My first character chip...

[Chiyo Osaka]

I'm asking all of you for your opinions on what I have so far.
The outfit is based in a Korean school uniform.
What do you think of it? Be brutally honest.
EDIT: I won't be back until tommorow, so excuse my absence.
5/24 EDIT: Character chip taken down.

 

[Spiritual]

You forgot to shade in the forehead. Along with that, the white parts need more shading, and the hair looks flat. Try making it seem more... thread-y. You need more lines running through it. Additionally, the hair outline needs some shading as well.

It's not too bad of a start, I suppose. Then again, I'm not exactly a spriting master. :D

 

[Atnas]

I think an outline would help the appearance greatly. I don't say this often, but it's not flat enough, in my opinion.

Try to cel-shade a smidgen more.

 

[JD_Slasha]

Hmmm.. In my opinion, I think the hair should be bigger,and I think a sharper outline might flesh out the character a wee bit better. Otherwise, it looks nice. Much better than what I could do with my first spriteset ever way back when. Keep at it!

 

[Chiyo Osaka]

When you say outline, do you mean the whole character, using that purple color on the template? The hair was meant to be thinner. And how do you cel-shade on these templates? It looks wierd.

 

[Spiritual]

When you say outline, do you mean the whole character, using that purple color on the template? The hair was meant to be thinner. And how do you cel-shade on these templates? It looks wierd.

You don't need to use purple. I believe he's saying that the outline doesn't contrast enough with the actual colour.
The outline should typically be a dark shade of whatever it's outlining. For example, for the vest, the outline would be dark blue. Also make sure that for shinier things, the outline is shaded as well.

 

[JD_Slasha]

Exactly what SpiritZephyr just said. Giving the conrast with outlines and colors will make the sprite look a lot better. Sorry, I should've been more clear.

 

[ccoa]

Your palettes need more contrast. It's very difficult to see the difference between the shades.

 

[Chiyo Osaka]

Hmm, I see. I'll try to improve it. Thanks, y'all.
Oh yeah, asking for closing of this topic.

 

[Atnas]

Your palettes need more contrast. It's very difficult to see the difference between the shades.

That's what I meant by cel-shade, sorry for not clearing it up.

Good luck with future sprites, you're off to a nice start.