Entrusted Vengence

[landofshadows]

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Char Select - From left to right - Bolo, Yoko, Luke, Lustat & Lufia

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I would say my game is about 40% done... I have nearly done all of the starting Islands... I only need to finish them off, and make the Mainland... say another 4 months...

 

[The Cry of Fallen Angels]

Hmm, though the topic organisation and many images suggest a good game, your mapping and writing are mediocre at best. For example, your usage of the word gothic.

Yet, I wish you good luck with the game.

 

[landofshadows]

Here's one of my Gothic Dark Wizards... should it help you...

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And here are some of the Higher Demons...

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My game has some VERY GOTHIC ELEMENTS

But... your right what I am doing is on a far lesser scale than some of you... I am not changing any Script... and its gunna look pretty basic... But its 5 story's that cross over each over, and you can choose who you want in your party... and there are around 10 other sum Char's to find aswell as loads of Secret ones...

Once you finish the game you get to play as some of the bad guys or any of the other people you unlock...

Loads of mini Puzzles and funny comments through-out the game... and those screen shots are early works and I didn't want to show the best area's as I don't want to spoil the game...

 

[JD_Slasha]

Well... lesse' here.... I do like the idea of being able to select your character and having their stories intertwine with the other ones (a la Saga Frontier, Unlimited Saga, etc.) and I like how you seem to be going at this with an organized approach; kudos for all that.

What I don't like is the clash of art styles. Three of your main characters are RTP, one of them appears to be fully custom, and the other one is Sasuke from Naruto. Kinda' gives the game a "thrown together" look if ya' ask me. I didn't really take the time to fuly read everything, so I'll save my comments about the story for now. I did notice some grammar issues in some of the screenshots.

Good luck to you with this project, put your heart into this and I'm sure it'll show.

EDIT: I actually read some of your backgrounds on the character.... grammar errors galore... you may wanna' either run it through a word processor (that checks for grammar) or have someone else double check it for you..

 

[landofshadows]

2 of them Are Orignal ones... luke is an Edit... notice he is red not purple and has a a cross on his chest and lines on his back... Oh and the Sasuke Char I made that as a request for some one at Crankeye... The battler I got from Google... but the Char is all mine... Bolo I made from scratch on an Idea given by another member at Crankeye... To be honest I think I have chosen my two originals ones well, I hardly see them used in other peoples games... giving a kind of new feel to this any-way...

I aint gunna make every single person in my game from scratch... Mixing custom with original saves time... and blends the game better...

This Game is going to be massive... Its already taken me 6 months and its gunna take another 4...

Reason
It has many events that take place depending on who you started the game with, and who you have in your party, what area's you have completed and in what order... There are many Events, Switches, Local Switches that all have to be fine tuned to sync with each other... I also have to make it so you can't unlock the best Chars before the monsters are at a level that they prove a test of skill... Getting all 5 story lines to cross over and gel not just in the intro but through out the whole game is hard... Getting it so you can swap Char's at various points to solve certain area's... at the moment there are 14 different party members you can have... (for example Lux a guy that can talk to frogs, the frogs in my game are very comical and refer many a time to real life, like one starts singing the frog song by Paul Mc Cartney... Another Char Called Desri who is blind and works as a Fish packer,who has adapted a cross bow to work on Vibrations can join you as a Guide of all things and get you to the main land, but her Exp level goes no higher than level 10)... Then there are Secret Char's that are a great help in battle, but you may have to sub them out for lesser chars to get through various area's... Like I said this game will be HUGE... it may not look great and my Grammer may suck... But if you look at FF7 compared to FF9 thats does Graphics and Grammer matter or game play ?

I am dyslecksick so my Grammer sucks... as does my spelling... but I did spell check those Intro screen's before adding them in game... and I spell check most of the messages in game aswell...

But that aside... I have some one play testing this for me at various intervals along the way of completion... And he speaks his mind... He likes it...

 

[JD_Slasha]

I aint gunna make every single person in my game from scratch... Mixing custom with original saves time... and blends the game better...

Mixing will save you a lotta' time, yes... but assuring that it all blends together better.. no.

Well whatever floats ur boat there. I see what you mean about FF7... KINDA....yes the graphics weren't up to par with some other FF's... but they were consistant with eachother.. nothing was in a different style or anything. There wasn't a mix mash like you have in your game. As for grammar, I don't recall FF7 to ever have bad grammar...

Well anyways what I provided you my previous post were only opinions from my point of view. It's up to you if you want to take them or not. I think the premise of your game is great... but your execution of it... needs a lot of work. Like I said before, however, good luck on this.

 

[Sapphire]

I like:
-your characters
-your nice ideas (selecting character)
-the chars and battlers you made yourself

I do not like:
-you make more mistakes in grammar and spelling than I do and I'm from Germany...
-your mapping seems to be "not the best"

~~So far Sapphire~~

 

[landofshadows]

Can't wait to see what you guys write when you play this...

read this review of FF7... I noticed errors when playing it... but ignored them as it Ruled... http://uk.gamespot.com/ps/rpg/finalfantasy7/review.html

(Sony's translation of the original Japanese dialogue is direct and first-rate, much to the relief of Final Fantasy purists everywhere. Nitpickers may identify a very occasional spelling or grammar error)

Any way... when you look at my title screendo the battlers look like they are a miss Mash...???? NO !!!

Look at like you have never used RPG Maker XP like most end users... They wont be so concerned with slight and subtle differences...

Sapphire - Your English is no doubt better than mine... I have read back what I have put above and it reads fine to me... but They say people with dyslecksia have an eye like no other in reading they don't read into it too much they read through the faults and make sense of mis-spelt words and then in turn spell them wrong them-selves...

Any ways... All the Technical side of the game works fine... I have asked my play tester to check for Grammar issues and spelling error's... But as he pointed out I spell things as they sound... and in the game it comes across as the way they speak, like accents...

And who's to say in my RPG there version of English could be PIG english or Pidgeon English... in each there are differences as often and as normal as we spell Colour and the American's Spell Color... either way it says the same fricken thing...

And as for Grammar the area I fail is mixing up past-tense with actual-Tense (if such thing exsists, but again you get what I mean)... My writting style does suck... may be it will add to the charm as the game progresses...?

Oh... when adding critisium please can you be more specific... like where are these Grammar error's...?

I have the chance to change them before completion...

 

[kaze950]

About Bolo's story, why do the people cast a spell that they thought didn't work?

and don't try to make a poor excuse for bad grammar saying it's PIG english. And spelling errors don't equal accents. Accents are things like, instead of "This is Cool", it becomes "Tis' cool" (Poor example, but you see the point)

And, NARUTO is a popular anime. Don't you think people will find it weird that Sasuke is in the game, but named Yoko and having a differnt story?

As for grammar errors, here's one

"Ram Tam, even though you had a stupid name you was still my friend."

There should be a comma between name and you, if my memory of the english grammar is correct.

Also, it's 'were' not 'was'.

 

[The Cry of Fallen Angels]

I'm very sorry, blaming your spelling on dyslexie (don't you have the program word?, Can't you ask someone to doublecheck the spelling and grammar for you?) and actually referring to a FF7 review just killed the potential this game might have had.

Also, explain what you think the word gothic means.

 

[landofshadows]

Work out the word Gothic from this http://www.gothic.uk.com/

Gothic = Dark, kinda vampirish... Like the Film the Crow... But others would say its romantic and so fourth...

Oh try pasting this sentence into word:-
Tam yam, even though you had a stupid name you was still my friend
(NO PISSING ERRORS... So what am I supposed to BLOODY DO !!!)

It fustrates me being so bad at English... I do try my hardest so stop putting me down... and the thing with FF7 all I am trying to say is the thing that makes an RPG is playability...

Dyslexsia is hard to understand... I don't blame it for nothing but my spelling and Grammar... I hold a good Job... I work in IT... When I am working on an RPG like this though I am thinking of new idea's all the time and flying through and typing things as they come in my head, Some times on People you meet that you have to read ever word I am spell checking... but others that you skip read, lthat only have a few random things to say I am not...

But like I said my Play tester is checking my spelling... but he does not see any thing wrong with like you guys do...

The Sasuke thing... I will sub him out and replace him with a normal person... Done a search on the NET... and its nearly as big as Dragonball Z so I see your point... It would be like having Trunks Make an appearence as a Care Bear or some thing !!!... Ta for the heads up...

You see some one gave me the battler for Sasuke and and asked I make the CHAR set so I did.... I did no other research... I thought he was a small time Manga toon guy... LOL

 

[landofshadows]

Here's my new Title screen:-

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I am going to be re-doing all the Char sheets... I don't much like the happy blue look I have... I want to make them darker... Oh and the Sewer images above have changed I have made a fog and tint effect in them so it looks like its underground...

I am still unsure on the title screen... I am thinking of making one with the Bad guys on it instead... Not sure... As the title suggest the people appearing underneath are those seeking vengence... May be a Blade with Blood on it with that image as a reflection in it and then the bad guys sort of darkened out in the background would look better... Any idea's guys ?

Your opinions do count... I have changed Sasuke and I will change Grammars error as and when some one actually finds one ?

Oh and this Gothic thing... I know I have used a broad sweeping use of the word and stereo typed, but thats what the media does all the time, if some one asked you to describe the film the Crow, you would say its Gothic... If some one was to describemy artwork it would be Gothic and dark.... http://www.stelf.com/los (take a look at my paintings and my Tattoo's)

 

[Balore]

Sound's like an alright game.

Bolo's story sounds the most interesting to me. I really like the Higher Demon on the right.

Good luck!

 

[landofshadows]

Here's some new Screen Shots

New effect in the Well

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Part of Bolo's Intro

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Noticed I didn't show any Interiors... (Of houses)... so here's one

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And I have made a Desert underground Maze... Thats the new Yoko in the shot

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[Sapphire]

If you want to make your chars look more dark and not so ~fenzy~ colorfull, you could maybe just try to desaturate them a bit. I didn't really care about this Naruto guy in your game, because I don't know the manga -.-
The new screens look good, but try to make your interior screens smaller, so there won't be too much empty space. The sewer looks good now.

 

[landofshadows]

I wish in the tile sets for the interiors was more furniture like benches and seats rather than just stools... I have noticed some times I can wealk over tables... it seems to be if I put the Carpet tile down on layer 1 and put the table on top on layer two... I don't want to put the carpet on layer 2 then the table on layer 3 as then you can't add stuff on the table unless you make them events... I know its only some thing small but it bugs... I know there is a Fused Interior tile set some place for download... But the last one I downloaded the Blocking paths had not been set... and I spent half a day getting right and then my computer crashed... and it didn't save...

Glad you like the shots a little more...

The Sasuke char removal I think was a good call... I mean he looked good and all but if people are expecting him to follow a certain story and I go and rip it apart its not good... Its like putting Bruce Lee in a Musical it just doesn't work...

The Bad guys are the ones I want to look sinister... you can see them in Bolo's Intro... they look simular to the Crow... Dark and evil... (I would say Gothic... but some Gothic's will get up-set...)

 

[Sapphire]

@your problem with tables: make sure the stuff you put on tables isn't passable. This is a common mistake many people do. Because, if stuff on the 3rd layer is passable, you can walk through it, evenb thoug the stuff on the 2nd layer isn't passable.

 

[landofshadows]

At the moment I am placing Objects on the table to stop people walking through it... The best example of this is in the interior picture I have posted a little while ago... I had to plaster the table in random junk just so people could not walk over it...

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Its the tile-able carpet that does it... if I remove that thenit works fine... I guess I could cover the table in Invisable Events but then you get the effect you can't get any place close to the table...

Its no major deal... but its annoying...

 

[The Cry of Fallen Angels]

Work out the word Gothic from this http://www.gothic.uk.com/

Gothic = Dark, kinda vampirish... Like the Film the Crow... But others would say its romantic and so fourth...

WRONG

Goth·ic Audio pronunciation of "gothic" ( P ) Pronunciation Key (gthk)
adj.

1.
1. Of or relating to the Goths or their language.
2. Germanic; Teutonic.
2. Of or relating to the Middle Ages; medieval.
3.
1. Of or relating to an architectural style prevalent in western Europe from the 12th through the 15th century and characterized by pointed arches, rib vaulting, and a developing emphasis on verticality and the impression of height.
2. Of or relating to an architectural style derived from medieval Gothic.
4. Of or relating to painting, sculpture, or other art forms prevalent in northern Europe from the 12th through the 15th century.
5. often gothic Of or relating to a style of fiction that emphasizes the grotesque, mysterious, and desolate.
6. gothic Barbarous; crude.

Oh try pasting this sentence into word:-
Tam yam, even though you had a stupid name you was still my friend
(NO PISSING ERRORS... So what am I supposed to BLOODY DO !!!)

I gave 2 suggestions, so you're pretty much telling me you have no friends or family who want to help you.

 

[landofshadows]

Yeah thats right and I sprite with photoshop so I am a Lame arse aswell...LOL

Sorry, I left school years ago... And I don't really converse in idle name calling... so if you want to keep picking fault with every thing I say and continue trying to pick at me I aint bothered...

But if you must know most of my mates have got better things to do then mess about with a poxy RPG maker... Oh Family wise I moved out years ago...have me own house and the only person that lives with me is my GF and she hates Computer games... and if I am pasting into Word and checking my-self then I guess I am doing every thing you said in your last post... and I have said I have a play tester but he can't see any thing wrong with my spelling and Grammar... The only reason I use the RPG maker is I like mapping game making and any thing creative...

I must admit your a creative writer and your siggy is cool... but you are getting right on my tits... Why are you getting personal and attacking me for trying my best ?...

Most people don't know what Gothic is...

(in the same way as your making out you know about Dyslexsia, it effects your spelling... and some times when Word throws up multiple choices its easy to pick the wrong one, I have good days and bad... some times I can spell fine then others I can't, the doctors say its due to my Balance, and my spine being Twisted... Astronauts suffer the same problem when they return to earth from space, they can't spell for a few weeks)

Try typing Gothic in Google and you can see that most interp as I do... And if I want to use the term Gothic to give a description of the Bad guys in my Game then I will... And I don't give a rats arse if Goth (or that term dirives from Medi-evil times)... I mean your trying to make out I am sad... but for you to be that up on Goth shite to me that makes you sad... Every one has their own opinions and twists on things... To me Gothic is a trend and a Fasion in modern times I aint bothered about what it meant in medievil times cuz medevil people aint gunna be playing my game...

I am still learning... I am taking on board people's comments as long as they aint like the above... when she says I am wrong then copies and pastes some thing from the net proving me pretty much right...

5. often gothic Of or relating to a style of fiction that emphasizes the grotesque, mysterious, and desolate.

My bad guys are Grotesque, Mysterious and desolate... And the RPG world is Fictional...

Grotesque = to the point they have painted their faces White and fully cover them selves in black...

Mysterious = Again you can't see thier true faces...

Desolate = They are lonners with no real out look or love of life...

There we go... their Gothic... (can we end the Gothic thing now and get back to talking about RPG Maker...)