Fall Of Gaia(need Scripters,beta testers,spriter and artist.

[Mooglelow]

Hi,everybody.It's me,Mooglelow,and i am back with a new project called
Fall Of Gaia
Now With the story:

Story:
On The Year 1240,The Earth is falling because of the war of Gaia.Two nations are fighting because the Brun Nation wanted the Gaia stone for themselves so they started the war by initiating an attack to the Gaia nation's Capital, Garath
The Brun Nations troops lost to Garath but the Brun Nation did not give up instead they started attacking more minor Gaia Citys and towns. The Gaia nations can't resist to lose so many lives,so they attempted to protect the whole continent with troops....
You play as Innes, in his past and future to find out about his life.

About:
Gaia Stone:
The Gaia Stone is a legendary stone that keeps The Earth alive,if the enemy obtains the Gaia Stone, they can control The Earth and they can even conquer the world.
The Gaia Nation:
The Gaia Nation is the good side and the Gaia stone is in their hands,they have tried their best to protect the Gaia stone from falling into the wrong hands and the Gaia nation was led by Cedric.
The Brun Nation:
An evil Nation that is trying to take over the world by obtaining the Gaia Stone from the Gaia Nation.They have plotted a lot of evil plans to get the Gaia stone.They are led by an evil king called Syfier, who has a lot of insane plans to take over the world.


Characters:
Innes Lockheart:
A Gaia Knight who is being trapped in a prison.He hopes that he can escape,so that he can tell the Gaia Nation that the Brun Nation is coming up with a new trick,a trick so mad,it will be enough to trick the Gaia Nation again. He is also the main character whom you will always play as.

Ethan Faren
A male Spy who works for the Gaia Nation as a Spy and he is always sent out to spy at the enemy because of his quick movements and his high endurance.However,he has a lot of secrets that even the Gaia Nation does'nt know.His family
is poor in money and ever since he was young, he was very rude to anyone he meets.

Cyrus Standford
He is the Prince of the Brun Nation but has never told anyone about it.He escaped from the Brun Capital at the age of 10 and was never seen by anyone until the Gaia Nation found him fainted in the Wood Lands.Only Innes and Ethan know that he is actually the Prince Of The Brun Nation.

Sentinel Knight
A God who is in the earth to bring peace to the world.With Innes,Ethan and Cyrus ,together they are "so-called" unbeatable.His Power Is off the limit compared to the Characters.

Screenies:
Battling

Brun Prison

Locknid Plains


Downloads::
Currently None For Now.

Features::
AMS
Modern Shop
Active Time Battle(ATB)
and a lot more!!

Credits:
Dubelax(AMS)
Studio Pickles(For Resources)
Spartan Productions(In Another Site RRR)
Ambrosepro
vpcdmd
Trickster

Official Forum:
http://rpgmakerworld.1.forumer.com
Spartans Production Forum
http://spartansproductions.ipbfree.com/

Team:
Mooglelow(Leader)
Mooglelow(Mapper)
Mooglelow(Writer)
Recruiting(Scripter)
Recruiting(Beta Tester)
Recruting(Spriter)
Recruiting (Artist)

Recruiting:
Scripter
Beta Testers
Artist
Spriter

 

[bacon]

Well...

You story is really sounding manilla at the moment. This is nothing I havent seen before. Whe you create a story, make it unique and different.

Mapping = OHZ NOZ. The mapping is atrocious. One they are way too big, especially that jail cell. That plain screenshot is horrible. I suggest reading some tutorials and going to the mapping improvenment thread. You need it.

Also dont use the custom battle system. Try something new and inventive. The frum has a lot of scripts to solve this issue.

Overal this project needs some serious work. Good luck! :D

 

[Luthur]

Ok.
You, like so many beginners, really need to work on your mapping. Check out the tutorial section, and search for Tindy's tutorial, as it's one of the best. Then improve your maps. Also consider posting in the Mapping Improvement Thread to get some critic.
Your storyline is very basic and cliche. Why are they fighting? What's the 'gaia stone'? Why do they want it?
Finally, those battlers aren't unique. I know you've credited the author, but you've made it sound like you have custom art in the game. Just thought I'd mention that.

EDIT: Damn, becoolioman beat me to it. Oh well, my comments still stand.

 

[R.J.]

...And change the damn windowskin. Even in good projects sometimes they use the default windowskin, and it's really annoying. Not only does it look bad, it also quickly becomes more from the same, and it makes your project even less distinquishable from other projects. As if the RTP doesn't do that enough already.

Aside from that, yes, heed the advice of becoolioman and fox5. The default battle system is fine though, it never bothered me, but try to tweak it a little. Make it a little more unique then others.

For your story, flesh it out more, and please try to use punctuation. This makes it very hard to read and I wouldn't be surprised if most people would leave your topic after reading the first two lines.

Good luck.

 

[Crystalgate]

So the main character wants to warn his home nation that the enemies are coming up with a new trick? Isn't coming up with new tricks a pretty common procedure in war? It does seem the Brun nation are learning from their mistakes though. Their first move was to attack the capital, which is likely walled making it a very poor choice of a target. Now they have an actual plan.

Anyway, the story looks rather black and white now with Gaia nation being good and Brun evil. The name Gaia also implies they are the ones to root for. It shouldn't take much to make it more greyich if you want to.

 

[Mooglelow]

i will try to re-write my story

 

[Mooglelow]

@fox 5
sorry i did not claim that it is my own anyway thanks for the advice i will try to edit.

 

[RATED-RKOFRANKLIN]

The story needs more information. What is so great about the stone? Why is the world failing? Your characters also need more information.

 

[Avgen]

The mapping really (i mean REALLY) needs to be worked on.
I also agree to rated-rkofranklin's comment ^^

 

[Mooglelow]

@Avgen
I agree and i have no complain ask my brother to help me map instead his mapping is way better then mines.
@ RATED-RKOFRANKLIN
i will try to provide more information thanks for reminding anyway..