Super Mario Bros.

[kaze950]

Act I



Two Castles, a princess, and a koopa king
In the Mushroom Kingdom, where we set our scene
A love which transcends species, an obsession owned by one
A courtship shared by many, to the princess who shined as if the sun

In the eighth world of eight, in the last of thirty two
Sits a giant koopa in a castle, and thus is his debut
Abaft him sits a crimson axe, below him lava flows
He looks towards the silver walls, fire spewing from his nose.

His spies, small goombas, return from his love?s castle
And with them the bring news, from her most trusted vassal
A common man loves the princess, and it is she who returns his gaze
And thus Bowser roars, his bellow deep and his soul ablaze:

?WHO IS THIS MAN OF WHOM YOU SPEAK, OF WHOM MY LOVE ADORES??
?This man is plumber known as Mario and it is red clothes which he wore!?
?A PLUMBER!? A COMMONER!? ONE OF THE LOWEST CLASS!??
?HOW IS IT SHE CAN LOVE HIM SO? BAH, I AM AGHAST!?

And thus a plan was set in motion, a plan most complex and most foul
The princess would be kidnapped, and thus the trap would be set; Bowser howled,
?HE WILL TRY TO SAVE HER! THIS PLUMBER DONNED IN RED!?

?BAH!!!?

?HE SHALL BE DEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAD!?

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Act II


At the dawn succeeding a late-summer night,
The princess was taken and thus began her plight
Trapped in the coldness, the silver stoned prison
She could only hope and pray, for her, by Mario, to be risen.

The crimson clothed plumber discovered her capture,
And promptly set out, for it was her he would enrapture.
With only his mighty jump and the occasional mushroom,
He defeated the goombas, the koopas, and the plants which pipes bloomed.

And to a dungeon-like castle, the plumber was led
Cursed with traps, and lava and the immortal undead.
Thusly, he came face to face with the giant koopa, and without hesitation?
He attacked, and attacked, but alas?it was a mere imitation!

Although a simple fake, it moved with great strength!
And when it did jump, he ran under its length!
Using the axe, the great koopa fell to the flames abode.
However, what should appear next, but a simple toad.

Thus it became clear, seven toads and the princess must have been scattered,
Thus Mario wept, his spirit slightly shattered.
?Curse you, o?fates, for giving me this burden, this hassle!?

?MAMA MIA!?

?THE PRINCESS? IS IN, ANOTHER CASTLEEEEEEEEEEEEE!?


to be continued

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Act III will come soon...please discuss

 

[Mega Flare]

you should be SHOT!

 

[Andy6000]

This is writing so I moved it where writing goes! Nobody mention that I messed it up and moved it to other entertainment first!

 

[EmuMaster2002]

What a crappy mod! Doesn't even know where to stick stuff! :P

Large text aside, this is interesting to say the least.

 

[Kojo]

Strange, and amusing. End.

 

[Ratty524]

This is writing so I moved it where writing goes! Nobody mention that I messed it up and moved it to other entertainment first!

*runs off and mentions mistake*

Wow, nice... poem?

 

[kaze950]

Act III
And thus he traveled very far, in the koopa king’s domain
Through 6 worlds he did so travel, through sky and sea and all terrain
And where should he come, after 3 lands in World Eight
But the keeper of the silver castle, where his love did await.

He lept through the fire, he killed all his foes
He fought the fish in the water, but this was the least of his woes
For what should await him at the end of his haul?
Non other than Bowser; It was time to brawl.

“YOU’VE COME TO ME PLUMBER, YOU HAVE COME AT LAST”
His roar was ferocious, and his size was large and vast.
“I shall never surrender! I shall never resign!”
“I shall kill you, o Bowser! Ye who are most malign!”

The two battled for hours, for each other they did abhor
“DIE!” they both said, “SO I CAN BE WITH THE ONE I ADORE”
The man saw an axe in the distance, which could let him win
Although the king blocked his path, he had the power within.

As bowser’s mouth lit aflame, and he leaped oh so high
The plumber slid under him; Bowser’s plans went awry!
But Bowser had landed, and he prepared to attack!
Mario ran fast, and didn’t look over his back!

Mario lept and he reached out his hand to the axe
Not a moment to soon, the bridge broke, became lax!
Bowser barely held on, and since Mario was in clover
He looked to the koopa, and taunted, “Game Over!”

And so it was, that the king fell to his ultimate doom
And thus the lava and fire forever became the koopa’s tomb
Now the princess could be rescued, as defeated was their ultimate foe
And she greeted him with but only 3 words… “THANK YOU MARIO!”

 

[JD_Slasha]

Very creative, but the rhythm of lines aren't always equal. you should try to make lines flow more fluidly. Take for example this line:

You wrote:
A love which transcends species, an obsession owned by one
A courtship shared by many, to the princess who shined as if the sun


I write:
A love which transcends species, an obsession owned by one
A courtship shared by many, The princess shone like the sun.

Second Example:

You Wrote:

Curse you, o?fates, for giving me this burden, this hassle!?

?MAMA MIA!?

?THE PRINCESS? IS IN, ANOTHER CASTLEEEEEEEEEEEEE!?

I write:
Curse you, O fate, for this burden, this hassle.
The Princess, learned Mario, is in another castle. . . .


See how it's more fluid and less awkward. You have too much verbiage in many lines, but I still give you props for creativity.

Aside from that, just a few grammatical errors. No biggie. Kudos.

 

[kaze950]

Yeah, I agree.

This wasn't meant to be serious poem though. I was inspired to write it after this topic - http://www.rmxp.org/forums/showthread.php?t=22742&page=3