Mo Mo Monsters Comic

[Colormagix]

Hey Everyone I just wanted to get some feedback on the Mo Mo Monster Comic Book "Toki's Big Big Adventure".

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[Mac]

Way too shot for a comic, not even interesting....you need work on getting the viewer interested...try using the simple Equilibrium rule.

 

[Shedlight]

that wasnt funny, or interesting, the punchline or whatever it is made me want to kill myself.

The artwork is really cute, but as the guy above me said (who i hate with my deeperst heart cos his avatar is of L, which by the way kira pwns :D ) Try to keep the viewer interested, come up with unique gags that will keep people laughing and want to view more, Read some cyanide and happiness comics and you will get the right idea

 

[Shadow_Strike]

Deathnote is a good anime, but not when everyone is so crazy about it and goes fanboy or what ever.

But anyways... look at the comic, its 001, that means he plans to have more, and if you look at how it wasn't funny at all, he isn't trying to be comedious.

 

[Rain]

Deathnote is a good anime, but not when everyone is so crazy about it and goes fanboy or what ever.

I'd like to think I was the first on RMXP to have it in my sig and avi and by a long margin as well



Anyway, on topic. If that's supposed to be a one page thing like people think it is then yeah, it sucks, but I get the feeling from the small 001 at the bottom that it's more of an entire story, you really should have waited until you had an interesting bit of story to show us before posting it though, an acorn falling from the sky is hardly riviting, also your drawings are inconsistent, why is his body circular when he is facing sideways yet a weird pair shape when facing forwards?