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After a few minutes spent trying to understand it i think it sounds pretty cool! Go with it make a demo asap!Actingman00
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This is a quick story I made for a game in VX, I just wanted to learn the program so the story is nothing big or special or anything. It’s just a basic story so I can actually finish (or get far) on a game in VX.
Long ago the Great King Gohldi of ________ had the great Dark Wizard create the most powerful sword in existence. He used this sword for peace and not for evil. But others had different plans. Two secret organizations tried to get the sword away from the king. They grew powerful and began attacking cities until the king would give up. The other kings had a secret meeting about what to do. They decided that Gohldi would have to destroy the sword to bring peace back to the land. The sword could not be destroyed but the power could be drained. The Dark Wizard who made the sword drained it’s power into 4 crystals which were scattered across the continent in case the sword was ever needed. Gohldi took the sword, now just a normal sword, and hid it away in his home village along with all his belongings when he died. These two organizations never stopped looking for the crystals and the sword, and lately they have found the approximate location of the sword.
Two teenage boys, Jake and Matt, live in a small out of the way village. It is an ordinary place, until one day Jake and Matt find a secret cave and inside it is a hidden building with untold riches and one sword, in a pedestal. Little do they know this sword is about to throw them on a chase across the continent in search of it’s power; but they are not the only ones searching and the other people will do anything to get their hands on it’s power…
Two teenage boys, Jake and Matt, live in a small out of the way village. It is an ordinary place, until one day Jake and Matt find a secret cave and inside it is a hidden building with untold riches and one sword, in a pedestal. Little do they know this sword is about to throw them on a chase across the continent in search of it’s power; but they are not the only ones searching and the other people will do anything to get their hands on it’s power…
Jake: Playable
Jake is the main character of the story. He acts without thinking sometimes but he is a good leader. When it comes to money Jake thinks about himself only. He will help people in need if there is something in it for him.
Matt: Playable
Matt is Jake's best friend since they were young. He is the one who always thinks things through and he's calm. He calms Jake down and is tough with him but Jake needs that. He trusts Jake immensely and when it comes down to it he will almost always take Jake’s side of an argument.
Miley: Playable
Miley is a girl from the town of ___________. She is a young girl who wants to make it as a warrior but her father, the governor of __________, will not allow his daughter to take up such a job. He wants his daughter to be just that; the daughter of a governor. This causes Miley to rebel and when she hears that two boys are on a quest she cannot help but try and join. She is very sarcastic and has no time for Jake’s impatience and selfishness.
Jake is the main character of the story. He acts without thinking sometimes but he is a good leader. When it comes to money Jake thinks about himself only. He will help people in need if there is something in it for him.
Matt: Playable
Matt is Jake's best friend since they were young. He is the one who always thinks things through and he's calm. He calms Jake down and is tough with him but Jake needs that. He trusts Jake immensely and when it comes down to it he will almost always take Jake’s side of an argument.
Miley: Playable
Miley is a girl from the town of ___________. She is a young girl who wants to make it as a warrior but her father, the governor of __________, will not allow his daughter to take up such a job. He wants his daughter to be just that; the daughter of a governor. This causes Miley to rebel and when she hears that two boys are on a quest she cannot help but try and join. She is very sarcastic and has no time for Jake’s impatience and selfishness.
punched2death
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What do the ____________'s mean?
Wannabe Developer
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I got this dilemma in which my plot has no "middle" to it. Does anyone have a tip in which to solve this dilemma.
Actingman00
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Thank you ^_^.Acera":2o9qecsb said:
@Wannabe Developer: Maybe if you posted your plot we might be able to help...
Wannabe Developer
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Actingman00":3idptqns said:
Here the abridge version, its basically an alternate universe of the manga Claymore. No cameos, new cast, different locals, that sort of stuff. Its also a flashback that the main character is narrating.
Basically the main character barely survives an attack by a yoma (human shaped monster with cameleon like ability). Sadly her family didn't. She was saved by a Claymore, (hence why she survived). While the main character was knocked out she was turned to one (more detailed in what I have written, basically those that survive a yoma attack are cast out by their town/villages due to fear of them being one).
There no middle, couldn't think of one. There also no antagonist as well.
The ending takes place in the present, in which she returns to her home town since she was rather close by. She wanted to check up on an old friend.
Well I have more detailed version written down which it itself needs some work.
Actingman00
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I've never heard of the manga "Claymore" so this might sound completely stupid.
The antagonist could be a very powerful wizard who is gathering an army of Yoma to attempt to take over the world. The main character is the only know who knows this as she found out during the attack (maybe some kind of special power she has? Reading minds? Maybe she heard the Yoma talking. whatever) and she wants to stop it. It's the only way to be allowed back into her village.
Just a little idea.
The antagonist could be a very powerful wizard who is gathering an army of Yoma to attempt to take over the world. The main character is the only know who knows this as she found out during the attack (maybe some kind of special power she has? Reading minds? Maybe she heard the Yoma talking. whatever) and she wants to stop it. It's the only way to be allowed back into her village.
Just a little idea.
Wannabe Developer
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Wizards are out of the question, since there are none in the manga. There no magic either. I would give a link to the volumes but I'm not sure if its legal or not in here.
It seems interesting enough, I haven't heard of many stories that don't entail magic whatsoever...
Here's my idea, a simple sort of story that I've been working on:
The main character, Alex (I'm thinking Alex as a default name that can be changed since the main character isn't that important), is en route to his home town via the woods outside of the town (this is where the story starts), when he notices two wolves, a mother and her cub walking along the road side. He stops and greets them (They can talk by the way), and the cub tries to run into the woods. Since it is getting darker and darker, the woods are becoming dangerous, and the mother stops the cub from entering. The cub claims that there is someone inside there, but the mother, obstinant with keeping her child safe, refuses to go in. Alex, taking concern of who might be inside, decides to check it out. The wolves thank him, and they give him a tool that he can use to locate the person (An inventory item that is unusable, but activates events).
Upon entering the woods, Alex searches around, it isn't dark yet so there is no danger. He needs to solve a puzzle involving a series of switches (already implemented in the game) to get to the source. After solving the puzzle, he finds a girl laying in the ground. He wakes her up and tells her that they need to get out of the forest (The sun is now gone). She grogilly agrees, and they move quickly to exit the forest. (There is a timer set for 3 Minutes, and a new switch set is created, if the timer runs out, then it becomes too dark to see, and the game is over, however the puzzle is quite easy, it would take a casual gamer maybe 30 seconds to figure out the mechanism.) Upon reaching the exit of the woods, a ManBearPig appears and blocks them from the exit. The girl hides, and Alex bravely unsheathes his sword to fight it (Up until this point the sword cannot be used). The ManBearPig is dangerous, but it isn't extremely hard to kill (Either by constantly knocking it down or by using a charged up attack to hit it multiple times). Afterwards, they exit the forest...
To find they are still stuck inside. This is what Alex was afraid of, the Woods are alive, and they like to trap people inside at night. As they attempt to leave, there is a series of plants and shrubbery in their way, which can conveniently be struck down using a sharp sword. This part is pretty short, since it's only the beginning, but they quickly find their way out before fighting any more monsters.
Upon exiting the forest, Alex asks the girl if she's okay. She is lost for words, and instead starts to cry. He waits until she regains her composure before asking again. She then becomes defensive and asks who he is and where she is. It's obvious she has lost her memory (or has she? *foreshadowing*), and they make their way to the town.
In the town it's dark, and there is only one building accessable, Alex's home. When they get inside, he tells her she can use his bedroom, and she asks for a pad of paper. He tells her there is some inside the room, and she goes to turn in for the night. He on the other hand, puts away all his stuff and stays awake for a while, pondering this strange girl who is completely lost, almost got herself killed, and wears strange clothing. In the morning, (next scene), he's surfing on the internet (Yes, that's not a typo) when she walks out of his room, gaping at his computer. She snatches it from his hand, and tries to find something on it before she gives up entirely. He looks at her strangely, and she says she thought that everything was a dream. He tells her to look outside, and she does. She can't believe it, and worse yet she doesn't want to do anything, claiming that she's going to wake up sooner or later. He shrugs, and heads off to school (Not a typo either.)
At school, there is only one class for that specific day, academic arcane magic. After a lecture, notes, and study, Alex learns a spell, the first spell he's ever learned. (during the notes there is a questionnaire, the answers given will determine the character's magical acuity, ranging from Illuminency (Offensive, Fire and Holy Magic), Teramancy (Offensive & Defensive Nature & Wind Magic), Sanaistry (Defensive and Supportive Holy Magic), or Atranistry (Offensive Dark & Ice Magic)), and based on THAT, the character will learn a different spell. There is a space gap after that, where he can talk to various people at the school, train at the gym (Strength training), study in the lecture hall (Intelligence Training), Go to archery training (Dexterity training), or hit the track and go for a jog (Agility Training). There are also various jobs he can do to gain money, simple tasks, some require technique, others are simple deliveries, others involve staying in one place for a time limit, and ultimately time is unlimited at the school, however training credits (A switch used at the start of each day at 100) are limited. There is no way to increase this number other than sleeping at home, and you can't do that until the story progresses in such a way that you are allowed to go to sleep. Ultimately he can go home whenever, and once he does the story takes a turn when he realises that the girl is missing. He cannot leave the house until he finds out why, which can be found in his room (the paper she asked for was used to make a diary), he learns that she went back to the forest. He goes in to find her en route to the forest, and explains to her that she can't just go back. She pushes him away, claiming she can do what she wants, and heads off again. He brings up the ManBearPig, and she realises what could happen to her. She goes with him back to the house, where she notices all the little differences in his life compared to her own. He decides that tomorrow she will accompany him to the school, where they can talk to the principal, a very smart and wise man.
That's the introduction to the plot. Let me note that the game is in production right now, but I just wanted to post it here to see if there are any discrepencies in the story.
Here's my idea, a simple sort of story that I've been working on:
The main character, Alex (I'm thinking Alex as a default name that can be changed since the main character isn't that important), is en route to his home town via the woods outside of the town (this is where the story starts), when he notices two wolves, a mother and her cub walking along the road side. He stops and greets them (They can talk by the way), and the cub tries to run into the woods. Since it is getting darker and darker, the woods are becoming dangerous, and the mother stops the cub from entering. The cub claims that there is someone inside there, but the mother, obstinant with keeping her child safe, refuses to go in. Alex, taking concern of who might be inside, decides to check it out. The wolves thank him, and they give him a tool that he can use to locate the person (An inventory item that is unusable, but activates events).
Upon entering the woods, Alex searches around, it isn't dark yet so there is no danger. He needs to solve a puzzle involving a series of switches (already implemented in the game) to get to the source. After solving the puzzle, he finds a girl laying in the ground. He wakes her up and tells her that they need to get out of the forest (The sun is now gone). She grogilly agrees, and they move quickly to exit the forest. (There is a timer set for 3 Minutes, and a new switch set is created, if the timer runs out, then it becomes too dark to see, and the game is over, however the puzzle is quite easy, it would take a casual gamer maybe 30 seconds to figure out the mechanism.) Upon reaching the exit of the woods, a ManBearPig appears and blocks them from the exit. The girl hides, and Alex bravely unsheathes his sword to fight it (Up until this point the sword cannot be used). The ManBearPig is dangerous, but it isn't extremely hard to kill (Either by constantly knocking it down or by using a charged up attack to hit it multiple times). Afterwards, they exit the forest...
To find they are still stuck inside. This is what Alex was afraid of, the Woods are alive, and they like to trap people inside at night. As they attempt to leave, there is a series of plants and shrubbery in their way, which can conveniently be struck down using a sharp sword. This part is pretty short, since it's only the beginning, but they quickly find their way out before fighting any more monsters.
Upon exiting the forest, Alex asks the girl if she's okay. She is lost for words, and instead starts to cry. He waits until she regains her composure before asking again. She then becomes defensive and asks who he is and where she is. It's obvious she has lost her memory (or has she? *foreshadowing*), and they make their way to the town.
In the town it's dark, and there is only one building accessable, Alex's home. When they get inside, he tells her she can use his bedroom, and she asks for a pad of paper. He tells her there is some inside the room, and she goes to turn in for the night. He on the other hand, puts away all his stuff and stays awake for a while, pondering this strange girl who is completely lost, almost got herself killed, and wears strange clothing. In the morning, (next scene), he's surfing on the internet (Yes, that's not a typo) when she walks out of his room, gaping at his computer. She snatches it from his hand, and tries to find something on it before she gives up entirely. He looks at her strangely, and she says she thought that everything was a dream. He tells her to look outside, and she does. She can't believe it, and worse yet she doesn't want to do anything, claiming that she's going to wake up sooner or later. He shrugs, and heads off to school (Not a typo either.)
At school, there is only one class for that specific day, academic arcane magic. After a lecture, notes, and study, Alex learns a spell, the first spell he's ever learned. (during the notes there is a questionnaire, the answers given will determine the character's magical acuity, ranging from Illuminency (Offensive, Fire and Holy Magic), Teramancy (Offensive & Defensive Nature & Wind Magic), Sanaistry (Defensive and Supportive Holy Magic), or Atranistry (Offensive Dark & Ice Magic)), and based on THAT, the character will learn a different spell. There is a space gap after that, where he can talk to various people at the school, train at the gym (Strength training), study in the lecture hall (Intelligence Training), Go to archery training (Dexterity training), or hit the track and go for a jog (Agility Training). There are also various jobs he can do to gain money, simple tasks, some require technique, others are simple deliveries, others involve staying in one place for a time limit, and ultimately time is unlimited at the school, however training credits (A switch used at the start of each day at 100) are limited. There is no way to increase this number other than sleeping at home, and you can't do that until the story progresses in such a way that you are allowed to go to sleep. Ultimately he can go home whenever, and once he does the story takes a turn when he realises that the girl is missing. He cannot leave the house until he finds out why, which can be found in his room (the paper she asked for was used to make a diary), he learns that she went back to the forest. He goes in to find her en route to the forest, and explains to her that she can't just go back. She pushes him away, claiming she can do what she wants, and heads off again. He brings up the ManBearPig, and she realises what could happen to her. She goes with him back to the house, where she notices all the little differences in his life compared to her own. He decides that tomorrow she will accompany him to the school, where they can talk to the principal, a very smart and wise man.
That's the introduction to the plot. Let me note that the game is in production right now, but I just wanted to post it here to see if there are any discrepencies in the story.
This is long, but here it goes:
Possible Title: The Twilight Rune
Six years ago, a great tragedy happened upon the human land of Del'astaa. A powerful legion of great, giant demons attacked the capitol, laying everything to waste. Everything that is, except their objective. For an item was missing from the ruins of the Del'astaa Castle. A sacred object said to belong to an ancient sage, The Crimson Crown. In its place was the head of then Magus-King Giorgio Flamma; his body was never found.
???? (You choose the name) finds herself in a mysterious tomb inside a cave. Her vision is hazy, as is her memory. She can see a rusty old sword to her left, and to her right...a great creature. As she gets up to examine the creature, she realizes its dead. It was like a large eagle, with horns protruding from its head. Disoriented, she left the scene with sword in hand; after all, she knew not what danger lied within this cave.
As she exits the tomb into a cavern, she begins to fight snake-like creatures called Naga. As she continues to fight and defeat these serpentine creatures, she begins to remember who she was, what she was doing down there, and the events leading up to the present.
She remembers this wasn't the first time she lost her memory. For 8 years ago, when she was a 12 year old girl, she lost her mind upon seeing the destruction of Del'astaa and all the bloodshed. With none of the survivors knowing her, she was left with no other option then to forge a new identity, one with a single thing on its mind - Revenge.
She had sought an object to fight the monsters and demons, which had led her to this mysterious tomb - The Sacred Cavern of Aureus, where a sword said to have slain a demon long ago was sealed. Upon reaching the tomb she was attacked by its guardian, a great eagle-like bird. Regretting her decision, she turned around to run away when she saw him - a man donned in crimson robes.
The man stayed silent, and stared the creature in the eye. It was all ???? could do to remain standing. The man raised his hand, and unleashed a bolt of dark magicks, killing the great bird. Without moving a muscle, the man looked at her and she was suddenly tossed at the wall. The last thing she saw was the man's glowing white eyes. When she awoke, the sacred sword she sought was gone - in its place, a dull and rusted blade.
With her memories returned, she exited the cavern to find herself in a forest, overgrown with plants and filled with all manner of beast. As she continued walking through the forest, trying to avoid provoking the creatures within, she came face to face with a large spider. Though she tried to fight it, she was poisoned, silenced and paralyzed by the beast, leaving her helpless as it would feast on her. Just then, she heard a voice. A voice she longed for in what seemed like an eternity - the voice of another human.
"Scarlet Mists of the Eternal Flame, Ignite my fury and give it yours!'
As quick as lightning, what appeared to be a red bullet hit the spider. Suddenly, it burned up. Then, she heard gunshots, and what appeared to be ordinary metal bullets hit the creature. Greatly injured and weakened by the fire, the great spider fled.
Mysterious Man - "Velmorte, hard to find and hard to capture. No wonder it has such a bounty."
The man was old, wearing the clothing of a priest. In his hand was a strange gun; a type the girl had never seen before. He reached out his hand, and said a prayer to the girl. Though she could not understand the language, she knew it to be the tongue of priests. She felt a strange light upon her.
Mysterious Man - "You're no longer poisoned or silenced, however it seems the holy prayers cannot subdue Velmorte's unique poison."
The man was right. She could not longer feel the poison eating away at her body and she could now speak. However, she couldn't move most of her body.
Girl - "Thank you for saving me...I'm ????"
Man - "My name is Rufus. I must ask though, what were you doing in these woods? Trying to kill Velmorte?"
The girl quickly glanced at the sword, and said:
Girl - "No...that's not it."
Rufus - "That sword...could it be...?"
The girl stayed silent.
Rufus - "Never mind, it doesn't matter. What matters is getting you out of this forest. I can't well fight while carrying you, but I can still take you to my current home. It’s not to far from here, and we should be able to acquire the means to cure your paralysis. Is that alright?"
Girl - "Yes, thank you for your help."
Rufus took the girl out of the forest, avoiding all fights. From there, it was only a short distance to the city on the river, Xiphias.
After obtaining a cure, the girl was no longer paralyzed. From there, the man was to go back to the forest, to complete his original goal - obtain 20 spider hearts for an alchemist in a far way city. Though he already had 5 from before, he needed 15. Feeling guilty that her injury caused him to be unable to obtain the spider hearts earlier, the girl offers her services to Rufus. Though he initially refuses, the girl convinces him and the two return to the forest.
However, after killing 10 spiders, something strange happens. The old, rusted sword that the girl was wielding transforms into a pristine, but strange looking weapon. It now had eight smaller blades connected to the single, larger blade. It was dark indigo in color, with the tip of the blades bright red. On the front of the blade was a bright red symbol, resembling a spider. It was obvious this was no ordinary blade. Though the two were confused at what was going on, as they continued to fell the spiders, the girl realized that this sword's new form came with a new power - poison.
Rufus - "I see...this practically confirms my suspicions. Such a unique blade could not be found elsewhere. That's the Aureus, correct? A sword of legend..."
Girl - "I think so..."
*The girl tells the man what she remembers*
Rufus - "Right. Stories tell of a great bird who guards the sword, but I didn't think someone would actually be able to defeat this great creature! But why didn't that crimson robed man take the weapon with him?"
Girl - "I don't really know. Maybe he thought he had the wrong sword....after all, it was all old and rusty. Not very "legendary" like."
Rufus - "Hmmmm. Whatever the case, it seems the sword has chosen to fight for you. I cannot obje-"
Before Rufus could finish his though, he heard a great screech. Looking behind them, they saw it - the great spider, Velmorte, from before.
Rufus - "Looks like it hasn't forgotten our faces."
Girl - "Do you think we can beat it?"
Rufus - "Don't worry, I've brought plenty of the antidote...without its poisons, the beast will surely fall."
Rufus's prediction came true, and the two managed to defeat the beast. With 20 spider hearts, and the mighty head of Velmorte and a sample of its poison, the two leave the forest back to Xiphias.
Rufus obtains his reward for the spider hearts and killing Velmorte, but the girl refuses to split the reward with them.
Girl - "It's my fault you weren't able to do this quicker. Really, you can keep the money!"
Rufus reluctantly accepts, but a thought crosses his mind.
Rufus - "What is it you do for a living, ????"
Girl - "Me...well, nothing I guess."
Rufus - "That's a shame, with your abilities. How about you join up with me? We can complete missions twice as fast, and make a decent living."
Girl - "I don't know...I wouldn't want to burden you."
Rufus - "I know you wish to get revenge on the demons that destroyed Del'astaa. But now that you have a strong weapon, what do you intend to do? All of Del'astaa could not defeat these demons. Do you think you could?"
Girl - "Well..."
Rufus - "Please, listen to me. You don't even know where to begin your search. I'm sure if we continue to do missions together, sooner or later some clue will be found. What do you say?"
The girl couldn't help but accept. It was a generous offer, and she really didn't know how she would begin her search for these demons or if she could defeat them on her own.
So, the two continued to do missions around Xiphias. However, shortly afterwards, after obtaining a reward for a routine mission, they came across a small girl and a older boy, wearing dirty traveling robes.
Older Boy - "We'd like to re-register a mission, please."
The boy spoke very quietly.
Clerk - "Speak up, will ya! A mission ya say? What do ya want done, and what's the reward?"
Older Boy - "Um, well, we need someone to escort me and my sister-"
Clerk - " An escort mission, ya say? I figure the "from" is this town, but where do ya need to go?"
Younger Girl - "Out of this region, sir."
Clerk - "I see. Well, ya won't be able to take the boats from the port. The Golden Blades 'ave closed 'em, lookin' for some criminals I guess. A journey to the great bridge is a long and hard one, though. What kind of reward are you posting?"
Older Boy - "We can offer this."
The boy reached out his hand, and showed the clerk some money.
Clerk - "17 gold! A measly 17 gold!? You'd best take your business elsewhere, sonny. No self respectin' journeyman would do somethin' like this for 17 gold! Besides, our cut of the reward is 10%, with a minimum cut being 10 gold. You'd best save up 83 gold coins, or you'll be out of luck!"
Younger Girl - "Please, sir, it's all we have."
Clerk - "Sorry kid, I can't help ya..."
Older Boy - "I see...thank you for your time."
As the two walked out, Rufus couldn't help overhear. Offering the two a hot meal, he and ???? took the two travelers to his house. The older boy was named Joachim, and his sister was named Abigail. They lived in the capitol of this human region, Nordomus. It was then that Joachim told Rufus and ???? their story.
Since she was a little girl, Abigail had always had visions in her sleep. Visions of darkness and despair. Visions of demons. 6 years ago, when Abigail was 5 and Joachim was 13, she had a vision of the destruction of Del'astaa. Though she wanted to prevent it, their father had kept it a secret. For some time, Abigail and Joachim never understood why.
Recently, a small group of demons attacked a small village near the port. The village was small and obscure, having only a few houses and an inn for travelers. The ruling parties of the region wouldn't have noticed the attack until much later, except for the fact that Abigail and Joachim intervened. For you see, Abigail had a vision of this attack as well. Since by that time their father had passed away, Joachim decided the right thing to do would be to prevent the attack. Though none of the region's military force, the Golden Blades, would believe them, they sent out a few weaker members to investigate. A couple of weeks later, the few members returned with grim news. Immediately, Abigail and Joachim were placed under arrest. However, the two were able to escape, and fled across the region for help of any kind.
Because their arrest is only authorized for this region, they seek to leave it. For his own reasons, Rufus agrees to help the two. ???? decides to come along, for she believes that Abigail's connection to Del'astaa's demise is no mere coincidence. Thus, the two begin their mission, with little reward other than their own personal reasons.
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Characters:
Rufus Sceleris
Age: 63
Occupation: Journeyman and Priest
Abilities: Mistgun and Prayers
Rufus Sceleris is a mysterious man. After all, how often do you see a priest with a gun. However dark his past is, he keeps it a secret from everyone he knows (Which is not many people.)
His abilities include the prayers that all Priests can give, however that is not his most deadly weapon. That title belongs to his unique gun, a Mist gun. In this word, 'The Mist' is the force that gives those the ability to perform magick. Rufus can create specialized bullets out of this mist and use it to fire a special type of bullet called a 'Mist Bullet'. For example, by focusing on the element of fire, he can use a Fire Mist Bullet to cast what can be called a basic fire spell. Rufus starts out with the ability to create Fire Mist and Healing Mist bullets, but he will obtain more bullet types and even the ability to combine bullets throughout the game.
???? (You Name Her)
Age: 18
Occupation: Journeyman?
Abilities: The Golden Sword, Aureus
???? has had a troubled past. She was only 12 when the great tragedy struck Del'astaa , and the ruin afterwards made her lose her mind. She hasn't told anyone how she survived - perhaps she can't even remember. Though she doesn't know her original name, she remembers certain things about her past. After the Del'astaa incident, she forged herself a new name and identity, one with the singular mindset of getting revenge.
Using her sword, Aureus (Which is not really golden), she can use many sword techniques that she has learned throughout her travels. However, the unique ability of Aureus is the ability to transform. After transforming, the blade unleashes a new technique. From then on, the sword will remain transformed until the battle is over, granting certain bonuses. For example, the first transformation of Aureus is 'Black Venom', which gives it a new appearance and grants it the power to apply a random poison to the enemy. New transformations can be unlocked after certain requirements, such as killing a number of a creature or even defeating a boss. Some are acquired as the story progresses, while others remain a secret for only the most dedicated of players.
Joachim
Age: 19
Occupation: None
Abilities: None
Joachim cannot really fight more than an ordinary man, but he and his sister on the run from the Golden Blades, military force of the Nordomus region, for suspicion of being involved in the destruction of a village and consorting with demons.
Abigail
Age: 11
Occupation: None
Abilities: Can see visions in her sleep
Abigail is a young girl, but carries a heavy burden. In her dreams, she sees visions. Visions of darkness and war. Visions of death. Visions of demons and all their kind, wreaking havoc upon the word. From a young age, Abigail has only seen these nightmares. One day, recently, she saw another vision of destruction. Hoping to prevent it, she and her brother told the Golden Blades. Though laughed at at first, they went from laughing stock to suspects as her prediction came to be true. Now, with her brother, she is on the run and wishes to flee the region.
Though there are only two party members at first, there are three more characters. However, I feel it unnecessary to talk about them now, considering they don't come into play until later in the game.
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Features of the game:
One thing about this game you may notice is the unique weapons of the characters. Because of this, I have decided to forgo an armor/weapon system. Though the entire system is still being worked out, one thing for certain is the addition of equippable "augmentations". These augmentations can be equipped to increase attack power, defense, agility, e.t.c. Because every character can equip these, something needs to be done so a caster can't have the highest defense. That is why I will try to implement a "Potential" system. For example, at level 99, a caster might have an Intelligence potential of 999. However, that same characters physical defense potential might be only 300. This way, even with the best augmentations, you can't have an overpowered "can take any hit, can kill any creature" characters. However, if you're at level 99, I doubt much will stand in your way anyway, lol.
Also, so far I've been working on the world map. Some of the details are incomplete, but the basic structure is done.
BIG IMAGE
Those with a good eye might see a strangely shaped lake. Well, your eyes aren't wrong. Here's a closeup:
NOT SO BIG IMAGE
I did my best to make it look like the other bodies of water in the VX RTP. As you can see, I used that 'dragon' tile in the VX RTP as a base.
Why is it shaped like that? One of the many secrets in the game that will be found out....eventually.
Other systems are being though of, which is one of the reasons I'm posting this here instead of a project thread. Well, please tell me what you think.
Possible Title: The Twilight Rune
Six years ago, a great tragedy happened upon the human land of Del'astaa. A powerful legion of great, giant demons attacked the capitol, laying everything to waste. Everything that is, except their objective. For an item was missing from the ruins of the Del'astaa Castle. A sacred object said to belong to an ancient sage, The Crimson Crown. In its place was the head of then Magus-King Giorgio Flamma; his body was never found.
???? (You choose the name) finds herself in a mysterious tomb inside a cave. Her vision is hazy, as is her memory. She can see a rusty old sword to her left, and to her right...a great creature. As she gets up to examine the creature, she realizes its dead. It was like a large eagle, with horns protruding from its head. Disoriented, she left the scene with sword in hand; after all, she knew not what danger lied within this cave.
As she exits the tomb into a cavern, she begins to fight snake-like creatures called Naga. As she continues to fight and defeat these serpentine creatures, she begins to remember who she was, what she was doing down there, and the events leading up to the present.
She remembers this wasn't the first time she lost her memory. For 8 years ago, when she was a 12 year old girl, she lost her mind upon seeing the destruction of Del'astaa and all the bloodshed. With none of the survivors knowing her, she was left with no other option then to forge a new identity, one with a single thing on its mind - Revenge.
She had sought an object to fight the monsters and demons, which had led her to this mysterious tomb - The Sacred Cavern of Aureus, where a sword said to have slain a demon long ago was sealed. Upon reaching the tomb she was attacked by its guardian, a great eagle-like bird. Regretting her decision, she turned around to run away when she saw him - a man donned in crimson robes.
The man stayed silent, and stared the creature in the eye. It was all ???? could do to remain standing. The man raised his hand, and unleashed a bolt of dark magicks, killing the great bird. Without moving a muscle, the man looked at her and she was suddenly tossed at the wall. The last thing she saw was the man's glowing white eyes. When she awoke, the sacred sword she sought was gone - in its place, a dull and rusted blade.
With her memories returned, she exited the cavern to find herself in a forest, overgrown with plants and filled with all manner of beast. As she continued walking through the forest, trying to avoid provoking the creatures within, she came face to face with a large spider. Though she tried to fight it, she was poisoned, silenced and paralyzed by the beast, leaving her helpless as it would feast on her. Just then, she heard a voice. A voice she longed for in what seemed like an eternity - the voice of another human.
"Scarlet Mists of the Eternal Flame, Ignite my fury and give it yours!'
As quick as lightning, what appeared to be a red bullet hit the spider. Suddenly, it burned up. Then, she heard gunshots, and what appeared to be ordinary metal bullets hit the creature. Greatly injured and weakened by the fire, the great spider fled.
Mysterious Man - "Velmorte, hard to find and hard to capture. No wonder it has such a bounty."
The man was old, wearing the clothing of a priest. In his hand was a strange gun; a type the girl had never seen before. He reached out his hand, and said a prayer to the girl. Though she could not understand the language, she knew it to be the tongue of priests. She felt a strange light upon her.
Mysterious Man - "You're no longer poisoned or silenced, however it seems the holy prayers cannot subdue Velmorte's unique poison."
The man was right. She could not longer feel the poison eating away at her body and she could now speak. However, she couldn't move most of her body.
Girl - "Thank you for saving me...I'm ????"
Man - "My name is Rufus. I must ask though, what were you doing in these woods? Trying to kill Velmorte?"
The girl quickly glanced at the sword, and said:
Girl - "No...that's not it."
Rufus - "That sword...could it be...?"
The girl stayed silent.
Rufus - "Never mind, it doesn't matter. What matters is getting you out of this forest. I can't well fight while carrying you, but I can still take you to my current home. It’s not to far from here, and we should be able to acquire the means to cure your paralysis. Is that alright?"
Girl - "Yes, thank you for your help."
Rufus took the girl out of the forest, avoiding all fights. From there, it was only a short distance to the city on the river, Xiphias.
After obtaining a cure, the girl was no longer paralyzed. From there, the man was to go back to the forest, to complete his original goal - obtain 20 spider hearts for an alchemist in a far way city. Though he already had 5 from before, he needed 15. Feeling guilty that her injury caused him to be unable to obtain the spider hearts earlier, the girl offers her services to Rufus. Though he initially refuses, the girl convinces him and the two return to the forest.
However, after killing 10 spiders, something strange happens. The old, rusted sword that the girl was wielding transforms into a pristine, but strange looking weapon. It now had eight smaller blades connected to the single, larger blade. It was dark indigo in color, with the tip of the blades bright red. On the front of the blade was a bright red symbol, resembling a spider. It was obvious this was no ordinary blade. Though the two were confused at what was going on, as they continued to fell the spiders, the girl realized that this sword's new form came with a new power - poison.
Rufus - "I see...this practically confirms my suspicions. Such a unique blade could not be found elsewhere. That's the Aureus, correct? A sword of legend..."
Girl - "I think so..."
*The girl tells the man what she remembers*
Rufus - "Right. Stories tell of a great bird who guards the sword, but I didn't think someone would actually be able to defeat this great creature! But why didn't that crimson robed man take the weapon with him?"
Girl - "I don't really know. Maybe he thought he had the wrong sword....after all, it was all old and rusty. Not very "legendary" like."
Rufus - "Hmmmm. Whatever the case, it seems the sword has chosen to fight for you. I cannot obje-"
Before Rufus could finish his though, he heard a great screech. Looking behind them, they saw it - the great spider, Velmorte, from before.
Rufus - "Looks like it hasn't forgotten our faces."
Girl - "Do you think we can beat it?"
Rufus - "Don't worry, I've brought plenty of the antidote...without its poisons, the beast will surely fall."
Rufus's prediction came true, and the two managed to defeat the beast. With 20 spider hearts, and the mighty head of Velmorte and a sample of its poison, the two leave the forest back to Xiphias.
Rufus obtains his reward for the spider hearts and killing Velmorte, but the girl refuses to split the reward with them.
Girl - "It's my fault you weren't able to do this quicker. Really, you can keep the money!"
Rufus reluctantly accepts, but a thought crosses his mind.
Rufus - "What is it you do for a living, ????"
Girl - "Me...well, nothing I guess."
Rufus - "That's a shame, with your abilities. How about you join up with me? We can complete missions twice as fast, and make a decent living."
Girl - "I don't know...I wouldn't want to burden you."
Rufus - "I know you wish to get revenge on the demons that destroyed Del'astaa. But now that you have a strong weapon, what do you intend to do? All of Del'astaa could not defeat these demons. Do you think you could?"
Girl - "Well..."
Rufus - "Please, listen to me. You don't even know where to begin your search. I'm sure if we continue to do missions together, sooner or later some clue will be found. What do you say?"
The girl couldn't help but accept. It was a generous offer, and she really didn't know how she would begin her search for these demons or if she could defeat them on her own.
So, the two continued to do missions around Xiphias. However, shortly afterwards, after obtaining a reward for a routine mission, they came across a small girl and a older boy, wearing dirty traveling robes.
Older Boy - "We'd like to re-register a mission, please."
The boy spoke very quietly.
Clerk - "Speak up, will ya! A mission ya say? What do ya want done, and what's the reward?"
Older Boy - "Um, well, we need someone to escort me and my sister-"
Clerk - " An escort mission, ya say? I figure the "from" is this town, but where do ya need to go?"
Younger Girl - "Out of this region, sir."
Clerk - "I see. Well, ya won't be able to take the boats from the port. The Golden Blades 'ave closed 'em, lookin' for some criminals I guess. A journey to the great bridge is a long and hard one, though. What kind of reward are you posting?"
Older Boy - "We can offer this."
The boy reached out his hand, and showed the clerk some money.
Clerk - "17 gold! A measly 17 gold!? You'd best take your business elsewhere, sonny. No self respectin' journeyman would do somethin' like this for 17 gold! Besides, our cut of the reward is 10%, with a minimum cut being 10 gold. You'd best save up 83 gold coins, or you'll be out of luck!"
Younger Girl - "Please, sir, it's all we have."
Clerk - "Sorry kid, I can't help ya..."
Older Boy - "I see...thank you for your time."
As the two walked out, Rufus couldn't help overhear. Offering the two a hot meal, he and ???? took the two travelers to his house. The older boy was named Joachim, and his sister was named Abigail. They lived in the capitol of this human region, Nordomus. It was then that Joachim told Rufus and ???? their story.
Since she was a little girl, Abigail had always had visions in her sleep. Visions of darkness and despair. Visions of demons. 6 years ago, when Abigail was 5 and Joachim was 13, she had a vision of the destruction of Del'astaa. Though she wanted to prevent it, their father had kept it a secret. For some time, Abigail and Joachim never understood why.
Recently, a small group of demons attacked a small village near the port. The village was small and obscure, having only a few houses and an inn for travelers. The ruling parties of the region wouldn't have noticed the attack until much later, except for the fact that Abigail and Joachim intervened. For you see, Abigail had a vision of this attack as well. Since by that time their father had passed away, Joachim decided the right thing to do would be to prevent the attack. Though none of the region's military force, the Golden Blades, would believe them, they sent out a few weaker members to investigate. A couple of weeks later, the few members returned with grim news. Immediately, Abigail and Joachim were placed under arrest. However, the two were able to escape, and fled across the region for help of any kind.
Because their arrest is only authorized for this region, they seek to leave it. For his own reasons, Rufus agrees to help the two. ???? decides to come along, for she believes that Abigail's connection to Del'astaa's demise is no mere coincidence. Thus, the two begin their mission, with little reward other than their own personal reasons.
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Characters:
Rufus Sceleris
Age: 63
Occupation: Journeyman and Priest
Abilities: Mistgun and Prayers
Rufus Sceleris is a mysterious man. After all, how often do you see a priest with a gun. However dark his past is, he keeps it a secret from everyone he knows (Which is not many people.)
His abilities include the prayers that all Priests can give, however that is not his most deadly weapon. That title belongs to his unique gun, a Mist gun. In this word, 'The Mist' is the force that gives those the ability to perform magick. Rufus can create specialized bullets out of this mist and use it to fire a special type of bullet called a 'Mist Bullet'. For example, by focusing on the element of fire, he can use a Fire Mist Bullet to cast what can be called a basic fire spell. Rufus starts out with the ability to create Fire Mist and Healing Mist bullets, but he will obtain more bullet types and even the ability to combine bullets throughout the game.
???? (You Name Her)
Age: 18
Occupation: Journeyman?
Abilities: The Golden Sword, Aureus
???? has had a troubled past. She was only 12 when the great tragedy struck Del'astaa , and the ruin afterwards made her lose her mind. She hasn't told anyone how she survived - perhaps she can't even remember. Though she doesn't know her original name, she remembers certain things about her past. After the Del'astaa incident, she forged herself a new name and identity, one with the singular mindset of getting revenge.
Using her sword, Aureus (Which is not really golden), she can use many sword techniques that she has learned throughout her travels. However, the unique ability of Aureus is the ability to transform. After transforming, the blade unleashes a new technique. From then on, the sword will remain transformed until the battle is over, granting certain bonuses. For example, the first transformation of Aureus is 'Black Venom', which gives it a new appearance and grants it the power to apply a random poison to the enemy. New transformations can be unlocked after certain requirements, such as killing a number of a creature or even defeating a boss. Some are acquired as the story progresses, while others remain a secret for only the most dedicated of players.
Joachim
Age: 19
Occupation: None
Abilities: None
Joachim cannot really fight more than an ordinary man, but he and his sister on the run from the Golden Blades, military force of the Nordomus region, for suspicion of being involved in the destruction of a village and consorting with demons.
Abigail
Age: 11
Occupation: None
Abilities: Can see visions in her sleep
Abigail is a young girl, but carries a heavy burden. In her dreams, she sees visions. Visions of darkness and war. Visions of death. Visions of demons and all their kind, wreaking havoc upon the word. From a young age, Abigail has only seen these nightmares. One day, recently, she saw another vision of destruction. Hoping to prevent it, she and her brother told the Golden Blades. Though laughed at at first, they went from laughing stock to suspects as her prediction came to be true. Now, with her brother, she is on the run and wishes to flee the region.
Though there are only two party members at first, there are three more characters. However, I feel it unnecessary to talk about them now, considering they don't come into play until later in the game.
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Features of the game:
One thing about this game you may notice is the unique weapons of the characters. Because of this, I have decided to forgo an armor/weapon system. Though the entire system is still being worked out, one thing for certain is the addition of equippable "augmentations". These augmentations can be equipped to increase attack power, defense, agility, e.t.c. Because every character can equip these, something needs to be done so a caster can't have the highest defense. That is why I will try to implement a "Potential" system. For example, at level 99, a caster might have an Intelligence potential of 999. However, that same characters physical defense potential might be only 300. This way, even with the best augmentations, you can't have an overpowered "can take any hit, can kill any creature" characters. However, if you're at level 99, I doubt much will stand in your way anyway, lol.
Also, so far I've been working on the world map. Some of the details are incomplete, but the basic structure is done.
BIG IMAGE
Those with a good eye might see a strangely shaped lake. Well, your eyes aren't wrong. Here's a closeup:
NOT SO BIG IMAGE
I did my best to make it look like the other bodies of water in the VX RTP. As you can see, I used that 'dragon' tile in the VX RTP as a base.
Why is it shaped like that? One of the many secrets in the game that will be found out....eventually.
Other systems are being though of, which is one of the reasons I'm posting this here instead of a project thread. Well, please tell me what you think.
Eriol Clowphengire
Member
Cardcaptor Hatsuya / Dung Beetle's Rainbow Opera
IDEA INSPIRED FROM: El-Hazard, RAN Online, RF Online, Final Fantasy Tactics
Year 2015, in an alternate Earth named Daidigas,
Seven Great Universities all over the nation of Lux-Xas'reah have secret paths to seven different underground cities rumored to be made by advanced civilizations. Those cities rumored to hold seven living artifacts that can destroy all Earths at once, including Daidigas.
Now, a united group of senior students from different Great Universities wanted to harness the powers of the seven ancient cities and thus created different demons, attracted aliens, post-humanization was made possible and the seniors began to exhibit godly powers.
Hatoru Munakata, and his friends from different universities must stop the Valedictoria Mortus and the seven double-edged technologies from being triggered!
Seven Universities, Seven Technologies: (two will be revealed)
Nora Engravias Sacred Science University
The first Great University established in Lux-Xas'reah and built in Arroyo-2 Plateau. This university specializes in utilizing the sacred arcane energy called "Pwersa Vita" and they have exclusive courses that teaches students how to harness the Pwersa Vita in saving lives and eliminating dark forces using the mentioned arcane force.
FORBIDDEN TECHNOLOGY: Eden Unit
This technology can cause a wide-spread change to one's ecosystem, either it can turn a desert into a lush plain or forests or for worse, turn oceans into unexplainable purple goo without any scientific studies to replicate a technology like this!
Hessler Arongard Technology & Science University
The is the first Great University associated to different computer-related and robotic-related companies across the world. The graduates of this school were immediately turned into software developers, roboticists, doujin game designers, and even cyber-sport athletes!
FORBIDDEN TECHNOLOGY: Noriko, the shape-shifting androgynous mega-computer bishounen
A sentient androgynous mega-computer in a form of a bishounen that holds information about anything, absolutely everything! This android-computer when used in wrong hands and got along with the rest of the forbidden technologies, Magno Arko will definitely kill all religions of different worlds and all should worship HIM/HER alone!
IDEA INSPIRED FROM: El-Hazard, RAN Online, RF Online, Final Fantasy Tactics
Year 2015, in an alternate Earth named Daidigas,
Seven Great Universities all over the nation of Lux-Xas'reah have secret paths to seven different underground cities rumored to be made by advanced civilizations. Those cities rumored to hold seven living artifacts that can destroy all Earths at once, including Daidigas.
Now, a united group of senior students from different Great Universities wanted to harness the powers of the seven ancient cities and thus created different demons, attracted aliens, post-humanization was made possible and the seniors began to exhibit godly powers.
Hatoru Munakata, and his friends from different universities must stop the Valedictoria Mortus and the seven double-edged technologies from being triggered!
Seven Universities, Seven Technologies: (two will be revealed)
Nora Engravias Sacred Science University
The first Great University established in Lux-Xas'reah and built in Arroyo-2 Plateau. This university specializes in utilizing the sacred arcane energy called "Pwersa Vita" and they have exclusive courses that teaches students how to harness the Pwersa Vita in saving lives and eliminating dark forces using the mentioned arcane force.
FORBIDDEN TECHNOLOGY: Eden Unit
This technology can cause a wide-spread change to one's ecosystem, either it can turn a desert into a lush plain or forests or for worse, turn oceans into unexplainable purple goo without any scientific studies to replicate a technology like this!
Hessler Arongard Technology & Science University
The is the first Great University associated to different computer-related and robotic-related companies across the world. The graduates of this school were immediately turned into software developers, roboticists, doujin game designers, and even cyber-sport athletes!
FORBIDDEN TECHNOLOGY: Noriko, the shape-shifting androgynous mega-computer bishounen
A sentient androgynous mega-computer in a form of a bishounen that holds information about anything, absolutely everything! This android-computer when used in wrong hands and got along with the rest of the forbidden technologies, Magno Arko will definitely kill all religions of different worlds and all should worship HIM/HER alone!
Random idea about magic and healing especially in my project:
All people in my world of Althenia have two parts to their bodies - the physical body and the spirit. Healing magics exist and can mend wounds in the body to a degree, but damage to the spirit cannot heal so easily, and it is possible for someone to die because the damage to their spirit is too great, even if their physical wounds are minor (hence, in this world, you could take a raging firestorm but a single stab from a longsword could kill you, if the sword stab was directed mainly against your spirit)
Magic exists in six elements, represented by the points of a hexagram. One set is Soul (Light), Ice / Water, and Wind / Thunder, the other is Darkness, Fire and Earth. The overlapping of the two triangles represents the way that the magics coexist, opposing elements are opposite each other. The space in the middle represents the raw, untamed power of creation that all magic is born from. Magic is cast by summoning power from the air and the elements, as well as infusing it with one's spirit (so in theory magic's strength depends on the spirit of the caster more than anything else).
Healing magic is an offshoot of the Soul Magic school, it involves an element of time magic to accelerate healing, as well as other elements to bind wounds together (i.e. an element of fire magic is used to cauterize wounds before healing them, thunder magic is gently used to revive those who have passed out, etc). It's mainly been developed by sorcerors down the generations to both serve as a demonstration of how to utilise all the elements regardless of innate skill (as most people lean toward one element or another by virtue of their birth).
The catch with healing magic is that to mend damage to the spirit, a small amount of the caster's spirit is infused into the person being healed. Expert healers can control this, but novices who use the power incorrectly can find themselves bound in heart and spirit to the one who they are trying to heal. Overusing healing magic on the same person also has this effect. It's not as absolute as "instant falling in love" but if there are already feelings between the couple, the result is they will develop deeper feelings. The effect also does not generally manifest in typical wounds, but in near-fatal wounds.
All people in my world of Althenia have two parts to their bodies - the physical body and the spirit. Healing magics exist and can mend wounds in the body to a degree, but damage to the spirit cannot heal so easily, and it is possible for someone to die because the damage to their spirit is too great, even if their physical wounds are minor (hence, in this world, you could take a raging firestorm but a single stab from a longsword could kill you, if the sword stab was directed mainly against your spirit)
Magic exists in six elements, represented by the points of a hexagram. One set is Soul (Light), Ice / Water, and Wind / Thunder, the other is Darkness, Fire and Earth. The overlapping of the two triangles represents the way that the magics coexist, opposing elements are opposite each other. The space in the middle represents the raw, untamed power of creation that all magic is born from. Magic is cast by summoning power from the air and the elements, as well as infusing it with one's spirit (so in theory magic's strength depends on the spirit of the caster more than anything else).
Healing magic is an offshoot of the Soul Magic school, it involves an element of time magic to accelerate healing, as well as other elements to bind wounds together (i.e. an element of fire magic is used to cauterize wounds before healing them, thunder magic is gently used to revive those who have passed out, etc). It's mainly been developed by sorcerors down the generations to both serve as a demonstration of how to utilise all the elements regardless of innate skill (as most people lean toward one element or another by virtue of their birth).
The catch with healing magic is that to mend damage to the spirit, a small amount of the caster's spirit is infused into the person being healed. Expert healers can control this, but novices who use the power incorrectly can find themselves bound in heart and spirit to the one who they are trying to heal. Overusing healing magic on the same person also has this effect. It's not as absolute as "instant falling in love" but if there are already feelings between the couple, the result is they will develop deeper feelings. The effect also does not generally manifest in typical wounds, but in near-fatal wounds.
This is the concept for a game I am making. Please comment and suggest a better title.
In the land Litteron, the war between two armies, the Palanthians and the Selinars, has escalated to a great battle in the Valley of Lidea. The Palanthians defeated the Selinars and captured a major trade town, Compton. However, the people of Compton dislike the occupying Palanthians and there is much rebel activity. Regardless, the Palanthians continue on their war path, trying to reach the Selinars' capital city of Trebelem.
Chris is a young man, around 18 years old, who enlists in the Palanthian army after a Selinar assassin murders his brother outside and inn in Grena, a port town. He seeks revenge but is not a very strong fighter. Because of his weakness he is left in Compton to be a guard. His story involves his quest to find the assassin and avenge his brother, but in classic RPG form he gets involved in something much deeper.
At the same time a girl of about the same age named Moon bartends in Compton. She strongly dislikes the occupying Palanthians but turns down and offer to join a rebel group called the Crystal Crusaders. However, when a brawl starts a fire that destroys the bar and kills her boss, Mitch, whom she was in love with, she attempts to avenge him by tracking down the man that started the brawl. And yes, things get out of control.
The story continues as Chris and Moon try to find the killers and accomplish other missions. The two characters provide the player with different perspectives into the war. For example, Moon eventually joins the Crystal Crusaders while Chris is constantly fending them off. The paths of the two intertwine and eventually join. Beating the game not only reveals many secrets (most of which are not yet planned) but also allows the player to explore the game even further
That is my idea. Any suggestions are greatly appreciated.
In the land Litteron, the war between two armies, the Palanthians and the Selinars, has escalated to a great battle in the Valley of Lidea. The Palanthians defeated the Selinars and captured a major trade town, Compton. However, the people of Compton dislike the occupying Palanthians and there is much rebel activity. Regardless, the Palanthians continue on their war path, trying to reach the Selinars' capital city of Trebelem.
Chris is a young man, around 18 years old, who enlists in the Palanthian army after a Selinar assassin murders his brother outside and inn in Grena, a port town. He seeks revenge but is not a very strong fighter. Because of his weakness he is left in Compton to be a guard. His story involves his quest to find the assassin and avenge his brother, but in classic RPG form he gets involved in something much deeper.
At the same time a girl of about the same age named Moon bartends in Compton. She strongly dislikes the occupying Palanthians but turns down and offer to join a rebel group called the Crystal Crusaders. However, when a brawl starts a fire that destroys the bar and kills her boss, Mitch, whom she was in love with, she attempts to avenge him by tracking down the man that started the brawl. And yes, things get out of control.
The story continues as Chris and Moon try to find the killers and accomplish other missions. The two characters provide the player with different perspectives into the war. For example, Moon eventually joins the Crystal Crusaders while Chris is constantly fending them off. The paths of the two intertwine and eventually join. Beating the game not only reveals many secrets (most of which are not yet planned) but also allows the player to explore the game even further
When the game is beaten the player can restart from the beginning, only this time they get to play as the assassin. The man that killed Chris's brother and started the bar fight in Moon's tavern is the same man. The player will get to see his entire life, his reasons for killing, and get a couple extra (hopefully fun) hours out of the game.
That is my idea. Any suggestions are greatly appreciated.
The Cry of Fallen Angels
Member
Kaze950, it's a fine and solid story I s'pose. I think you'd best work out your systems as they sound the most interesting.
Dung Beetle, I have no clue how the game will be like, simply because you're not showing any atmosphere but just sum up some information. On a sidenote, why students? I can see a group of students that tries to use these technologies, but why would another group of students stop them? I mean like wouldn't it be better if they'd just tell the police or whatever? Of course you will like working with a group of young men and women more than a middle aged officer, but y'gotta have reasons.
Np_Pro, it has potential if done correctly, but a premise is only a premise. I suggest you plan out the bigger lines before going very in-depth.
Dung Beetle, I have no clue how the game will be like, simply because you're not showing any atmosphere but just sum up some information. On a sidenote, why students? I can see a group of students that tries to use these technologies, but why would another group of students stop them? I mean like wouldn't it be better if they'd just tell the police or whatever? Of course you will like working with a group of young men and women more than a middle aged officer, but y'gotta have reasons.
Np_Pro, it has potential if done correctly, but a premise is only a premise. I suggest you plan out the bigger lines before going very in-depth.
Eriol Clowphengire
Member
@The Cry of Fallen Angels: Cops are a bit powerless & scared on my Rainbow Opera game. Think of this as a tactical rendition to RAN Online (Rival School x Demon MMORPG!)
STAR SAVIOR SHINEGATE (S3) PROJECT [now called WALBRUNHILD Shinegate]
(this project had several inspirations from Gransazers, Justirisers, Masked Rider Ryuuki, Faiz, Blade, Kabuto, Agito, Den-O and Kiva)
A transdimensional syndicate taking form of teenagers arrived on Maelgrad to find thirteen God Walbrunhilds (sentient powered battle armors) all over Dischel Republic. These thirteen Walbrunhilds can be combined with a dark crystal under their possession and it can make a living battleship rumored to end all Earths (including Maelgrad)!
Now, fifteen teenagers were blessed with different means to become a Libreador (Liberator Knight) Walbrunhild.
Hatoru Munakata isn't your typical dual buster sword protagonist but instead, a green-haired 17-year old gay "red mage" capable of turning himself into a mage in a Masked Rider / metal hero motif by having a green cat cling on his head first! (Inspired from Kamen Rider KIVA)
Hatoru is a bisexual mass communication student in Shirahime University. He was one of the school's top news writers and even bagged five major awards in campus journalism category. Well, he lived in a family of beauticians and his brothers were gay and nearly wanted to be gay like showbiz talk show hosts and news writers. Say, Hatoru also likes cross-dressing and some even say that he looked like a girl, thanks to his long green hair.
Kuuja Maehara's the brawler of this game and to be a Walbrunhild, he has to wear his gauntlet and transform into a Monk-type Walbrunhild!
Kuuja is one of the top information technology students in Yamamoto Akai Computer University, and known in interschool debates. He was also a black-belter taekwondo moderator in the university. Kuuja lived in a well-off yet broken family of system analysts and web designers and he never knew that his father died after he was born.
STAR SAVIOR SHINEGATE (S3) PROJECT [now called WALBRUNHILD Shinegate]
(this project had several inspirations from Gransazers, Justirisers, Masked Rider Ryuuki, Faiz, Blade, Kabuto, Agito, Den-O and Kiva)
A transdimensional syndicate taking form of teenagers arrived on Maelgrad to find thirteen God Walbrunhilds (sentient powered battle armors) all over Dischel Republic. These thirteen Walbrunhilds can be combined with a dark crystal under their possession and it can make a living battleship rumored to end all Earths (including Maelgrad)!
Now, fifteen teenagers were blessed with different means to become a Libreador (Liberator Knight) Walbrunhild.
Hatoru Munakata isn't your typical dual buster sword protagonist but instead, a green-haired 17-year old gay "red mage" capable of turning himself into a mage in a Masked Rider / metal hero motif by having a green cat cling on his head first! (Inspired from Kamen Rider KIVA)
Hatoru is a bisexual mass communication student in Shirahime University. He was one of the school's top news writers and even bagged five major awards in campus journalism category. Well, he lived in a family of beauticians and his brothers were gay and nearly wanted to be gay like showbiz talk show hosts and news writers. Say, Hatoru also likes cross-dressing and some even say that he looked like a girl, thanks to his long green hair.
Kuuja Maehara's the brawler of this game and to be a Walbrunhild, he has to wear his gauntlet and transform into a Monk-type Walbrunhild!
Kuuja is one of the top information technology students in Yamamoto Akai Computer University, and known in interschool debates. He was also a black-belter taekwondo moderator in the university. Kuuja lived in a well-off yet broken family of system analysts and web designers and he never knew that his father died after he was born.
Yeah, and that's always the hard part. I'm no scripter, so I'm just going to work on the eventing and stuff. Waiting and waiting for a scripter to come along and make such a system does nothing and I'd probably have better luck recruiting one if my game has some actually substance and development.
I see you still have my quote in your sig, lol >_>
Oooh! Useful thread!
I've been planning a little game for a while now, but I've been focusing a lot more on the gaming system than the plot. I'm hoping to make it a side-scroller a la Princess Crown and the like, but naturally this would require a fairly large amount of coding (which I have no idea how to do) and a lot of custom graphics (which I can do easily, but it takes a lot of time). That's pretty much the game I've had in my mind for, well, years now. Should I abandon it, though, for default features? Or would perhaps an ABS and a different up/down movement speed to create the illusion of perspective be enough?
And for the hell of it, here's my plot so far:
You take on the role of Lance, a squire who was taken in by a knightly order when he was very young. He's lived a life focused on the study of swordsmanship and knightly values, working to earn his own knighthood. One day though, the castle which he and his knights occupy is assaulted by a barbarian army. The knights valiantly try to hold the army off, but their seemingly easy victory is taken from them when it's revealed that the barbarian leader hsa the ability to summon demons. The castle is quickly overrun, and the head knight only manages to send a few of his bravest to safety.
Lance and the others decide the wisest course of action is to contact the other knightly orders of the kingdom and build up an allience against the new threat. When Lance reaches the castle he set out for, however, he finds it in ruins. He searches the countryside for survivers, and finds an old swordsman who mans a border outpost. He tells Lance that the barbarians have always been a threat to their kingdom, but now they have become allies to monsters and demons, they're an unstopable threat. Lance is determined to stop them, and the old man decides to show him a special sword, which had been passed down through the generations since the earliest days of the kingdom, when the barbarians were driven into the northern wilderness. Legend has it that the weilder of the sword would be an unstoppable hero, and the old man chooses to let Lance use the sword until the threat is defeated, or he finds one more worthy to weild it.
However, the weapon is incomplete and not at all as powerful as it should be. The blade of the sword once held a number of small magic stones which gave it magical powers, as well as making it a far more potent weapon. He suggests Lance should go to the capital and seek out the mage library to find out what happened to them. Lance accepts this quest, and goes out into the world.
As the game continues, the quest for the magic stones takes Lance and his companions all over the kingdom, in which he encounters some of the surviving knights and squires from his order, and becomes the unlikely leader of an alliance of them. I have not developed the plot far past this, but I was thinking the army would eventually hold out against the invading army in a huge seige, and then Lance and the rest of the party would have to travel alone to the barbarian lord's castle to defeat him once and for all.
Not my best work, but meh...
I've been planning a little game for a while now, but I've been focusing a lot more on the gaming system than the plot. I'm hoping to make it a side-scroller a la Princess Crown and the like, but naturally this would require a fairly large amount of coding (which I have no idea how to do) and a lot of custom graphics (which I can do easily, but it takes a lot of time). That's pretty much the game I've had in my mind for, well, years now. Should I abandon it, though, for default features? Or would perhaps an ABS and a different up/down movement speed to create the illusion of perspective be enough?
And for the hell of it, here's my plot so far:
You take on the role of Lance, a squire who was taken in by a knightly order when he was very young. He's lived a life focused on the study of swordsmanship and knightly values, working to earn his own knighthood. One day though, the castle which he and his knights occupy is assaulted by a barbarian army. The knights valiantly try to hold the army off, but their seemingly easy victory is taken from them when it's revealed that the barbarian leader hsa the ability to summon demons. The castle is quickly overrun, and the head knight only manages to send a few of his bravest to safety.
Lance and the others decide the wisest course of action is to contact the other knightly orders of the kingdom and build up an allience against the new threat. When Lance reaches the castle he set out for, however, he finds it in ruins. He searches the countryside for survivers, and finds an old swordsman who mans a border outpost. He tells Lance that the barbarians have always been a threat to their kingdom, but now they have become allies to monsters and demons, they're an unstopable threat. Lance is determined to stop them, and the old man decides to show him a special sword, which had been passed down through the generations since the earliest days of the kingdom, when the barbarians were driven into the northern wilderness. Legend has it that the weilder of the sword would be an unstoppable hero, and the old man chooses to let Lance use the sword until the threat is defeated, or he finds one more worthy to weild it.
However, the weapon is incomplete and not at all as powerful as it should be. The blade of the sword once held a number of small magic stones which gave it magical powers, as well as making it a far more potent weapon. He suggests Lance should go to the capital and seek out the mage library to find out what happened to them. Lance accepts this quest, and goes out into the world.
As the game continues, the quest for the magic stones takes Lance and his companions all over the kingdom, in which he encounters some of the surviving knights and squires from his order, and becomes the unlikely leader of an alliance of them. I have not developed the plot far past this, but I was thinking the army would eventually hold out against the invading army in a huge seige, and then Lance and the rest of the party would have to travel alone to the barbarian lord's castle to defeat him once and for all.
Not my best work, but meh...
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