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2/29/10
Added a whole new section of characters which are playable, yes, you get to play the bad guys. :D

2/6/10
Thanks to Bacon I've gotten rmxp back, I'm going to start working on the sprites after StarGGundam2 finishes the main characters later on and when I start getting NPC characters in I'll start working on the project.

12/21/09
As you can see, I have been busy, I have changed my mind about cutting some graphics out, my computer also crashed and I lost rpg maker xp and the progress for now is halted.

12/11/09
I am cutting out the visual art because there is a lack of team members that can do any art, such as facesets and illustrations. So I am cutting out the jobs with the scene and protrait.
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11/7/09
Ok, so I am recruiting again, this thread is going to be going through major development or as some of you call it "tricked out". I want you guys to tell me what you want it to have, such as pictures sections and stuff.

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A neglected girl named Selia has a perfect brother that gets all the attention and praise of her parents. Selia has moved to yet another new house or apartment for business for her parents, Selia discovers a hidden room in her bedroom containing a book that is a pathway to the world of Helio. Selia has to struggles to keep this book a secret from the everyone, after her parents find the book and open it, the book sucks their souls into the world of Helios because they opened it, and were not completely eligable to go to the world of Helios (so their practicaly zombifide). Selia is now determined to go and find her parents and bring them back to the modern world so everything could be just like before.
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Intro: Part one
Selia just moved into her new condominium, she just finished unpacking her stuff too!
Selia says, “Few, unpacking takes up a lot of energy!” As she walks up her mini hallway that leads to her bedchamber, she looks out the window and sighs when she sees a huge tree blocking her view, Selia sighs and says,
“Moving was a bad idea, now I'm stuck in this dark room, hmm. Maybe I could put some lamps? No, where would I get the money?”
While staring hopelessly at the tree she hears,
“Selia, dear! Come and help unpack your brother's books!” Selia’s mother, Grace shouts from the kitchen while unpacking the utensils, her voice always sounds calm and gentle unlike Selia’s father.
“Mother! No one helped me unpack anything! That's not fair!” Selia complains while she spots a birds nest outside the window.
“Come help your brother, dear! He has more things than you!”
“Father!” Selia shouts, just loud enough to reach her father in the bedroom dusting the furniture again.
“Your mother's right, Selia, now go and help him unpack his things!” Selia’s father, George bellows in a strict tone as always.
“AAUUHHH! I'm not helping him! I always help him and he doesn't help me at all! Just because he's top notch and all doesn't make him more important then me!” Selia says in furious rage.
In unison her parents blurt out, “That’s not true!” in an instant, this time George is in the kitchen with Grace.
Selia walks down the hall past her small, small, bedroom to another hall that leads to another room, the guest room, which has twice as much room then hers, Selia doesn’t feel calm enough to sit so she leans against the wall pushing her back into it with anger.
She listens to her parents whisper, just silent enough that Selia had to be very still to hear.
“(George, I hate to argue with her, but she is right.)”
“(I guess that’s true, but, Grace he needs more attention then her.)”
Selia, sighs and declares that she must not make any friends until she knows that this will be her permanent residence, and pushes harder into the wall with her back. This time the wall collapses behind her and makes that sound that you make when you slam a door really hard.
“Ow!” Selia shouts out right after her back and her head slam into pieces of wood on the floor behind her.
“Selia! Are you ok?!’ Grace shouts out from the dining room table, (Which is beside the kitchen).
“Hmph, all you care about is the wall.” Selia says while rubbing the back of her head with her hand. Selia figures that this is one of those walk in closets but the door was locked and was painted over for some reason, the room suddenly starts to get hot.
Selia figures it’s not insulated, she walks down the hallway which leads to a dark room.
Suddenl the room lights up with a flash and a glowing rectangle appears in front of Selia. As Selias eyes adjust she starts to see a book, lying there, on the floor. The book had intricate patterns of gold lines…. Moving, yes, it was some type of liquid. Selia picked up the book and opened the lock with the key wrapped around the book by a chain necklace with a beautifully colored jewel. Selia opened the book, thinking:
“It’s just a book, how dangerous could it be?’
After opening the book it blew light and warmth in Selia’s face blinding her temporarily, when her vision came back she was just about to walk off a cliff, which when into a deep abyss.
She quickly jumped away from the cliff and looked around, her surroundings where unbelievable, she was just outside of a dense forest, then she noticed her clothes had changed and said “I almost walked off that cliff! “And, where did I get these clothes, let alone change them!” in a very worried tone, Selia looked up into the sky after hearing a beat of a wing, there, in the sky, giant wings connecting to a body, of a female blur.
“Look out!”
As Selia turned to the voice but was too slow then she got knocked off the cliff like a pebble. As she was falling she saw the person who pushed her off, but it wasn’t a person, it was a human like animal, like the things she has watched in a sci-fi movie, she now noticed the book in her hands, but without those liquid strands of gold, she quickly opened the book and landed on the floor beside her bed, She quickly got up and looked around relived that she wasn’t about to plummet to her death with a screaming animal-boy. She went to the clock in the guest room to see how long she was asleep… She was only a sleep for ten minutes. She turns her head to the wall where she fell, she thinks to herself:
“This is a bad idea.”
Selia goes to the wall, backs up and runs straight through the wall and stops abruptly, she quickly goes to the end of the hallway and finds, the book, not there, not lying on the floor like in her dream, she says “Good.” And walks out of the wall to the guest room, the wall was still there, but somehow passable, Grace comes into the hallway leading to the Kitchen and dining room (The room with the window that got blocked by the tree with the birds nest).
“Selia? Are you awake, dear?”
“Yeah, I'm awake! has my brother finished unpacking yet?”
“No, why?”
“I think I'll go help him.”
“Looks like rest was all you needed,
come on.”
Selia and her mother exit to the kitchen………. In the hidden room there is a flash of light, there on the floor
is the book.

Intro: Part two
3 months, 2 weeks, 6 days, 3 hours, and 56 minutes. After that day, Selia is about to wake up and get ready for school. *BEEP* *BEEP*, *BEEP* *BEEP* *BEE-*
“………………….” Selia rolls over in a deep sleep.
“Mmmmmh” Selia rubs her eyes contently and gets up. Her parents are out to work and her brother is away to who knows where, she sighs and checks the time, it’s 8:03, on a school day.
“GGAAHH!” Selia screams in uncertainty and rushes to change in her school uniform, a white shirt, a little red tie, and a mini white skirt, with her hair in a ponytail, Selia rushes and notices she has to pack her school supply’s after all of that is done she quickly rushes out of the house and is on her way to school.
Selia goes to school and stops by the principle’s office,
“You are Selia, correct?” says a young man in a desk wearing a long black coat.
“Yeah, hey, have you seen the principle I’m supposed to get my ID card today.”
“Yeah, I’ve seen him he is supposed to be here, where I’m sitting.”
“Well that’s just grea—hey? Why are you here?”
“My name is Lyner, may I help you?”
“Yeah, I nee—to know what the principles name is, can you help me?”
“His name is Lyner.”
Selia’s face suddenly turnes into dark pink marshmallow color, as Selia stares sheepishly; Lyner is developing a grin of glee.
“Selia, you are late to class, you do know what the punishment is don’t you? It is very bad to be late on the first day.” Lyner says as he watches Selia, quiver a bit.
“I-I thought I was on time.”
“Well your 27 minutes late, there is a clock behind you.”
“I-I am sorry, please, don’t put anything on my records.”
“Don’t worry I won’t, you are actually on time, I have been doing these things for quite a while.”
“Doing what?”
“Tricking people and testing how reliable they are, also for the fun of it.”
Lyner’s grin turns into a frown and he says “Here” Lyner puts a card on his desk and pushes it to the edge closest to Selia. Selia comes closer to Lyner and she picks up the card.
“This is my ID? Thanks” Selia leaves hastily out the room and goes to her first class.
“Hmm, this girl looks like she has come in contact with the book, but it’s must have been awhile now, I should inform Abel as soon as I can, before something goes wrong.”
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Helio
Helio before a class means that the users combine Helio techniques with weapon.(like enchanting).

Heliosphere
A type of crystal that can only be used by a number of people, the Heliospheres effects are summoning elements (like magic).
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Helio Archer - A bow wielder that has the power to use a helio sphere to enchant the users arrows.
Spherist - A Heliosphere wielder, not very common, they can wield Heliospheres and harness its power.
Fencer - A rapier wielder, usually a human, Fencers are skilled specializing in speed and dexterity.
Clawer - A demon, class that uses the fingernails of the demon to attack. (Not really special)
Great Swordsman - A wielder of a magnificent sword, these swords are usually 5-9 feet long.
Duelist - A swordsman that usually wields 2 swords, focuses on dexterity and thrust.
Acrobat - A very flexible person that can execute flips and tumble, they are often status status inflictors or removers. (yes, those REALLY, REALLY, REALLY, annoying people, if you're facing them anyway).
Shape Shifter - After draining a part of a victims soul, it gains the ability to transform or impersonate the victim.
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Selia
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Helio Class: Helio Archer
Earth Occupation: School Student
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Description: An almost rebellious girl that wants at least a little attention Selia is made fun of her hair, because it is blue, Selia has tried a lot of dies and they just won't work; she cares about school, but always put's family first. Selia is into archery so she can one day hunt in the woods, for the thrill of adventure, she likes to be special but she isn't really feeling special because of her blue hair. She is adopted and was given a pendant, so she tends to be really violent to get the pendant back. She has the potential to become one of the smartest and strongest human beings in the Helio world.

Lunere (Lune-ea’-re)
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Helioclass: Trainee
Earth occupation: None
Age: 16-18
Gender: Male
Race: Human?
Description: He seems to have been very nice at first sight, but hesitantly tries not to share to much information about himself. He is a very fast agile swordsman, he saved Selia’s life, but had no intention but to help her at first. He seems like a nice person as long as you can get over his sometimes depressing look, full red eyes, and extremely pale skin. His village uses massive amounts of iron to create their suits of armour for their war against the neighboring village. He seems to avoid the matter of his hair color, Selia suspects him to be very young looking at 18 or that he is not a human.


Venier/Tomas
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Helio Class: Mercenary
Earth Occupation: School Student
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Race: Demon
Description: Venier is very stubborn and gets bored easily he and his sister come hand in hand, Venier is curious like his sister but does thing dangerous that usually gets him in a tight knot that Fintis has to get him out of. He keeps talking about what he would be like if he hadn't left his village. He seems to have fits in the night, nobody but fintis knows where he goes in the night.

Fintis/April
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Helio Class: Spherist
Earth Occupation: School Student
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Race: Demon
Description: Fintis is more curious then Venier, she is responsible and is usually afraid of a lot of things, she can always come up with a solution to their problems. Fintis is a bookworm and spends all of her free time helping Venier out of a net or helping him fight an annoyed beast, but if she has extra time she digs her face into books because “It’s a non-dangerous way to have fun”. She seems to be an expert with Heliospheres.

Abel
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Helio Class: Great Swordman
Earth Occupation: School Student
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Description: A boy at school Abel is made fun of his hair, because it is blue, Abel ignores the harsh comments and now owns the number one organization for the school; he is very curious and loves challenges, Abel is a very intelligent kid, he loves jigsaw puzzles and thinks that school is uncalled for in his opinion, Abel says, “Why go to school if I know more then the teacher? I can put my knowledge to better use than correcting my teacher’s grammar.”

Lyner
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Helio Class: Duelist
Earth Occupation: School Principal
Age: 46
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Description: Lyner is Abel’s father and is not as intelligent as his son but is smarter then normal adults; Lyner has a hobby for winning fencing tournaments. Lyner is strong, quick, decisive, and intelligent, Lyner doesn’t have the qualities of a regular teacher or principal. His qualities are much, much, better.

Serenity
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Helio Class: Acrobat
Age: 24
Gender: Female?
Race: Human
Description: The gender of this person is not verified, but from a first look she looks quite feminine. She is an expert in acrobatics (Tumbling and flips) but could not find a job so she settled for a maid job in a mayor's house. After Selia, and friends, visit this mayor guy for a certain matter (ruins the game), they talk to the maid for some evidence or clues, but only discovers that she is Selia's sister, which claimed that her hair isn't blue because at the age of 18 your, hair turns into it's true color and that she had some unfinished business with Ginistiner.

Ginistiner
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Helio Class: Shape Shifter
Age: ???
Gender: ???
Race: Shape Shifter
Description: As one of the only Shape Shifters in the world it is ruler of a small kingdom, it does what it pleases with its kingdom and its people. It apparently is connected to Selia's family. He seems to have moments when he acts like another person.

Keath
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Helio Class: ???
Age: ???
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Description: After being kidnapped Keath sides with Ginistiner and all memory of him vanishes.
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These angels are part of an organization and were apparently sent from heaven to "rescue" Fintis and something she should have delivered.

Yiniouh (Yin-ioh)
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Helio Class: Holy Uniyo (Une-io) "Assassin/Rogue"
Age: 674 (15 angel years)
Gender: Male
Race: Angel
Description: One of the best suited for a kidnapping mission, this guy is fast and deadly but seems to hesitate to kill someone. The person never speaks, just points, coughs and sneezes are about all he does with his mouth.

Pherynis (Fere-inis)
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Helio Class: Esteryim (Est-er-im) "Heroine"
Age: 738 (17 angel years)
Gender: Female
Race: Angel
Description: She wields just about any type of weapon. She loves peace and quite and is the middle child, of the three princesses in heaven. she has a kind heart but she can be as evil as a devil from the depths of hell.

Quluis (Que-lius)
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Helio Class: Celestial Ynift (ni-ft) "Sharpshooter"
Age:743 (17 angel years)
Gender: Female
Race: Angel
Description: She wields a great bow and uses it to fire several needles at a time usually striking an opponents heart. She is very protective and she tries to hide her emotions, she doesn't want anyone to see her when her emotions start to pour out.

Xereal (Zere-eel)
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Helio Class: Phernil (Fern-ill) Arrow "Sniper"
Age: 973 (19 angel years)
Gender: Male
Race: Angel
Description: He fires massive arrows through a great bow. He loves animals but is mostly serious, he doesn't get sarcasm much. He is Zenyor's son and is the "runt" of the group. He is the most inexperienced one of the group, but he was training, and had to quit to go with his father, he loves his father very much.

Zenyor (Zen-ior)
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Helio Class: Genunicle (jen-nune-icle) "Bishop"
Age: 2643 (43 angel years)
Gender: Male
Race: Angel
Description: He is the wisdom, and plan maker of the party. He specializes in all magic, mainly healing. He is serious and doesn't joke around most of the time. He teaches Xereal how to aim and how to become stronger, he teaches Xereal how to enchant his arrows, which is one thing that Qulius doesn't know how to.
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Grace (minor character)
Helio Class: None
Earth Occupation: House Wife
Age: 58
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Description: As Selia’s mother she just starts to notice that she has been neglecting Selia, she then goes and talks to George about it.

George (minor character)
Helio Class: None
Earth Occupation: High Class Worker
Age: 60
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Description: Persuaded by Grace, George gives Selia more attention. George is a landscape architect. He often moves around the world for business and doesn’t really notice anyone when he is entranced into his work. (He is workaholic)
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Helio (He'-lee-o)
A world of magical creatures, demons, swords, and bows, this unusual world is contained in a book and supports civilization. A man named Helios made this world out of his own flesh and skin he transformed himself into and book containing the world of Helio, Of course this book could not be stored in the world of Helio, of course it was stored in another world.

Earthinian (Er-th-in-ian)
This world was named after the space travelers from the real earth who was consumed by a meteorite. Earth is much like the one consumed in the meteorite. Its civilization is a bit different then the original one.
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Title System: 5%
Weapon level up: 0%
Modern world Travelling system: 0%
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Story: 82%
Graphics: 9%
Maps: 0%
Eventing: 0%
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Anime School Rp - School background
Deke - Advanced Message Script
Dubleax - Blacksmithing Script
Jaberwocky - Evented title screen
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This game looks very interesting, indeed! It looks like you focused more about the people in "real life" other than the people that come out of the book. That's what it seems to me anyway. Also, you shouldn't call the game's world Earth if you're giving it a backstory like that. People will look at it and say "LOLWUT? TAHTS NOT HOW EARTH STRTED!" The game looks like it will be heavily based off of the characters, which I like. A suggestion for the future is to still give it enough interesting gameplay mechanics to make it not seem like an interactive story.

As for the title suggestion, how about "The Book of Helio"?
 

zchin

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Thanks for the comment, but I have been trying to come up with a name for it and I haven't one clue of what it is yet, I've tried:
Book of Helios (Similar to yours)
Helios
Helio
Heliosphere (Basically magic in this game)

I guess I wasn't clear on the requirements I'll update the thread again then...

Anyway, I don't think that I focused on the characters outside the book, I just counted and it's about the same, if you haven't noticed, Lyner and Abel have similar eye color to another character. (hint, hint).

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For the Helio Classes, you put things that aren't standard in fantasy RPG's. I know what a knight is, but not what a Helio Master is. Please define those in your topic. Also put what a "Hemu" is. If Selia is made fun of her hair because it is blue, then she should just dye it like Ritz from Final Fantasy Tactics did. Why isn't Abel made fun of his hair too? His hair colour is even more outrageous. Principal Lyner looks intimidating, not like a mean teacher, more like someone that you would find waiting in a dark alley to mug someone. You said George is a landscape architect, but his earth occupation says high class worker. That's a bit confusing.
 
zchin131":1crcrlc7 said:
O.k. I have made some changes according to your questions.

Thank you and have a _____ day!
NO! What kind of day should I have!?

lol Anyway, how about "Betwixt" or, if it's an exception for a multi-word title, "Betwixt and Between"?
 

zchin

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Uh? How should I put this, the title you've suggested isn't really good, try again and the requirements changed again, you will have to tell me what it means.

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A couple questions:
Does the name Selia have any sort of meaning, or is it just made up?

What kind of stuff ends up happening in Helio that drives the plot? What makes Selia special in Helio (such that she becomes a hero)?
 

zchin

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well unlike other games Selia's objective is nothing special, she doesn't become a well known hero or whatever. The name Selia doesn't have anything special right now, Selia isn't special she just finds the book, I guess she is special because she's not like other humans in Helio. Hope that cleared up your questions!

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When I first was just fast scrolling down the character I thought Fintis was Flintis with mean in swedish 'Baldy' with made me double check as fast as possible heh

So far I can't say much but of what I can see you have a nice concept going on :)

Good luck!
 

zchin

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ellenor":2ydumpb3 said:
When I first was just fast scrolling down the character I thought Fintis was Flintis with mean in swedish 'Baldy' with made me double check as fast as possible heh

So far I can't say much but of what I can see you have a nice concept going on :)

Good luck!
Thanks a lot!
Although it wasn't what I usually get but th fintis flintis thing was amusing.
I just wanted to ask you if you have a title suggestion, no matter how stupid I am looking for a title though...

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There's really not much to comment on apart from the characters. Put up a more detailed storyline, so we can give more feedback on that.

Your characters seem all right, a little generic, but they could work. A few things stand out, though. Abel is smarter than his own father, even though Lyner's lived 30 years longer? And how can Keath's personality change to his own liking? That's pretty much solid and unchangeable, except over a period of time.
 
The first thing I'd like to comment on is Keath. Your description of him bothers me. I stand by the belief that humans are naturally imperfect and his characterization seems almost...forced. Also, I don't see how he's the most popular person in any world when he's only 28. Unless he's some kind of super-human, his entire character doesn't really make sense to me.

I think what this thread needs the most is a descriptive storyline. You have a lot of information here, but you need to organize it. For example, what's the difference between a human and a demon? Where did the shapeshifters come from and how many are there? What are the classes? You need to give us something more in-depth and I think we'll have a better idea of what to expect and then we'll be able to give you better name ideas. At the moment, the best title I can think of is "From a Book", and that's not descriptive enough, in my opinion.
 

zchin

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Ok, I have read both of the posts and all of the things you people have said are completely true, even though I was oblivious of it, it is still true. I will update more details and one more thing... Any of you have a title suggestion worth giving a try?

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Edit: I have finished the updates, so just tell me what if I forgot anything ok?
Also I spent a lot of time on the story thing in the spoiler

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Tuna

Awesome Bro

Personally, I think Helios is the best thing you've gotten so far. Here's some titles I whipped up with a thesaurus. The only one I could think of that was only one word was Helios and you already had that one, and I know there's nothing particularly fantastic about these titles, but I figured I'd offer what I could:

A Fabricated Escape
A Delusional Retreat
A Fantastic Escape
Fool's Paradise

Anyway, really great job! I enjoyed reading what you have so far, and I really think this is going somewhere. Don't stop working to think of a title. Keep going and maybe you'll think of something while you're going along.
 

zchin

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Thanks for the comment, by the way "Fool's Paradise" has been added to the list (Which is invisable :grin: ) Congratulations, I have sent you a Personal Message to notify you but encase you didn't get that Personal Message.

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Hellen looks rather old, and Lyner looks a bit too young for the age you gave him. What is the number one organisation in the school that Abel owns, and why doesn't he drop out of high school if he thinks school is useless? You say Keath is a "Famous Prodigy," but I don't know what he does for a living. Is he an actor? He could be a musical prodigy. Does he still live with his parents when he's 28? It would appear so in your story spoiler. Also, no one is perfect, so you shouldn't put that Keath is perfect. He's ignorant of his sister's need for attention, and he seems like an attention hog. Does he just go to the other world and automatically become a Helio Master? Usually, it takes years of practice to master anything. This seems better than your last project thread, though.
Watch your grammar and spelling.
 

zchin

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Notice:
I am encouraging every single title suggestion no matter how stupid it is, sometimes it will be good, please for the sake of the universe, suggested like there is no tomorrow!

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zchin

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Ok, I have added a MAJOR, let me say it again, MAJOR, MAJOR, MAJOR, character, in the story plot line. I can't tell you what I have in store for her, in the game....

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