Feedback on my Breeze Sprite? *UPDATED! NOW IN V2*

[Chalupa]

Well, the last time I posted a Breeze sprite, it was just...  terrible.  I have improved, making several sprites, and doing recolors, and I made a Breeze sprite that I think that it's actually half-decent... 

Tell me what you think!

Spoiler: Breeze-Sprite

http://img204.imageshack.us/img204/6248/breezemd8.png[/img]

Things I know already:
It's sideviews need some work.
It's back-view's shading looks a bit off.

Spoiler: Breeze-Sprite V2

http://img154.imageshack.us/img154/5562/breezefu6.png[/img]

Things I know:
The back view's hair is still crappy.

 

[Xaixis]

Here are some things I would fix.

(Front View)
Pros: I like the shading. Well done!

Cons:The hair that goes near the eyes becomes boxed off. Then that strand of hair that comes down in the middle makes it look weird.

(Side Views)
Pros: I like how you made the hair have bounce when walking.

Cons: The hair seems to flip a little to much, although I haven't put it into animation. Also the the two side-views have different shading. Keep it based off your first row. The sun is shining from the left. On the 2nd row it seems as if the sun has changed position due to the shading on his forehead instead of the back of his head.

Example:
O = Sun  ---> = Light    P = Character's Head (facing right)


O  --->
  --->      P

Remember the sun. It doesn't try to avoid the forehead hehe.

(Back View)
Pros: Hair Shading is decent
Cons: The hair seems too straight and big. Skim it down a bit and give it animation when walking. Also since his hair loops up, I would keep that in mind when drawing (I'm not to good with spriting so I can't give you an example)


Forgive me if I come off rude or mean. Please don't get me wrong, I love the fact that people are getting out there and at least trying. I am not trying to "diss" your sprite but rather help you mold it into perfection!

Also sorry I was too vague, but it's getting late out and I'm tired. Good Luck! I can't wait to see how this molds out!
 

 

[Chalupa]

Here are some things I would fix.

(Front View)
Pros: I like the shading. Well done!

Cons:The hair that goes near the eyes becomes boxed off. Then that strand of hair that comes down in the middle makes it look weird.

(Side Views)
Pros: I like how you made the hair have bounce when walking.

Cons: The hair seems to flip a little to much, although I haven't put it into animation. Also the the two side-views have different shading. Keep it based off your first row. The sun is shining from the left. On the 2nd row it seems as if the sun has changed position due to the shading on his forehead instead of the back of his head.

Example:
O = Sun  ---> = Light    P = Character's Head (facing right)


O  --->
  --->       P

Remember the sun. It doesn't try to avoid the forehead hehe.

(Back View)
Pros: Hair Shading is decent
Cons: The hair seems too straight and big. Skim it down a bit and give it animation when walking. Also since his hair loops up, I would keep that in mind when drawing (I'm not to good with spriting so I can't give you an example)


Forgive me if I come off rude or mean. Please don't get me wrong, I love the fact that people are getting out there and at least trying. I am not trying to "diss" your sprite but rather help you mold it into perfection!

Also sorry I was too vague, but it's getting late out and I'm tired. Good Luck! I can't wait to see how this molds out!
 

Thanks for the feedback!  I'll get right fixing him!  Thanks again!

 

[Chalupa]

Updated!

Forgive me if doing this is considered Early Bumping!

 

[Xaixis]

Looking better! Keep at it!

Also it's not early bumping. What they don't want is when you post, then post again for a bump. Although your allowed if you've updated something important since your last post :thumb:

 

[ultimaodin]

Is it just me or does your front view look like a female and the other vies look like a male? :huh:
Also they look like they have a flat head in the moving up view. :wink:

Otherwise not too bad. (I'm not actually a fan of the breeze sprite but that is me.)

 

[Chalupa]

Is it just me or does your front view look like a female and the other vies look like a male? :huh:
Also they look like they have a flat head in the moving up view. :wink:

Otherwise not too bad. (I'm not actually a fan of the breeze sprite but that is me.)

Well, it might come off looking Girl-Ish, because it is a guy with long hair.  The back view (or "The Moving Up View") is the hardest for me.