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Monkey_Salt
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I wasn't much of a fan of the storyline, nor how slow progressing it was, but the project was amazing on mood and mapping.
Also the "magic trick" game was mad fun.
Also the "magic trick" game was mad fun.
You show a lot of technical prowess, but the scripting is poor (especially the children's), the poor house's mapping is also poorly done (bed next to the toilet?), I couldn't spot any winter clothes (whilst its snowing) and some of the shots were pretty useless (at some point, you were fading in and out every 2 seconds and it didn't actually bring anything to the short). Otherwise, I liked it, especially how the poor are faceless.
Thanks for the feedback!
Heheh aye, I did struggle with the dialogue through out; definitely something to work on. I'm a little on the fence with the bed next to the toilet thing; there were only 2 rooms, and the second bed and the toilet were both in the basement - the setup is unusual but do happen in some poorer places I've seen. However, the fact that the house had a basement to begin with probably elevates the level above that, which is the problem. The lack of winter cloths was due to time constraint as this being a timed contest around the holiday seasons, but definitely very awkward at times.
As for the fading out every 2 seconds part where the mother comes out of a building in each one, I actually did have a set intention for it, but the execution to deliver that point was apparently ineffective. My original intention for that was two things; one being emphasizing the rest of the trip that did happen beyond what was shown for the super market and restaurant without having to watch the entire sequence, and the other being the comparison between the mother's busy day and the others. Again, I understand that the execution there ended up being ineffective, but that was just what I was originally hoping to convey with that scene. c:
Thanks for your time guys!
Heheh aye, I did struggle with the dialogue through out; definitely something to work on. I'm a little on the fence with the bed next to the toilet thing; there were only 2 rooms, and the second bed and the toilet were both in the basement - the setup is unusual but do happen in some poorer places I've seen. However, the fact that the house had a basement to begin with probably elevates the level above that, which is the problem. The lack of winter cloths was due to time constraint as this being a timed contest around the holiday seasons, but definitely very awkward at times.
As for the fading out every 2 seconds part where the mother comes out of a building in each one, I actually did have a set intention for it, but the execution to deliver that point was apparently ineffective. My original intention for that was two things; one being emphasizing the rest of the trip that did happen beyond what was shown for the super market and restaurant without having to watch the entire sequence, and the other being the comparison between the mother's busy day and the others. Again, I understand that the execution there ended up being ineffective, but that was just what I was originally hoping to convey with that scene. c:
Thanks for your time guys!
Dyslogistic
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Bed next to toliet; scungy poor house. Makes sense to me. Maybe not in the mapping visually, but from a layout perspective.
Oh, I am just drawing from personal experience. Say, I watched something a year ago, and there is a forum for it. Some people didn't enjoy it, and some did (for the sake of argument, me). I posted on the forum for a couple of weeks and then go on about my life of busy dictatorship. But that doesn't mean that when there is finally an update with the product in the future, that I wouldn't want to know about it.