Genesis Saga

[G-man]

XD well it's not his actual story, it's just a short fic about about a boy who lived in one of the four cities that were swallowed by Rifter

 

[BunnyKinx]

o ok :P i would still get rid of the talking... its not done to well in my opinion the rest is cool :D

 

[Reives]

Not bad, I enjoyed reading it. But as Xcu pointed out, there were a few spelling/grammar errors. However, the thing that bugged me the most was this:

He rose up from his temprorary haven and started walking down the sun riddled sidewalk, he got about 10 feet past the vendor when he heard a scream, he turned quickly splattering ketchup on his shirt, what he saw made him wish he never turned around, it was in the sky.....with tentacles black as the night, and it's eyes, it's deadly eyes, had a lust for blood, he didn't hear the frenzy going on around him as people rushed away running somewhere, but yet nowhere, the thing seemed to beckon to him, calling him, suddenly a bright beam plunged toward the ground, Lynn gasped as he saw the target was an innocent girl, he rushed towards her, throwing off his work gear as he ran, making his own custom trail, he reached her in time to push her away just as the beam connected, he had never felt such pain, it felt as if he was being pulled inside out, and to his despair, his last sight in his blurry vision was the beam exploding through the small child-

Believe it or not, the above quoted 'paragraph' is all in one single sentence.

Remember to separate sentences with periods where appropriate. The first period in that paragraph should be after "riddled sidewalk".

 

[G-man]

Thanks for the reply, as I've stated it's a draft that needs heavy revision and editing, and I did not know that was all one long run on sentence XD, I'll work on that imediately, thanks for the review, and keep posted on GS

 

[G-man]

Just a big update!!! A sketch of what landscapes will look like, keep in mind that this is not the size of the Landscapes, as they will be about the size of rtp tiles when we're through
http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa21 ... Path_2.png[/IMG]


http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa21 ... t_Path.png[/IMG]
hope you like and thanks for staying posted on GS ^_^
P.S. which do you guys like better?

 

[Reives]

Looking good. I like the first one better.

 

[G-man]

thanks for your input, as the better one voted on the most will be finalized with extra shading and made into a Landscape

 

[BunnyKinx]

not looking to bad... go out and get a graphic designer to make you some headers for this thread :D

 

[G-man]

XD I do have a graphic designer, Im having him work on the forums though XD, C'mon people which do you guys like better?

 

[Terru16389]

The first one, definitely.

 

[PINEDAXP]

First all the way

 

[G-man]

Good we'll use that one then
Major nice flashy updates to the thread people. Check it out

 

[adrien]

Hey great story! im really looking forward to the release of this game :thumb:

Adrien

 

[G-man]

Thanks!!! and as for the team orders I left some on the forums

Just a concept of what we're going for people:
http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa21 ... idcopy.jpg[/IMG] Again not sure how many times I've said this XD 2D sprites on 3D backrounds, thanks to an idea with credits to Xcumasoft, we plan to eliminate all usage of the tileset system A.S.A.P. Therefore we won't have to convert the LS's into tiles we can just import them into Rmxp as a tile, format the passability and not worry about mapping.
EDIT:Lol don't mention the paint I got a little crazy in MSP lol

 

[BunnyKinx]

wow 7 people on the thread... your getting more respect now i see... I really hope that this landscape idea works out :D

 

[Calibre]

Maybe I'm not following this thread, (didn't want to read 260 posts!) but what is the purpose of that colourful block? I don't get what it's a concept of.

 

[G-man]

Well soon it will be converted into a map basically ^_^ and since we won't be using the entire tileset concept anymore, it'll look just like that except adjusted abit, it is basically a handrawn map, sent through blender in short. and since the scripters are working on eliminating the entire concept of tilesets, there will be no need for mappers.

 

[BunnyKinx]

well its coming down to a basic fight now..

whos going to pull MY concept off better :P your scripters or HEX FIST... I cannot wait to see. also anymore art from your landscape artist?

 

[G-man]

well unfortunately not really, as I like to keep my stuff secret until I have a bunch ^_^

 

[BunnyKinx]

lol as long as you show the people that need to see it thats all that matters :P lol

i wonder how much like mine it is :P lol :P