The Chronicles of Klya: The Angels of Gaia (BIG BIG UPDATES, PLEASE READ NEW STORY)

[Triforce]

I don't like how it rhymes either..':|
Anyways...

Story: "This is a tale of an 3 Angels.There are 3 worlds, Each share the same atmosphere, Each planet can reach the other 2. These planet's names are: Arcadia, Skariot, and Klya, Each of these planets hold 2 orbs. Arcadia's Thunder and Water orbs, Skariot's Fire and Ice orbs, and Klya's Wind and Earth orbs. Though there is one orb said to have more power than all three. The orb of Light. It is also said this orb is only obtainable when the other 6 are obtained. Skariot stole all of the orbs, after this 3 angels appeared, and sealed them in a shrine, 2 on each continent. 27 years later a treaty has been signed to stop the actions of stealing the orbs. The relationship between the three planets was a very peaceful one, Until Arcadia's king was murdered. After King Eliot was murdered, King Raslon took over.
Three years after King Raslon took over, Arcadia went to war with the Klyans. It was a surprise and Kloa was defenseless. Arcadia took Klya's Fire and Wind orbs. A legend is told. "When the orbs are in peril,the three angels will be reborn." It has been 15 years since Arcadia took control of the orbs, It has been 30 years since that prophecy, And it will need to be fulfilled soon because Arcadia is currently at war with Skariot, for their orbs, But even if Arcadia loses, Skariot will still have access to the light orb. Will Klya stop the other two worlds from gaining control of the Light Orb?"
Characters:
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Sol:
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Age:17
Height: 5'9"
Personality: Very humble, but very brave, He's very optomistic, And secretly is in love with Ruby.He's been learning swordcraft ever since he was 8, and quickly mastered it. He enters tournaments for money. (also part of the game)
Classes:Swordsman,Thief,Ninja,Knight,Rogue,Disciple,Lord,Assassin,Samurai.

Karlon:
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Age:19
Height: 6'2"
Personality: Very quiet, a very powerful warrior, Is very passionate about what he does.
Classes: Same as Sol's.
Ruby:
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Age:17
Height 5'7"
Personality: Very caring, looks out for Sol alot, Sol and her have been friends ever since they were 5 years old. She was taught Spearsman-ship from her grandfather. She is a former Myranian Soldier. But she missed Sol too much and met back up with him at the small town of Hara.
Classes:Spearsman, Lancemaster,Dragoon,Seraphim.

Atreus:
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Age:16
Height: 5'6
Personality: Ever since he was born people thought he was born of a demon because of his blood red eyes, He can be very violent, but also very caring.
Classes:Axe-Fighter, Warrior,Champion, Viking.

Kaira:
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Age:18
Height: 5'8
Personality:Very energetic, always seems not to think enough, but is very intelligent, and fights with strategy.
Classes: Disciple, Ninja, Samurai, Flame-Lord.

Shia:
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Age:16
Height: 5'5
Personality: Very timid, and always thinks negatively of things he thinks are dangerous.
Classes:Mage, Cleric, Magician,Bishop,Sage,Seraphim.

Arielle:
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Age: 16
Height: 5'6"
Personality: Kaira's sister, she's a very shy girl, and isn't brave enough to tell Atreus she loves him.
Classes:Same as Shia's


Class System: Whenever you get a character in Cok:AoG, you'll be able to pick his starting class, There are three levels to each class. I make them get more powerful, by adding their attribute resistance.The current classes, and probably final, are:
Class Level 1:
Swordsman
Soldier(lancer)
Axe-Fighter
Mage
Cleric
Dark Knight
Disciple
Thief
Archer

Descriptions:
Swordsman is the basic class that is probably the most balanced. Element: Earth

Soldiers have good defense but lack Power.Element:Ice

Axe-Fighters are powerful, but lack speed.Element:Water

Mages have low defense, but very high magic, mainly use offensive magic.Element:All

Clerics are just like mages, but use mainly use defensive magic.Element:All

Dark Knights are a great class, but aren't available right from the get-go, they have high attack, and their skills do wonders, Their only downside is resistance.Element: Darkness

Disciples are alot like swordsmans, but have a lack of defense, make up for it with agility.Element:Fire

Thieves are a good class for Karlon to start out with, Because Karlon's already high agility will be boosted, and since he has high attack, it will even out to be as strong as a Ninja or Swordsman's.Element:Wind.

Archer's are very frustrating, and aren't very good in the beggining because of all of the earth elemental enemies. But when they become Snipers and Arch-Soldiers, they end up to be a very good class.

As you should see, they also go in order of when they promote classes,
Swordsman->Knight->Lord etc.
Class Level 2:
Knight
Lancemaster
Warrior
Magician
Bishop
Dark Warrior
Ninja
Rogue
Sniper

Class Level 3:
Lord
Dragoon
Champion
Sage
Seraphim
Shadow Rider
Samurai
Assassin
Arch-Soldier.

EXTRA:
Flame-Lord
Viking
Seraph Knight
Arcadian

Battle System: Still Looking, but it will probably just be an RTAB edit.

 

[Kojo]

Ruby's spear looks too flat compared to the other guys. Hint: The story lines with the elements, and the orbs, and the end of the world has been done before; I'm not trying to put you off, just warning you that it is difficult to pull it off. Make sure the characters are real, and the graphics are up to snuff,and people will play your game.

 

[Lexy]

heres another hint dude i believe those are battlers if not just ignore this but you may want to make them larger if your using a default battle system because they will be hidden underneath status believe me happened plenty of times befor.

but if you can post a screen shot (at least 1) and make a list of the features in your game youd probably get some more attention

by the way i noticed you have 6 orbs and 7 towers is that just a typo or was it intended that way

 

[Zeos]

I"ve seen this all before...
No really, maybe you should work on the storyline for about a week or so before posting a topic? :\

 

[Mundane]

More information. More story development. You need to do some planning and know your cliches before make a thread. We've all seen this before.

Peace,
EiB

 

[Triforce]

Slight updates.

 

[Triforce]

bump

 

[Triforce]

BIG BUMP, PLEASE READ STORY CHANGES!

 

[jbstuff]

My suggestion to you dude is to not pay attention to anyone who wants to sh*t all over your ideas and story. Make your story the way you want, who cares if its been done before in one form or another. Human creativity is built upon the successes and the copying of the previous generation, there is simply no such thing as "completely original" anyway.

But most importantly, remember that this is supposed to be fun FOR YOU. In the end it doesn't even matter if anyone else plays it or likes it, all that matters is if you like it.

I think some people can take this whole thing a little too seriously, we're not big bad game developers, we're not Square-Jr. we're stupid goofy nerds who love the idea of making our own video games.

I've been RPGMaking since 1997/8, the Hamster Republic first released the Official Hamster Republic Role Playing Game Construction Engine (OHRPGGCE), after that I remember when RPGMaker95 was being translated by KanjiHack, but didn't finish--then I remember the great and all powerful Don Miguel (peace be upon him) translating it--and history was born that way.

For us old enough to remember all that, we remember what it was like first starting out, not even knowing how to program an event, first learning how to get that little pixely dude to say "Hello" then turn on a switch and say "How are you" and the thrill of figuring that out.

Let's try and keep everything light-hearted around here, let's try and keep RPGMaking fun.

Your idea is just fine

-Jon

 

[Triforce]

I do whole-heartedly agree with you, but I did see their point, and now I hopefully have a more original plot now that I pretty much changed the whole premise, that I'm starting to really like.

 

[Junk-Man]

The story sounds solid, if a little cliche. Keep up the good work.

 

[Triforce]

I plan on putting up some screenies later today.