The Lost Notes - Stopped it

[robindeen1]

*My effort was useless.
-Close

 

[SoulReaperGod]

Cool Storyline and the game looks good from the screenshots

 

[Fuff24]

Hmm, this could use some work, methinks. I hate to sound elitist, but your characters seem kind of cliche to me. Maybe use different charsets, that would help. Also, you flesh your characters out more. They are very 2-d right now.

 

[GreenGreen]

Out of all the RTP characters, you stick with the default party???

 

[robindeen1]

*Cancel

 

[Desecration]

Not many people can make a game like World of Warcraft, its not expected to be the next number 1 selling game for 4 years with over 11 million active accounts.

What is expected is that you show a little more creativity than keeping the standard party member names and such. A little effort and imagination goes a long way, simple renames and sprite changes make the world of difference.

Good luck with your game.

 

[robindeen1]

I'll change the face, battler, and sprite of basil...
I won't change my characters anymore, because I advanced so far in my game that I can't change these things anymore.
Basil is the last oone I'll change.
I will also keep the names.

 

[SoulReaperGod]

Can't wait till the demo comes out

 

[Desecration]

I just begun, but here are the first screenshots.

I'll change the face, battler, and sprite of basil...
I won't change my characters anymore, because I advanced so far in my game that I can't change these things anymore.
Basil is the last oone I'll change.
I will also keep the names.

Those two bits of writing right there make for a huge contradiction but hey whatever, if you don't want to put effort into making your game the best it can be, thats fine. Just don't expect people to put effort in playing it. Now I know I sound like a total dick but its the truth, like I said before, good luck with your game.

 

[mawk]

You're really crippling player perception of your characters by giving them the default RTP names. People won't be able to read what they say without thinking "hey it's the default RTP dudes," and that'll detract a great deal from whatever characterization you're trying to do.

Don't tell me it's not too tough to think up four nonsense names yourself? Frish, Knott, Gibson, and Raf. There, I just came up with four names in as many seconds. I generally expect names to tie in to the world on some level and not be straight nonsense (Raf Garthen living in Maine,) but even that doesn't take too much effort.

 

[Seafoam]

It seems a little like you rushed to make this thread, just so you could have it out there.
The storyline is original for me atleast. Maybe I just don't read enough storylines, or maybe it actually is.
Mapping could use a little more detail-- so could everything for that matter.
Just add a little more and it could work  :thumb:

 

[Xephyr]

Your grammar is so bad that I didn't even take the time to read the thread.

The next day, it doesn't rain anymore

Come on, man.  Put more time into your writing that just sounds horrible.


The screenshots seem decent, other than the fact that your using pretty much the exact same party and battlers than me cept for the fourth mage, which is a little frustrating.  Work on your mapping, too.

 

[Mazoku]

Looks ok. I like your battlers. Definite room for improvement with the mapping but I've seen far worse. I recommend you get someone to check your grammar though. Its kind of bad... parts of your writing are outright impossible to understand.

 

[ebhz.Ash.4rm]

The names are an immediate put off, as are ghosts in the desert for whatever reason, if you're gonna use RTP enemies and chars then at least place them realistically, okay ghosts of dead travellers could be in that desert but I doubt you'd run into and defeat them every 24 steps.

The story isn't cliche', true but there's no depth to it either also re-reading it I realised:

But one night, as the small group of offers go to the altar

Now they know why nobody returns of the Altar...

They're being offered up to the bloody altar, they would know beforehand that they're going to be killed what kind of retards would they have to be to not realise that?

Also there is no need for you to be such a tight arse about changing your characters, default choice is horrific unless you're doing a spoof. Change them! There is no reason why you cannot, the fact you're using the default means they're dispensable and can be any sprite under the sun, the gender probably doesn't matter much either.

To me, this doesn't look like anything spectacular, more another 5 minute RPG maker virgin project. Good luck.

 

[robindeen1]

I'll stop this RPG.
Because I'm dutch, my grammar won't be perfect.
Oh yeah, and everybody makes sometimes failures.
I'll stop on this forum, because nobody understands people from another country.

-robindeen1
*Close

 

[Desecration]

People do understand other countries, cultures and whatever else you want to bring into the equation the fact wasn't your just your grammar it was the lack of effort that was clear from your post; default RTP sprites, names and systems. I'm all for the RTP and think it can achieve great things but when you are using the default database, its clear that you should be taking more time and putting more effort into it.

What you got in this thread was criticism, nothing more, nothing less. If you choose to cancel a project because of other peoples advice on how to make it better thats your choice.

 

[Ellie]

Hi, we don't lock threads on request, just let it die. Though I see you've editted out the first post, which is bad manners forumwise, so I'm locking this now as the thread has no purpose. But in the future, that sort of action is lame and doesn't help anybody.

 

[Luminier]

And just so you know, just giving up because English isn't your first language is stupid. Unless you're a totally lazy faggot you can learn how to have at least understandable grammar. Throwing in the towel because of something like that is really lame.