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SEE I Dont care so much Of Pancakes so please just reply positive or negatvive things of the game
Im not that suprised that you want to cry or laugh please tell me why you want top cry or laugh
is it because u cant make games Im Atlease giving it a try this is my frist actuall game
stop being such a wiseass..
Im not that suprised that you want to cry or laugh please tell me why you want top cry or laugh
is it because u cant make games Im Atlease giving it a try this is my frist actuall game
stop being such a wiseass..
Kylebot2000
Member
This looks pretty bad. >___> Also, age does not account for skill. My brother is 12 and he creates games that are on par with some of my games.
Yea I Know it is enabled to create better games on ages but i dont have that much time of my life to make a game im in norway Cup right now so the last im thinking of is creating a game maybe when i have a little spare time il make this game better. your brother is 12 and he creates better story event and maybe sprites but so much said i dont care that much of who makes games better than me im not going to become a game maker either. im just doing this for fun. fotball is much more important to me so is school. i saw dreamland that was created by 11 year old guy and that game looks pretty sweet.
i said this is the most *i* can get out of this game. the maps will also become better but still. the reason il release this game on almost novemeber 2009 is because of fotball, school. and much more il make the game better though you will get some ingame screens soon. though cause when this game is done il make a Naruto Game. but yet almost everybody uses Side view Battle system or like Front view Battle system and many more. but i think Real time based is the best game that can be made.but thanks for the comment
i said this is the most *i* can get out of this game. the maps will also become better but still. the reason il release this game on almost novemeber 2009 is because of fotball, school. and much more il make the game better though you will get some ingame screens soon. though cause when this game is done il make a Naruto Game. but yet almost everybody uses Side view Battle system or like Front view Battle system and many more. but i think Real time based is the best game that can be made.but thanks for the comment
I don' think this is a troll since he was asking for rescources before...
You really need to improve on everything everyone said... Else this is not going to be to cool...
And don't come with this I make this for fun shit again. You put it out here, so you are making it for us now! And if we think people are not giving it thhyr best we get like this, mate!
You really need to improve on everything everyone said... Else this is not going to be to cool...
And don't come with this I make this for fun shit again. You put it out here, so you are making it for us now! And if we think people are not giving it thhyr best we get like this, mate!
Anonymous
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Guys for all your whining none of you have made any suggestions for improvements. Stop being jerks for the sake of it, it doesn't make you look cool.
If you don't like it and can't think of any helpful suggestions why the hell are you bumping it? If you think it's a troll you're feeding it by responding in the first place.
Akuma, you might want to run your post through a spellchecker or find a beta-reader or something. People obviously aren't taking you seriously and that could be helped by having your post be a little easier to read.
If you don't like it and can't think of any helpful suggestions why the hell are you bumping it? If you think it's a troll you're feeding it by responding in the first place.
Akuma, you might want to run your post through a spellchecker or find a beta-reader or something. People obviously aren't taking you seriously and that could be helped by having your post be a little easier to read.
Perihelion
Sponsor
I second everything Wumpi said.
Akuma, your spelling and grammar make it pretty hard to get to the meat of what you're saying, but from what I can see, this needs some work. The problems are pretty broad, though; I'd recommend looking around the 'Net to find some resources on characterization and plotting. I didn't like the first few results I found when I checked, though, so I'll just throw a couple things out about characterization.
Generally speaking, good characters should have the following things:
1. A compelling need or motivation. This is the thing above all else your character wants out of life. Example: say your character is a middle-aged father trying to secure a better life for his family so his kids can have everything he couldn't. Not an original or exciting example, but you get the idea.
2. A goal. This is what he's doing to meet his compelling need. In the above example, the character could be saving money to send his kids to college.
3. Change over the course of the story. While static characters certainly serve a place in fiction, you'll usually want your main character to develop during the course of the story. This is how what he experiences changes him, what he learns about life, etc. Let's say my example dad becomes bitter and jaded when his kids rebel against his harsh standards and drop out of school to deal drugs.
A lot of sources on the Internet will tell you that figuring out your character's favorite breakfast cereal will make him a deep character, but while little details can be nice to add little touches of realism here and there, they aren't what will make your character live and breathe and make your players care. Giving him some human problem to wrestle with will if you do it right. Of course there's more to it than that, but that oughta get you started, anyway.
Akuma, your spelling and grammar make it pretty hard to get to the meat of what you're saying, but from what I can see, this needs some work. The problems are pretty broad, though; I'd recommend looking around the 'Net to find some resources on characterization and plotting. I didn't like the first few results I found when I checked, though, so I'll just throw a couple things out about characterization.
Generally speaking, good characters should have the following things:
1. A compelling need or motivation. This is the thing above all else your character wants out of life. Example: say your character is a middle-aged father trying to secure a better life for his family so his kids can have everything he couldn't. Not an original or exciting example, but you get the idea.
2. A goal. This is what he's doing to meet his compelling need. In the above example, the character could be saving money to send his kids to college.
3. Change over the course of the story. While static characters certainly serve a place in fiction, you'll usually want your main character to develop during the course of the story. This is how what he experiences changes him, what he learns about life, etc. Let's say my example dad becomes bitter and jaded when his kids rebel against his harsh standards and drop out of school to deal drugs.
A lot of sources on the Internet will tell you that figuring out your character's favorite breakfast cereal will make him a deep character, but while little details can be nice to add little touches of realism here and there, they aren't what will make your character live and breathe and make your players care. Giving him some human problem to wrestle with will if you do it right. Of course there's more to it than that, but that oughta get you started, anyway.
Your blatent use of Lloyd from ToS is quite annoying, imo. anyone who has played ToS will be majorly turned off towards your project because of it.
Also, your story is freakishly random; it doesnt really follow logic. "this happened, then this, OMGGGG then this." if you jumbled up a space story, some ghosts, a bunch of crystals, An alien, an assassin, and a character who needs revenge for the death of his grandparents: youd end up with your story; even fantasy has logic in it. the story is the base of your game, and it needs A LOT of work, or starting over completely might be your best bet. im not sure at this point. :\
Also, your story is freakishly random; it doesnt really follow logic. "this happened, then this, OMGGGG then this." if you jumbled up a space story, some ghosts, a bunch of crystals, An alien, an assassin, and a character who needs revenge for the death of his grandparents: youd end up with your story; even fantasy has logic in it. the story is the base of your game, and it needs A LOT of work, or starting over completely might be your best bet. im not sure at this point. :\
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And yea i dont care that much of what people think of my game
its just a game if i finish it il be happy.
and didnt you hear i dont have that much time to make a game
everybodys game include so much story almost no gameplay boring boring boring. games that include much story no gaming thats boring games not that i know that much of games either. Im Not An RMXP Freak Either or nor a game freak. its Just A Game
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And yea i dont care that much of what people think of my game
its just a game if i finish it il be happy.
and didnt you hear i dont have that much time to make a game
everybodys game include so much story almost no gameplay boring boring boring. games that include much story no gaming thats boring games not that i know that much of games either. Im Not An RMXP Freak Either or nor a game freak. its Just A Game
Perihelion
Sponsor
If you're going to post a project here, the first thing you need to do--even above making a quality game--is understand how to take constructive criticism. You can ignore posts that say, "Your game sucks; go kill yourself." But if a post says, "[Specific thing about game] sucks, and this is how to fix it," listen to it, because the person is trying to help you, not put you down. You don't have to follow it if you don't agree, but someone put some time and effort into thinking about how you can make your game better, so thank them nicely and take their comments into consideration. As it is, getting defensive and saying that you don't care what we think because it's just a game makes us not want to help you in the future.
Now, if you don't want to make your project better because, say, you're just doing this to learn the program or kill some time, that's perfectly fine, and no one here is saying it isn't. But--and this is the part you seem to have missed--if that's the case, your topic has no place on this board. This board is for people who are seriously trying to make good games, and if you're not, you probably won't like what happens when you post here.
Now, if you don't want to make your project better because, say, you're just doing this to learn the program or kill some time, that's perfectly fine, and no one here is saying it isn't. But--and this is the part you seem to have missed--if that's the case, your topic has no place on this board. This board is for people who are seriously trying to make good games, and if you're not, you probably won't like what happens when you post here.