Moonlight WIP (Redesigned Post)

[Marc1k1]

Does anyone else think the "sun god" looks like a male blood elf from world of warcraft...

HELLS YES!!!

sorry for double posting but yeah I do to, I just got burning crusaid a while back and made a Blood Elf (I love blood elf's they look awsome wish they where Allience which would just make to much scence but oh well)

Yeah, He creator dude of this game (sorry I've got bad memory cant remember your name >.<!) Is that a picture of a/your?! Blood Elf from World Of Warcraft?

(Woots in terokkar server:
Name: Maaku
Lv: 43
Class: Mage
Race: Human)

 

[Marc1k1]

hi inconsistent ripped graphics

how's it goin

perspectively speaking, you can not have 3/4 view top-down srpg sprites such as those from phantom brave work with a front-on platformer view you've ripped from maplestory. the autotile you've used as the ground in the city also doesn't fit; it's from the rtp, which is top-down straightview stuff.

I see what you're trying to do here with the platformer view and it's an interesting take on things, but you're not equipped to work with a platformer view as long as you're relying on rips that don't fit the perspective.

aside from the obvious graphical problems, there's not a lot I see worth commenting on. it seems like a fairly generic story with obvious and inconsistent rips used for graphics.

you have no idea how much of a blow it is to the player's immersion when he can easily recognize all the characters you're using from another game.

Er... sorry for a THIRD post but this one MUST be said...

Dude lay off christ! who gives a- , If you dont like it dont play it sure put down CONSTRUCTIVE chritisism which most of that is but its just annouying and harse when people say "NO THIS GAME WILL NOT WORK"

Its worse that people act as if its a big problem, He can make HIS game how HE wants to.

But whatever, I just hope that 'Mawk' has not discoureged omen but informed him.

>:EDIT:<
Also I just had anouther glance at the screenshots, The Backgrounds WORK FINE they dont look out of place and the one thing I really liked about Maple story was the nice backgrounds (reminds me of the game Braid on Xbox 360 :P)

Althought Maple Story had a certain appeal (I think Moonlight will have a similer one) it did get boring becuase I felt a lack of story to it. This game however looks as if its packing with plots and story ALL over the place!!

 

[doyleman]

dude....
that was several maple story background rips, a dark elf, and sprites from a PS2 game called Phantom Brave.
--> http://www.nisamerica.com/games/pb/

Look closely, you'll see he just editted a few things around the backgrounds and stuff... Seriously.

He even said at the bottom of his post dont complain about how he uses ripped graphics about having a family and what not. Which i'm sure many others here have, and can pull off at least some custom graphics, but anyway; thats off topic.

(better credit the games that had graphical rips... or something, however...)

Constructive "criticism":

Sun god created Eden, and suddenly strange creatures popped up... Ok. Lets constructively criticize this.

1) He's god of this place called Eden. He built an entire planet. If he didnt create those creatures... are they still his?
Are you also saying he didnt know what he was doing and what would happen when he built it? And he looks like he's a humanoid type figure... not an apparition. where does sun god reside?

2) he built it for himself to admire it, and be in peace? peace from what? what caused stress? he's a god... with nothing to look over. what is the source for stress?

2) If that garden relied on light for life... then no more garden, or 'creatures'. Especially if generations have passed. No, moonlight does not contribute. It needs a light source to be able to emit light. Unless its a star. then the planet gets scorched.

3) Who is Luna? How do these creatures know if a god named Luna exists? How did they even know that the sun god existed? I mean... The sun god didnt expect 'creatures' to come from his planet. So far the weird creations seem to know more than the almighty sun god. That doesnt sound very godly to me....


King Joregon wreaks with cliche, and bullspit... sorry to put it that way, but he does. Legendary Blade? With "sunlight" that grants him massive powers? From the gods? and he's a messiah? No one cried blasphemy? No one else wants the sword? He only "found it". It doesnt seem to have a chosen one (cliche as well, i dont recommend tossing that into the mix anyway). Also, a farmer most probably would not become king. But being as this farmer boy found a magical sword with uber leet powers and what not, I'll let it slide.

Miri - the 'mechanical' genius. I hope this one person surely doesnt outsmart a full company. Especially if she's only using the company's own printed books (meaning the company already knows what she is reading; and probably more).

SypherBlade - that better be his alias. You mention the realm of mirrors once and only once in here. What is the Realm of Mirrors? How did he get in there? How did he get out? where is the realm of mirrors? and how does another realm affect another? Why was he the only one able to find out about it? what is his race? if he's part of a race, do the other tribesmen know how? if he's the only one of his kind---where did he come from? how was he born?

San - it's mentioned a base couldnt handle a head on attack. Say what?! That isnt much of a Base then. How about a weakness from the back? or something besides head on -- it just doesnt make much sense.

Garn - is he the only one of his species? if so - then how? if not, then why is it that the player cant understand him? why everyone else? and cant Garn pick up a new language? Chewie had the excuse of being a weird animal. Chewie couldnt pronounce vowels, Garn can.

Rune- "The Haze is a mysterious land for the balance there is damaged and trees and rocks float in mid air" -- i didnt understand what that meant. could you rephrase? And if they found the key for immortal life, then that means that some one has taken it. How else would they know it gave Immortal life? and why would anyone want immortal life... that'd be the most boring life ever. Though you say they only found the Key, it isnt specific to know if you were directly saying a key, or as in the recipe for immortal life. I'm not sure which. Immortal life isnt something awesome anymore, anyways.

Omega - described in the Holy book of luna? so Luna is a god? Did the sun god know about this? So wait, when you said the sun god made the garden to find peace and admire it, was he just getting away from his wife?! and he feeds off of energy.

What is the conflict in this game? The main goal? You gave a history lesson on the different nations/tribes, and some important figures... but like, no objective. the heck?




I'm not sure if you fleshed out the full story, or when you started writing it... but perhaps you should back track, re-read it, and figure out these questions that I've asked. Maybe you already have them, I dont know... But whatever you provided for us wasnt enough to know whats going on. Except that the sun went on vacation, king arthur or whoever found his super sword, and that something speaks half chewebacca'n?

 

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@doyleman

Wow!
Those screenshots are sexy.
Great job! I will be playing this.

 

[doyleman]

:huh:

they're not mine.

Moonlight belongs to Omen

Phantom Brave belongs to NIS America. It came out ugh... i cant remember when. Its the same company that published Disgaea though, if you've played any of those. Phantom Brave wasnt as funny as Disgaea. It used a more serious story, and I thought it was pretty good.

Anyway, er. yeah.

 

[omen]

I go away for a bit and come to find some ppl made their way to my post (happiness)

Guess i better dig into this

First of all think more greek mythology on how the world survives without a sun and a little less science for its where I generated the idea in the first place lol. Lets remeber this is a fantasy setting not the real world. :thumb:

After the sun god disappears generations pass and the world eventually forgets his exsistance and adopts a new believe on how the world was formed, the three moons in the sky. This "religion" is based out of a book that was written called the book of luna which is one the most followed teaching in all of eden. Its a man made religion.

As for the questions on the characters I do have answers for all of them but feel that if i give them away in the forum that in the story they will seem...well less exciting. (Sypherblade is an alias btw and Joregon is upposed to be super cliche and cheesy which is why Reko is intimidated by his father's greatness and will never fill his shoes.)

For all the ranting on the ripped graphics....*cough*...lots of common graphics we see in many rpgmaker games are ripped from other games simply i ripped graphics from a less used source makes me stand out i guess but i just loved the style of these sprites and tilesets that i feel they are perfect for the image i have in mind. Of course i will credit the companies who put all the time and effort into making such beautiful art. Glad more ppl are interested in my story then the graphics uch:

I did manage to finish the first three chapters but went back and changed stuff. I felt the game was to much story and not enough "gameplay" so im adding in more interactive maps of battle and quests to take a break from the heavy text. The Xas battle system has alot to offer and I want to take advantage of such a powerful script. :biggrin:

Thanks for all those who took the time to analyze the story and I hope to have the first release in a few weeks (Real life is having more demands lately then usual)

 

[omen]

Redesigned the main post with a new style

 

[beterbomen]

This project hasn't died jet, has it? Seeing how the last post was almost half a year ago, I'm getting a bit worried. I hope a game that looks this good hasn't died.

 

[beterbomen]

Where did my post disapear to?
Anyway, in case it's never been there, I'll say again: I REALY HOPE THIS PROJECT HASN'T BEEN CANCELED OR SHELVED!!!

Huf... huff... huff.....
There... I said it...

 

[omen]

Thanks to my pc crashing and my son getting ahold of my flash drive i have to unfortunatly restart my game. curse the gods what did i ever do to you? So i decided to revamp the story a bit mostly with the world settings. Looking over my topic that i having updated in awhile a lot has changed so let me know what u think of the new concept. I will update the pics soon as i can. (at work atm lol)

 

[omen]

updated some pics...ill add some more later (its really really late lol)

 

[gRaViJa]

This doesn't get nearly enough comments than it deserves! the graphics look great and original and so does the story. Sucks that your pc crashed, but it's great that you decided to restart the whole project. I once had the same problem, so let this be a lesson for everyone to use as many back-ups as possible. Now, I use the backscript, and i have a copy on my laptop, usb-stick and on a dvd.

Are you planning on releasing a demo somtime?

 

[omen]

I do like the graphics, but i did not create them..just merely edited some. They are from the game Maple Story. And ya i got two flash drives now for backups lol...as for a demo i hope to have one hopefully by next month. :biggrin:

was debating changing the title to Chronicles of Eden. what you guys think?

 

[beterbomen]

As long as it remains as good as it sounded when I first stumbled on to this project(back when it was still in it infancy), I have no problem with the story changing.
However, did you remove the story about the sun god? That was the part that atracted me in the first place, and I'd be prety sad to see it go.

 

[gRaViJa]

Hmm, okay i was fooled for a second that they were original graphics :p
still looks very good and an interesting project, but just a little less impressing now i know the graphics are ripped.

 

[omen]

As long as it remains as good as it sounded when I first stumbled on to this project(back when it was still in it infancy), I have no problem with the story changing.
However, did you remove the story about the sun god? That was the part that atracted me in the first place, and I'd be prety sad to see it go.

Have to play and see :biggrin:

 

[beterbomen]

It's been two years. This dead?