that's rather spiffy,
zchin! i ... can't quite tell what the heck is going on with her dress though. it has ... a lot of parts o_o
@mawk:
the neck is really really wide. also the eyes are off and some of the facial proportions. i scribbled out a diagram.
the red lines indicate some positioning/blocking lines. I drew a horizontal line through the face that indicates the face's "equator", so to speak (tried to compensate for the tilt of the page in the photo). The eyes should run along it. Pupils should be in relatively similar zones along the "equator".
the vertical arc would be the "meridian" of the face. The centers of the nose and lips should follow it (they're close but somewhat off).
the fellow has a very thick face, but the jaw does not compensate for it, implying that the guy has a sort of ... inverted triangle for a face. Which DOES happen, but not usually in people with a strong chin or a jawline strong enough to be thickly outlined.
the ears need to be within the longitudinal lines leading away from the tops of the eyebrows, down to a line that runs either from the top of the lips to a point between the lips and the nose.
The neck would begin nearish to the innermost boundaries of the ear-circles. This is indicated with the green lines. I predicted where the other ear would be, considering the slight tilt and curve of the face. The only thing that would skew this geometric constant would be fat deposits ON the neck, which typically only happens with fairly obese people. of which this fellow does not appear to be.
If you want his neck to be muscular, it would still issue from the same location, but would bell out somewhat, where the neck muscles gather.
The line that indicates the anterior triangle of the neck (the innermost neck section, where the adam's apple is) is too far out.
Sometimes people draw lines that shape out the muscles which protect the jugular veins. This sort of deep volume change which would require such outlines would only really occur in EXTREMELY lean and or very muscular people. (or if the character is doing an extremely sharp head turn or is flexing so that these muscles stand out)
A volume change depicting ONLY the anterior triangle, however, is common in many people. But that would only run down and away from where the chin/jaw connects to the flesh of the neck.
diagram ... diagram ... oh, here's one:
http://webgel.net/bf/necktriangles.gif
The hair looks fine.
Hope that helps ~<3
LOVE the idea.
