Ifrit's Tale (C&C NEEDED)

[hellhound]

Engine: Rpg Maker XP

Story
at the world of Ragnarok, A Story takes place of the flame Guardian hero Ifrit, brought into the Madness of Glass Heredy, the Steward of the Ice Castle at the winter ever kingdom of Icegard ruled by the Great Queen Zenneth Glacies..... Glass decided to poison the queen, so the queen was too weak to handle the Kingdom of Icegard. later on, Glass planned to wreck havoc upon the Kingdoms of all elements turning them to Cold shivering kingdoms, so Glass can rule all of Ragnarok, but to do so, he'll need to capture all Elemental Guardians and take each their Elemental Shards (yes, including Ifrit) so that he could combine their Elemental prowess to himself, thus turning him into a Guardian himself acquiring all abilities in each Element, after he can gain Godlike powers, he'll plan to do what he should do next, Rule Ragnarok and cause absolute zero coldness! Now Ifrit was asked by the Flame Elder to put a stop on this, he knows himself that his Fire is everyone's only hope.

Runelore- The Kingdom of heaven, the place of where Gods live and pass judgement against the people on Ragnarok, it's a place of hollow white sand and millions of thrones where each God sit and handle their resembling deity.

Elemental Shards-are small pieces of Crystal found when after an Elemental Guardian is defeated, all Elemental Guardians needs it to have full power of being an Elemental Guardian, without these, they are not worth called a Guardian, and If these are found, it is able to let the owner summon the Elemental Guardian itself out.

Spoiler: Characters

Ifrit
Age- 1000 years old
Race- Elemental Guardian
Status- Playable Character
- An Elemental Guardian of flames, brought himself unto saving Ragnarok, he'll now do everything in his power to protect everyone in Ragnarok, he has a crush on Shiva, although becomes nervous to see her, he now tries to stop himself from being Grumpy and Hotheaded to anyone, he tries to be nicer alot.

Rawr
Age- 18 years old
Race- God
Status- Playable Character
- He's a Fire Imp God and the youngest of all Gods at Runelore, the King of Gods "Falberith" passed temporary judgment against Rawr accusing him of creating his own blasphemous belief against Falberith, but wasn't the truth at all, but he was still punished, trapped and sealed at Mt. Rawr, but Ifrit freed him from the seal, Rawr now's accompany Ifrit to save Ragnarok, he's very immature, and a Killjoy sometimes, easily gets fights, but he's easily charmed by girls, but deeply inside, he's got alot of problems regarding his mortal enemy Gasseus and his Alter ego, he's unstable at times because of his dark alter ego "Ehlz" who seems to bother his life.

Ehlz
Age- ???
Race- Dark God
Status- Playable Character
- The Evil Alter ego of Rawr and his Dark side of being a god, the Side of mysteries, mischief, hatred, and arrogance, the Form of his death, pain and torment, Ehlz is the reason why Rawr becomes unstable, becoming dominant over Rawr's body is what he's meant to achieve.

Gretel
Age- 8 years aold
Race- Alwendian
Status- Playable Character
- A very silent and shy little girl, she get's so shy when Ifrit talks to her, cause she had a secret crush on him, she also has the power to bend the leaves around her.

Hansel
Age- 8 years old
Race- Alwendian
Status- Playable Character
- Gretel's Twin brother at Alwendia, he's a complete scardy cat, not literally, but he always cowars, he also wields a bow.

Shiva
Age- 1000 years old
Race- Elemental Guardian
Status- Playable Character
- She's an apprentice of Zenneth Glacies, and an Elemental Guardian of Ice, she learns more about Icicle magic teachings with Zenneth.

Kobo
Age- 20 years old
Race- Kobold
Status- Playable Character
- a Kobold warrior from the kingdom of earth element "Titania" he weilds a sword which was given to him by his Father who died during the war between Titania and Icegard, he accompanies Ifrit for Revenge over Icegard and also to help save Ragnarok.

Zenneth Glacies
Age- 45 years old
Race- Icegarian
Status- NPC
- Queen of Icegard, owns the icicle Castle.

Glass Heredy
Age- 50 years old
Race- Icegarian
Status- NPC
-the Steward of the Ice Castle, he's job was to take care of the Castle while the queen's away, although he has some evil schemes up his sleeves.

Odin
Age- 45 years old
Race- Elemental Guardian
Status- NPC
-The final Elemental Guardian also called the Prism elemental, controls every Element around the world, he's also the Reincarnation of Glass after he takes control of every Elemental Shards.

Cinderellla
Age- 32 years old
Race- Alwendian
Status- NPC
-Hansel and Gretel's Mother, she seems to appear suddenly in a weird way in a Rush time, she always help Ifrit on his way the time she appears.

Gasuess
Age- 21 years old
Race- God
Status- NPC
- the Second youngest Gods at Runelore, he's the God of Kobolds, he's Rawr's Mortal enemy, Rawr managed to kill him, but after he reincarnated, he was pleased by the fact that he's chosen to pass final judgment on Rawr for his Believed Blasphemous Actions towards Falberith.

Stephanie
Age- 22 years old
Race- Mistdian
Status- NPC
-also called the sleeping beauty, she keeps on getting tired so easily, but her sleepiness can become very helpfull sometimes, she's the one who Ifrit first met at Mistda, and introduces him to the Village.

Kingdoms
Icegard: ruled by Queen Zenneth Glacies, a kingdom of Ice
Alwendia: ruled by Queen Kashis Alterwind, a kingdom of wind
Titania: ruled by King Ema Brokestone, a kingdom of earth
Vulcanus: ruled by King Amu Fireheart, a kingdom of fire
Novae: ruled by Queen Sonova, a Kingdom of Force
Mistda: ruled by King Gote Shock, a kingdom of thunder
(rulers first names Courtesy of Hoshigami)

Planned Scripts to use
CTB by charlee lee
MOG's costume menu set

Team
hellhound - Director/Eventer
hirominji - Mapper/Spriter


All I'm needing!
RESOURCES and SCRIPTS SUCH AS!:
Tilesets for Each Kingdom (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Tilesets for the Ice Castle (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Charsets for the Characters (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Facesets for the Characters (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Costume Menu System (I'll explain the concept when your interested)
Costume Animated Battle system (I'll explain the concept when your interested)
Costume Party Changer Script (I'll explain the concept when your interested)
Animations
C&C

well, that's all! ^^ it can't hurt to drop a line and give Suggestion for the plot, or some C&C! ^^

 

[hiromomiji]

Tilesets for Each Kingdom (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Tilesets for the Ice Castle (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Charsets for the Characters (I'll explain details when your interested!)
Facesets for the Characters (I'll explain details when your interested!)

I think I can help you with this...more details please XD!!and its for rpmx or rpvx??

 

[hellhound]

OMG, really? you will?! :fap: :fap:

THANKS! it's for XP btw, ok, here are the details:

Tilesets for each (details):

Icegard: A Snowy kingdom, it'll need houses that are in medieval times also a castle for the kingsom would be nice too, btw, the atmosphere of the snow will be more "not so light/too lonely" types

Alwendia: A Kingdom of wind will consist of mainl houses with windmills above them, so maybe that could work, the streets can be the streets you see at old times like Medieval.

Titania: An earth kingdom, it could look exactly like the Mine Town in RMXP RTP Tilesets, beside that, the house can be made of rocks?

Vulcanus: A Kingdom of fire, the atmosphere can be the same as the Fire Cave in rmxp RTP, basically cause no sunlight can get through this Kingdom with it's thick atmoshphere

Novae: A Kingdom of force, it'll be the only Normal type kingdom, do whatever you can to make it look like the Kingdoms that are normally seen in other games.

Mistda: A kingdom of thunder, it's the one with advanced technologies, the houses will be some city buildings modern.

CHARSETS:

Ifrit:
viewtopic.php?f=10&t=64293

Rawr:
He's the Firebomb ball you see in FF games, he can use the skill suicide to hit all party members, he's a ball of fire with small hands too.

I'll give more later on.. THANKYOU!!! ^^

 

[hellhound]

Here are more details as they come hiromomiji:

CHARSETS:

Gretel:

I found it off, google, the first time I saw it, I think it's nice to make a game with this girl.

Hansel:
Well, since Hansel and Gretel are twins, just make Hansel look like Gretel, only a boy, have him with short spikey hair (like Naruto's, and yes, the same color as Gretel's hair) and a blue t-shirt, and white shorts. after it, could you also make another version of him with Cat ears and Cat tail? Thanks! ^^

Shiva:
Well, it's ok for Shiva, I have a charset I see fit for her.

Kobo:
I need Kobo to be the Kobold Goblin in the XP RTP Charset, only remove the sword he was holding, cause it'd be weird if he's holding a sword.

Zenneth:
It's ok either, I have a charset for her.

Glass:
He's be a man who's pale white skin, wearing a long Light Blue Robe (like XP RTP King's robe) and a White hood with his face covered.

Well, for the facesets, the Infos above are more than enough details for how they look like...

I hope you can help! Thankyou very much! ^^


ANYWAYZ... to all who have viewed this, please atleast drop me a line, some C&C or suggestions of the plot are helpfull enough for me

 

[hellhound]

Updated thread with new Info and Characters.

Critiques and Comments are needed for the whole Concept, please feel free to suggest anything, it'd be very helpfull, thanks! ^^

 

[ultimaodin]

It is good to see you putting more detail into your project than previous however after reading the quotes by the characters this game just looked childish.
First off none were actually funny.
Secondly text quotes aren't humorous at all!
ditch the GTFO!
Honestly the plot doesn't have too much going for it either.

What I believe is if you can't do too much graphically at the time being you should try seeing what you can make of a game with RTP.
There is NOTHING wrong with the RTP.

As of now this game feels kind of thrown together and doesn't feel like a comedy game at all.

Please take this constructively.

 

[hiromomiji]

I thought it was pretty,good for a beginning ><;

oh and the chars are in the making ^^!

 

[hellhound]

ultimaodin- I see your point, thankyou very much! I'll remove the qoutes btw, and change some char info. I really appreciate it! ^^

hiromomiji- really?! yay! I'd be looking forward to it! ^^
btw, I changed Hansel and Rawr's Infos, so no need to sprite Rawr, but I'd still need Hansel, btw, and no need for the cat ear version. ^^ thanks! and also no need for the facesets I found some I see fit. ^^ I'm excited to start working on this with your maps in it. ^^ btw, is it ok with you if I put you on my team's list, since you make maps and all. ^^

EDIT:

Anyway, here are the current battlers I have done as of yet:

Gretel

Rawr

Shiva

Kobo

Ironic I didn't have Ifrit's done, I'm still waiting for hirominji's Ifrit charset sprite as of now. ^^

 

[hellhound]

Updated thread with new characters and some new character infos and story line infos.

C&C for the newly added infos are appreciated! ^^

 

[hiromomiji]

WOW,not to fast!!wait,I need to finish the class map,the medieval town and hansel,right?(goes checking)...don't expect me to be fast,coz I have a test and somehow teachers seem to like giving me loads of work lately so please patience ><!!!+ hansel,modern or more like old-fashioned or whatever?


ummm,about the charset,how the hell did you make those you have...move O.o??

and here are two of hansel (and gretel but I don't think their any good =__=;,You do use rmxp,right,coz I'm stressing now ^^;;

ow,and hansels hair is...the best thing I was able to find naruto-like *snif*,but this a more modern hansel,so the one underneath is another hansel I made,whom personally I thought was better+he wears traditionnal clothes here(+ I couldn't help adding those cute ears,there also other exampels from him...)...

+ Ifrit...that's just the name of your project,right?Not that of a character?

PS: are these any good =__=;?(...dratz I think I screwed up my character maker ><;

 

[hellhound]

wow, those are awesome! but, can you convert them into children? you know, kids... hehe, and can you also make Gretel's hair long? thanks so much!

 

[hiromomiji]

okay, I think I can do that...hopefully ><;

OMG!!Making kids out of them is so hard!!

here are classroom examples:

 

[hellhound]

OMG, Hiro, those classrooms Rox! can't wait to see your maps in my game, btw, I'd be looking forward to those charsets, especially Ifrit's , thanks!

 

[hiromomiji]

Ifritz,how is he supposed to look(clothes,hair etc..)??and here are they as kids:

are these any good?

 

[gRaViJa]

those classrooms aren't very well mapped. They are way to large and they are way to empty. Remember every tile is about one square metre.

This is how i used that tileset in my game:

About your game:
playing as a summon is a new idea. But i think you should work out the story a little more.

 

[Numb]

I agree with gRaViJa.
Those are most certainly not good classrooms.
His is better.
The maps are to large and there's empty space.
Also, why is there a piano in the library?!

 

[hellhound]

Hiro: Any good? their perfect! thanks a bunch!

and as for Ifrit, see here:
viewtopic.php?f=10&t=64293

Thanks!

gRaViJa: thanks for the feedback on the story, but can you tell me where on the story I should still need to fix? thanks!

 

[dadevvtsvre]

I'd like to see this topic have a little less maps if you guys don't mind. I'd rather keep this thread for comments and criticism on hellhound's game concepts rather than discussing what characters and maps look better. Those kind of conversations work best in either PM's or other threads and forums.

 

[hiromomiji]

well,actually I do like gravija's comment ><;,I'm not such a good mapper,and personally I was scared that the classrooms might be to big (the raison why their is a piano,is because it was in the classroom tileset and that I thought the classroom would look empty ><;thank you for the comments(next time let's pm like jhon said)

and about the comments Jhon...do you also mean,not to post maps in here or just the comments on eachothers work ><;;??

 

[gRaViJa]

It was only meant to make clear that his classroom was to big. I wanted to give an example on how to make his classroom and thus the mapping of his game better. It was meant as constructive criticism not to show off. But i'll pm example maps in the future. it might be a little confusing for other that are reading the topic.

@ Hellhound:
As i said earlier i'd like it if ifrit is the main char. Your story so far is well thought of but a little cliché as well. Ragnarok, elementals... They have been used before. There's no need to change al that but be sure to develop the story throughout the game.