragons over their kings wishes and the king exiled them to another continent to die or become food for the dragons for them to survive but one human decided to create a kingdom on this new continent and he give’s this new kingdom a name of dragonia castle and that any human or dragon was welcomed in his kingdom including hybrids a combination of humans with dragon wings on their back.
HISTORY
Several centuries ago dragons and humans lived in coexistence with each other, until one fine day when the ruler of draconian castle died of natural causes and the new heir to the throne decided that the dragons should be wiped from existence over something that happen earlier in his childhood. But some of the servant’s believe there previous king didn’t die from natural causes but was murdered somehow.
Story
Centuries later draconian became a huge empire and the dragons nearly extinct with only a handful of dragons left to survive along with some humans who sided with the dragons over their kings wishes and the king exiled them to another continent to die or become food for the dragons for them to survive but one human decided to create a kingdom on this new continent and he give’s this new kingdom a name of dragonia castle and that any human or dragon was welcomed in his kingdom including hybrids a combination of humans with dragon wings on their back.
That's a pretty interesting story shadow, but you might want to work a bit on your grammar though (Not trying to be mean, so sorry if I sound like it) because the story sounded like one run-on sentence.
Here's something I've came up with in 2 days.
Yeah, I know it sounds pretty cliche in some areas but I plan to patch them up later as I get further into making the story.
Here's something I've came up with in 2 days.
Prologue:
The year was 2012. Global warming struck the Earth, thus causing its inevitable death. Humanity took to the stars in unison, turning their backs on a mistake they have made. For years, civilization was forced to float on the ocean of stars, looking for a new home. Eventually, a starship approached an underdeveloped planet that was hidden behind the large moon near Earth. To their surprise, the planet was capable of life, and thus, humanity raced to the planet with full force. There, they had established a new civilization. Races from around the galaxy began to gather there to witness the new planet. This planet became known as, the "New Earth".
Storyline:
100 years after the arrival of humans on the new planet, civilization found it hard to develope due to scarcity of resources and undiscovered lands. Because of this, they must start technology from scratch, using what little they were able to carry when they abandoned the old Earth.
Darke, a young man from a backwater village called Palamecia had always wanted to see what was outside his country, to see the world. One day, a man from a distant land came into the village by boat. There, he told of his stories about being a Global Traveller and the many places he has visited. Those stories inspired Darke to begin his journey as a Global Traveller and explore the world. What will await him at the end of his long, long voyage?
Idea:
This is just a start, so it'll possibly be fixed up a bit in the future.
Okay, basically, you start off as Darke, the 19 year old main character. The day for his journey to begin has come, and the village celebrates his departure into the big world. Upon setting foot outside the village, he plans to go to Londale, the town north of Palamecia, to try and earn some quick money. Afterwards, his old next door neighbor Selphy joins him on his journey and they both head towards the Kingdom Of Armonde. It was there that their real journey begins, as they learn of a cult who's trying to ressurect the mistress of darkness, and the three shrines that houses the power for raising the sunken island, El Euwel, in which atop the island, they can see the rest of their side of the world.
The year was 2012. Global warming struck the Earth, thus causing its inevitable death. Humanity took to the stars in unison, turning their backs on a mistake they have made. For years, civilization was forced to float on the ocean of stars, looking for a new home. Eventually, a starship approached an underdeveloped planet that was hidden behind the large moon near Earth. To their surprise, the planet was capable of life, and thus, humanity raced to the planet with full force. There, they had established a new civilization. Races from around the galaxy began to gather there to witness the new planet. This planet became known as, the "New Earth".
Storyline:
100 years after the arrival of humans on the new planet, civilization found it hard to develope due to scarcity of resources and undiscovered lands. Because of this, they must start technology from scratch, using what little they were able to carry when they abandoned the old Earth.
Darke, a young man from a backwater village called Palamecia had always wanted to see what was outside his country, to see the world. One day, a man from a distant land came into the village by boat. There, he told of his stories about being a Global Traveller and the many places he has visited. Those stories inspired Darke to begin his journey as a Global Traveller and explore the world. What will await him at the end of his long, long voyage?
Idea:
This is just a start, so it'll possibly be fixed up a bit in the future.
Okay, basically, you start off as Darke, the 19 year old main character. The day for his journey to begin has come, and the village celebrates his departure into the big world. Upon setting foot outside the village, he plans to go to Londale, the town north of Palamecia, to try and earn some quick money. Afterwards, his old next door neighbor Selphy joins him on his journey and they both head towards the Kingdom Of Armonde. It was there that their real journey begins, as they learn of a cult who's trying to ressurect the mistress of darkness, and the three shrines that houses the power for raising the sunken island, El Euwel, in which atop the island, they can see the rest of their side of the world.
Yeah, I know it sounds pretty cliche in some areas but I plan to patch them up later as I get further into making the story.
shadownexusruler
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thanks i was planning on fixing it up a bit by adding more info right now i have writers block
The Cry of Fallen Angels
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Hero, you ripped the prologue off a random SF serie, but besides that.
The traveling the world premise is always a very interesting one. Discovering for the sake of curiousity, shame you see it so little. But, why oh why, does it after:
1. Personality trait.
2. An idea what the relation between her and the main character could be.
3. A motivation.
"old next door neighboor" says absolutely nothing. If you replace it you'll see;
Anyway, enough bitching on that. What happens afterwards traveling to that kingdom (which riddles me, would they use kingdoms at this time? I mean, I'm looking for the word "president" or "government" rather than "king"), they run into a cult. Why? Wasn't exploring the unknown enough of an adventure? Does it need to be epic? Why would Darke and Selphy stop it, can't they go to the autorities, report it and travel on?
You can do a lot more with smaller things than you might think at first. Try questioning your own writing at all times too, sure it takes a lot of time, but the results are much more satisfying. Not trying to break you or anything, just typing out my thoughts.
The traveling the world premise is always a very interesting one. Discovering for the sake of curiousity, shame you see it so little. But, why oh why, does it after:
start looking HORRIBLE. Seriously dude, first off, the "girl-next-door" thing should be entirely left out. Say she's a friend, or a lover or whatever and that she shares the same interest for the outside world. That would give her:
1. Personality trait.
2. An idea what the relation between her and the main character could be.
3. A motivation.
"old next door neighboor" says absolutely nothing. If you replace it you'll see;
Anyway, enough bitching on that. What happens afterwards traveling to that kingdom (which riddles me, would they use kingdoms at this time? I mean, I'm looking for the word "president" or "government" rather than "king"), they run into a cult. Why? Wasn't exploring the unknown enough of an adventure? Does it need to be epic? Why would Darke and Selphy stop it, can't they go to the autorities, report it and travel on?
You can do a lot more with smaller things than you might think at first. Try questioning your own writing at all times too, sure it takes a lot of time, but the results are much more satisfying. Not trying to break you or anything, just typing out my thoughts.
I had this proofread on another forum, but multiple feedback is something that I consider a must.
STORY SYNOPSIS:
On the island of Najuju, the smallest island on the planet Zobion, there is a sea monster relaxing on the quaint sunlit beach. His name is Slimy the Sahagin, the guardian of Najuju Island, and his job is to keep peace within his home land and keep all invaders at bay. Unfortunately, he gets an unexpected visit from the world’s most dangerous criminal organization, The Banuku Bandits. They lead by Emperor Banuku, a sinister, self-proclaimed “Supreme Leader of Zobionâ€
On the island of Najuju, the smallest island on the planet Zobion, there is a sea monster relaxing on the quaint sunlit beach. His name is Slimy the Sahagin, the guardian of Najuju Island, and his job is to keep peace within his home land and keep all invaders at bay. Unfortunately, he gets an unexpected visit from the world’s most dangerous criminal organization, The Banuku Bandits. They lead by Emperor Banuku, a sinister, self-proclaimed “Supreme Leader of Zobionâ€
I love it, Ratty! I've always enjoyed those light-hearted-but-with-underlying-dark-themes kinds of stories. Now,a quick question:
I can't really find anything wrong with it... Everything seems to be in order. I'd love to play it! ...That is, if you'll ever get around to finishing the damn thing! >:|
:lol:
I'd better see a project thread for this soon. :wink:
Could your Sonic fanboy-ness be more obvious? :tongue:
I can't really find anything wrong with it... Everything seems to be in order. I'd love to play it! ...That is, if you'll ever get around to finishing the damn thing! >:|
:lol:
I'd better see a project thread for this soon. :wink:
This was an idea I had earlier, partly inspired by Smash Bros.:
While her kid is at summer vacation, a mother decides to sell all of his video games, primarily made up of RPGs. Somehow or another, an ancient book that the kid happened to have happens to get mixed in the box with all the video games. When a buyer comes to buy the games for his kids, he asks if the book is included, reading a passage out of it. The mother says she's never heard of it, so she doesn't care if he takes it.
While driving to his house, the purchaser of the games suddenly gets drawn into the box itself. It seems that ancient book just happened to carry a spell that brought things to life, and by reading it, the man was drawn into this newly created, combination-of-RPG-worlds world, known as 'Box'.
Yeah I know, not a very good story, but its meant to be light hearted, so don't take it to seriously. Anyway, this game is a tactics/strategy game that features a variety of characters from popular RPGs, such as Final Fantasy, Xenosaga, Pokemon, e.t.c.
The game would feature over 100 characters, so the main point of the game isn't really to focus on who is the best character. Some of them are practically the same. However, the point is essentially to create a strategy team with your favorite characters. The game would be made so, for most series, you can have an entire team made up of characters from that series. Or you could mix and match. Either way, it would be up to the player.
It would essentially be a tactics version of SSB, except with RPG characters rather than Nintendo-only.
While her kid is at summer vacation, a mother decides to sell all of his video games, primarily made up of RPGs. Somehow or another, an ancient book that the kid happened to have happens to get mixed in the box with all the video games. When a buyer comes to buy the games for his kids, he asks if the book is included, reading a passage out of it. The mother says she's never heard of it, so she doesn't care if he takes it.
While driving to his house, the purchaser of the games suddenly gets drawn into the box itself. It seems that ancient book just happened to carry a spell that brought things to life, and by reading it, the man was drawn into this newly created, combination-of-RPG-worlds world, known as 'Box'.
Yeah I know, not a very good story, but its meant to be light hearted, so don't take it to seriously. Anyway, this game is a tactics/strategy game that features a variety of characters from popular RPGs, such as Final Fantasy, Xenosaga, Pokemon, e.t.c.
The game would feature over 100 characters, so the main point of the game isn't really to focus on who is the best character. Some of them are practically the same. However, the point is essentially to create a strategy team with your favorite characters. The game would be made so, for most series, you can have an entire team made up of characters from that series. Or you could mix and match. Either way, it would be up to the player.
It would essentially be a tactics version of SSB, except with RPG characters rather than Nintendo-only.
You could go into more detail as to why the mother would be selling her kid's video games (punishment? low income?). Other than that, despite that the whole "video game character come to the real world" cliche (not really that common in games, but just in general...), it could work... I think.
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