Game's Title Screen - WIP

[Roxas]

So this is what I have so far for my games title screen. The game's premise center's around religion, so I figured to use the heavens as the background for it. Done in GIMP. It's not finished yet, as I have to put the game's title art behind the words. What do you think?

 

[LegacyCrono]

What do you think?

I think it looks bad. But that's just me.
You should try changing the background art, maybe it'll look better.
Also, change the font. The spacing between the "Vagrant Saga" and "Liberation" is way too big. The glow doesn't look right, too...

Uh... Any relations with Vagrant Story? :P
SEE YA!!!!

 

[Dalton]

I think it looks a bit too chaotic with all those stars...
Cut down on them a bit and let me see again.

 

[Xilef]

Too many stars, makes it look too busy so the eyes avoid the game's title!

 

[Jason]

Nah, the background doesn't look too bad, the font for the title just doesn't suit it though, I mean, maybe if you made the text bigger and bolder. Maybe it'd look better with a background logo to go behind the text too.

 

[Mooglelow]

you should change your title screen or make a new title screen and that title screen is bad....

 

[Damaris]

There's nothing wrong with the concept, but I think the fact that there isn't enough contrast between the text and the stars is your biggest problem. Also the image lacks depth, there's no indication that it is space - really its just a bunch of white dots. Is your story about space? or is it designed to indicate the vast-ness which is space? Whats its relevance to your game? You're font clashes a lot because its white on white dots, the glow makes alot more bright color surrounding the font which also reducing the impact of the text.

If you work on it, I would recommend making a visual focal point. A core to the image. Looking at this title I really have no idea where my eyes should be looking. The addition of a planet, or logo would help a lot. The actual font represents a classical era, where the background represents a futuristic era with the swirls of color. The color gives of a very "Clarity-fresh" feeling but there's still no visual focal point which really leaves me thinking - "K, so?"