My Title Critque?

[Kodi Hammon]

This is my Title for my Newest Game Alchemy which I have worked the most on
please tell me if you can read the title.. :smile:

 

[KuidonNZ]

I can read it fine, but that might have something to do with you telling me what it said...
The writing is interesting but the title screen as a whole looks kinda bland.
If there is gona be a subtitle added to the title it would be good to post that in the same writing, without telling us what it says and asking us If we can read it.

Though on second thought, people should know what it says already if they've gone to the trouble of downloading your game or whatever...

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Thanks I think of some subtitle :wink:

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Ok how's This?

 

[Velocir_X]

Your letter are uneven, that seriously detracts from it
furthermore the title would look best large, and across the top above the symbol
furthermore it (looks) like a book cover, so you should add edges to make it look more defined

But anyway it looks nice - I like the simplistic look

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Thanks so your saying the NEW GAME COUNTIUE AND QUIT should not be right there? And put it over the top of the symbol?

 

[Velocir_X]

Nah I meant something like this

feel free to move the command window were ever

its just that when you set it off to the side it unbalances it (I took a graphic art class :P)

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Is this any better?

 

[KuidonNZ]

Yes, it does look nice centered, and I actually cant read the subtitle...
Obviously I can read 'the' but what is the next word, 'exfen'?

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Exfell is the next word

 

[KuidonNZ]

Yeah I see that now...
The 'l's next to each other did look a bit like an 'n'...

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Hmm My N's would probaly be my M's with one side cut off.. lol

 

[Velocir_X]

It looks much better centered but there's still room to improve
I took the liberty of illustrating some points in paint:

 

[KuidonNZ]

If your going to do the book look like Velocir_X has suggested, I think you should make it look worn like an old book.
Discolor some spots and try make it look like the cover is peeling at the edges.
This is because when I think of Alchemy I think of Old, what do you think?

 

[Velocir_X]

Nah he doesn't have to go to for the book look,
its just what sprung to mind when I saw his texture - just looks like a lot of my books
the main thing to get out of my pic is the thing about the text - its what really bugs me
but yeah if he goes for the book look I'd suggest making it worn in places

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Actually I think I will go for the Book. What would make it even better with Book look is when you click New game it flings open and it fades to the screen where you begin. that would be awsome but for now I go with normal Book

 

[Kodi Hammon]

Well here it is...


I don't really Like it that much so I'm going to make it look like Cloth... I Think that would be better? Any agreements?

 

[Velocir_X]

Nah the problem is a perspective issue you have to cut the edges so it looks like its slanted, that's all

 

[Velocir_X]

(excuse the double post its accidental)
also I'd suggest following Kuidon's age thing and make it frayed in places

Finally the text problem is still not fixed

 

[Kodi Hammon]

ok but you posted the same thing twice XD but I like the Cloth Idea more anyways