Lavot Story
- Thread starter Skeith08
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Hmm, well to me, going with Kotetsu wasn't a good play - even if it might be a snazzy title, if translated or something.
With your title, you want to be pretty creative - as creative as possible, without having a title with no reference, or little of it, to the story.
But, please, try to stay away from the typical RPG titles (Noun (the, of, ) Noun; ex: Fight of Doom, Tree of Magic) :P
[nit-picking]
Luna is a macabre dancer? What the heck is that?
Why can everyone use so many types of weapons? Try to focus it on the class they have, and give them unique weapons, unless you want to just throw "Freelancer" at them.
Why did the threesome destroy the village? What was their reason (PLOT HOLE!)
Ok, this really bugs me:
Over at the entrance, why isn't there a wall? You show the ceiling, above the walls, near the top of the map, but over at the entrance/exit it looks like the ceiling is just hardwood floor, under the rug. But yes, you should definitely improve your mapping.
Last thing:
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EDIT - the HUD on those/that screenshot(s) is much too cluttery and distracting. Try to be very minimal with HUDs.
[/nitpicking]
Well, that's all I have to say about your game.
I'm hoping you'll look into these little details - they'll be somewhat important to supporting main subjects.
-abreaction
With your title, you want to be pretty creative - as creative as possible, without having a title with no reference, or little of it, to the story.
But, please, try to stay away from the typical RPG titles (Noun (the, of, ) Noun; ex: Fight of Doom, Tree of Magic) :P
[nit-picking]
Luna is a macabre dancer? What the heck is that?
Why can everyone use so many types of weapons? Try to focus it on the class they have, and give them unique weapons, unless you want to just throw "Freelancer" at them.
Why did the threesome destroy the village? What was their reason (PLOT HOLE!)
Wait, who is "they" again? @.@
Wait, what? The continent? I thought he was the prince of Deciet?
They are sent home at the same time "they" assisted Riou? Let's not use later twice in there, shall we? :P
Ok, this really bugs me:
Last thing:
Ok, maybe, because of the RTP...
What?!?! How is XP maps better than VX maps if you are using VX RTP Tilesets?
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_(._.)_
EDIT - the HUD on those/that screenshot(s) is much too cluttery and distracting. Try to be very minimal with HUDs.
[/nitpicking]
Well, that's all I have to say about your game.
I'm hoping you'll look into these little details - they'll be somewhat important to supporting main subjects.
-abreaction
That isn't an excuse for having a title with no reference to the story. You can still have some sort of connection between them all, and use that as your title. Having some random schmancy RPG title isn't going to do any better than what you already have. But if you don't care that much for the title, that's fine too. I'm just an extremely critical person 
-abreaction
-abreaction
Kuahewa huki 'ino
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The road(?) is the entrance to the gate.
You're just choosing random kanjis now, dearie.
You're just choosing random kanjis now, dearie.
u guys r all killjoys! i dont wanna overwork the guy who made my logo, so... whoops! nobody else complains about it on any other forum. i actually get good comments on other forums. whats wrong with this one? It gets on my nerves cuz u all complain about stuff that doesnt matter. why?
The logo does matter, as some people, despite the saying, will judge a book by it's cover.
And please don't start complaining about our forum.
Having Japanese in the logo doesn't make it look cool. I can't read it, since it's such a bright green, but it's probably not even the correct translation.
I'd just cut it out. Then sharpen up the text a bit and it's just fine.
And please don't start complaining about our forum.
Having Japanese in the logo doesn't make it look cool. I can't read it, since it's such a bright green, but it's probably not even the correct translation.
I'd just cut it out. Then sharpen up the text a bit and it's just fine.