opium's dump

[moxie]

Alright, I'm pretty new to this pixeling thing so any and all critiques are majorly appreciated.

Templates

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Started on a template and a walk cycle... eventually I want it to be 6-7 frames, but I'd rather improve what I've got first. edit: I've decided to work on smaller stuff until I get better, and then try to do a big template, so I probably won't work on this abomination for a while


The beginning of an attempt to edit the RTP so it's less goofy-looking, but I really don't like her face. She looks high or something.


Version 2.

Characters

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Practice sprite from the sad attempt at a template up there. :I


Character from the edited RTP.

More to come as I get more time.

 

[action]

You need a better pallette
Shading isn't always just a darker shade of a colour. For skin, you often go into a pinkish, or orange hue.
This is what I use (basic shades):

It's a good example of where to go with your colours, to add life to your sprites. I wouldn't use these colours exactly, and these colours only - you're going to need some in-between shades, and might need a lighter shade, ect.

Also, you may want to fix the face a bit - it looks like the sprite has one absurdly large nose.
Maybe raise the eyes, a little less shading there, more focus on the out sides, and around the eye.

 

[moxie]

Alright, thanks for the crit.

I decided to try my hand at editing a pre-existing template before I start on something as ambitious as a large template like the one above at my skill level. So I started editing the RTP, trying to pay particular attention to color like you said, trying to make it more dynamic.

 

[Nachos]

why are all girls good at pixel art? i absolutely suck at it. try to use ImageZoom ( ) ; so its better for us to see the image and gradients.
Imo the chest is too shiny compared to the sides.

 

[action]

Hey! I'm good at pixel art too >:I
Just never show it off :P

I can see a slight improvement, but you're characters still looks gray.
Add a bit more pink to the shades

 

[moxie]

Gotcha. Updated again, and I tried to push the color more.



Got started on the back sprites, but frame 1 and 3 look terrible. Like... tubular caterpillars attached to her torso.

 

[Jason]

... That editted character from the RTP looks pretty good, although it looks like you've used a few too many colours, and there isn't enough contrast.

But uhh, your title is misleading, I was expecting a picture of an actual dump in the toilet, maybe with you doing a thumbs up at the side of it... you make me sad.

 

[action]

This is the palette to go with. I also fixed up the area around the eyes.

Hope this helps!

 

[Loraine]

These are really nice templates. I wonder if these will be usable in RPG Maker 2000. I don't think so but it is worth a try!

I like the style and the colours though.

Oh dear, Jb, you don't need to bring toilet humour into every sentence to be funny you know!

 

[Jason]

... Oh come on, the title says "opium's dump", I didn't even know what an internet "dump" was until like a year ago... the first time I heard about someone making a dump thread, I literally thought it was going to have a picture of a log in the toilet, so I was scared to click it... I was 11 at the time, welcome to the internet, eh?

Anyways, can't really say anything else extra onto what I said before, try using less colours for your templates, but increase the contrast so you can tell the difference, I'm starting to get the hang of using 4-7 colours for an entire template or whatever I'm doing.