The Lost Element - Updates! - XcuMaSoft

[BunnyKinx]

I WILL BE UPDATING THIS POST WHEN I GET PHOTOSHOP IN A FEW HOURS FROM NOW!

thanks and hope to make it a good one :D

 

[OS]

What, is your Girlfriend Seven years old? j/k

There ya go, dude. A bump for ye. I'll be out tonight, but if I get back tonight I'll try to talk to ya. Peace!

 

[bradleydfc]

i dont know mate i just named her seven after my girlfriend ? lol thanks for the comment (lucky for me that name ties in with the story)

I would really laugh if you split up with your girlfriend a few days before the full release of your game. Then you'd have to change all the Seven parts whilst crying! ^_^

 

[BunnyKinx]

Haha that would be funny :D but its not like im in love with here lol :P

Sooo bradly what are your main skills and hows your game going!

 

[Lene]

Offtopic posts have been deleted. There is no need to bump this thread with pointless conversation that is better left to PMs. If you need to talk about your day, get on MSN. Have an actual valid question about this project (and I don't mean something like "so how's your game coming?")? Fine, post away.

Also, if I see anything that hints that the OP has been trying to solicit bumps, I will start infracting people and the thread will be closed. It's getting a bit ridiculous guys.

 

[BunnyKinx]

People... DUE to the pressure from the moderators. (and not knowing whats a valid post and whats not) this game maybe moving to a different forum.

Sorry for all the bother. If you want some info on this still growing game you can still post here or email me on XcuMaSoft@Hotmail.co.uk

THANKS ALOT!

 

[kizor]

The new track sounds really good. Can't wait till we get to work on this game properly.

 

[BunnyKinx]

Just a Little spoiler of what the game speaking will be like!

Chapter 1. The Job!

Begging of the game. Starts in this rich mans house.. at this point you have no idea what you are doing there It starts with Seven shouting at the rich man.

The game all starts with Seven arguing with a man in a posh house!

[Seven] "What in the world are you trying to say!?"

[Rich man] "I cannot help you! its out of my hands!"

(black man / Reapz walks into the room)

[Reapz] "Seven... We dont have time for this." "We need to get out of here... NOW!"

[Seven] "He knows more then hes telling..." "I say we beat it out of him."

[Reapz] "... Seven, get out... Thats a order!"

[Rich man] "Please... Just go. I cannot help you"

[Seven] "You struck lucky this time..."

(Seven walks out of the room after barging past Reapz)

(Reapz walks up to the rich man)

[Rich man] "Please... I have worked to hard to die so young."

[Reapz] "Im not going to kill you... Yet!"

(Reapz walks to the rooms entrance.)

[Reapz] "She wont forget you."

(Reapz Leaves the room)

[Rich man] "And I wont forget her."

--- FADES TO BLACK ---

MORE TO COME SOON!

 

[OS]

Ewwww...needs a little work...grammatically...

Let me know if you want me to fix that for you. Also, I'm still working on the side quests. I just wrote Part I of IV, a really cool quest with awesome rewards.

I'll try to work more often. Peace!

 

[Mezmerize]

Story's nice, the title is... yeah. Like someone stated in an earlier post, I can't get past it lol.
Everything else is fine.

 

[holloway]

People... DUE to the pressure from the moderators. (and not knowing whats a valid post and whats not) this game maybe moving to a different forum.

Thank god.

Let me frank, this need work. Now. The dialogue was bland, with all the characters seeming...well. lifeless. I could just have as easily swapped the lines around and it would have fitted. I think you have a serious issue with defining authority. If someone is powerful enough to order this "seven" guy around, he sure as hell wouldn't take getting barged into. Further than that, how can it go from a line where a death threat is made to a line where the two seem to be discussing something intimate. It just doesn't work.

There is no need for all these !features" listed. They just seem exactly as Arc was discussing the other day, that you've found the RGSS forum and piled in as many as possible. Case in point "Materia and Skill Point systems!...[/FONT]The ability to create your own skills using the skill workshop!". This just seems like pointless filler.

[/FONT][/FONT]On character names, well names in general, you need work. Seven just doesn't generally work as a name, unless it has some sort of significance, like he's a gambler or something. The usage of the "Z" in Reapz just screams "OMG I MAKE URBAN!" to me, and really does need renaming. What is wrong with normal names like Heather and James?

Your game title needs a change too. "Xtreme" "Phantasy", again you have the issue of "I'm trying to be cool" and stinks like a 40 year old businessman trying to sell his products to kids, badly. I hate the usage of "final element". Generally taglines are unnecessary and do little but make the name way too long.

This is a pity really. You have a very nice storyline and, whilst element wars generally have me hanging myself,the 1984 twist to the concept is a very nice one indeed. Sadly you've made a mistake which just seems engrained in RMXP.org projects, using anime. Anime is unnecessary, and, at the minute, seems like you are populating it with ripped graphics for signatures and character art, when the story seems to fit a much more realistic, gritty approach.

 

[G-man]

wow harsh...........................I think this project has potential, and I'm not a fan of elements either, but as he said earlier, Reapz fits in with the storyline, so Reapz it is, and as for Seven, first of all she's a girl, how you missed this I have no clue, since her character art is all over the front page, second, her name might be Seven because she's a Android or something, I agree on the dialouge part, it COULD have been Reapz or Seven speaking, and maybe Reapz can boss Seven around because their friends? I don't think the dialouge was THAT bad. Overall I give Xtreme Phantasy a 6.5 out of 10

 

[WeAreSuperhero]

Though I do like the idea of underground philosophers/ historians and the cencorship of the past (ala 1984, like The Silent Alarm said], the name Xtreme Phantasy! makes me cry. It holds no relevance whatsoever to the story, as far as I can see, as its just a bunch of buzz words slapped together, like you would do to sell a frisbee or a yo yo.

 

[holloway]

How on earth does Seven being female affect what I said in anyway? Since when has Seven been a legitimate name for a girl?

 

[OS]

Wow. Why did it take so long for people to crit this way? w/e

If need be, I will work with you, Xcu, on the dialogue. While I'm grammar fixing, I can rewrite some of it and see what you think. If you need help with renaming, altering the story, or anything else, I'll be glad to help.

 

[Lene]

How on earth does Seven being female affect what I said in anyway? Since when has Seven been a legitimate name for a girl?

Where are these rules for "legitimate" names? Honestly, this "normal" name argument is a ridiculous one. Especially considering that you'll find people named all sorts of things in reality. I know a girl named Apple, which is not "normal" but her parents had a reason for it. Who knows, you can fanwank that Seven's mom took seven hours of labor to pop her out and that's where the name came from. Or she's the seventh kid in the family. Who knows?

 

[holloway]

Yes, but he was arguing that my criticism of the name was in some way wrong because she was female. I didn't mean you can't get characters with those names. I may be no fan, but I'm not deluded either.

 

[kizor]

... I know a girl named Apple, which is not "normal" but her parents had a reason for it...

Coldplay'd

 

[G-man]

whoa now I'm not a fan of the name either, but like I said maybe she's a robo super chick or something

 

[holloway]

No. He wouldn't call a "super robot chick" "a 19 year old girl".