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Story:In a world where Elves and human co-exists together A war is on the verge of ocurring between the two races. The king decided to kill all the elves in the main capital to prevent an uprising. A young knight decides to take matter in his hand and try to reason the king. As he failed he decides to take the princess with him to make her see the bloodshed that his father will cause. The only question in his mind: How many will it matter to make the king realise his killing innocent people.

So he decide to journey with the princess to resolve this matter at the Elf counsil. But they say that its not thier matter and arent responsible for the elf people in the human villages and capitals

Battle Mechanic:
Extend Tech - Enable Alvein to extend his sword blade by either 1 or 2 meters but cause a decrese in defense and speed but raise the attack

Characters:
Alvein Bourgh
Age: 22
Affliction : Neutral, Knight of Escadia

Rose ???
Age: 21
Affliction : Undecided, Kingdom of Escadia

???
Age : 23
Affliction: Elf, Sentinel of Duaniel


LAST UPDATED : 06-08-19

 

[Sol_Fury]

Not a bad premise, but needs work. You could play the king in a much worse light, if you so desire. There was a plot against him, and an elf was involved. The king's adviser, who has a deep hatred of all lesser races which he includes Elves in, drives the king to purge all Elves from his kingdom.
You can see where I'm coming from with this, right? It's happened throughout history, a leader is attacked by a certain ethnic group and he tries to purge them.

Variations, you could have the king have a mad hatred of elves and the adviser is actually trying to stop him before he goes too far (he's an ally of the hero in other words). I'd also suggest developing things on the Elf side.

Anyhow, it's not a bad principle. I'd love to see how it plays out.

 

[pixel?trump]

Hey there.
Like Sol_Fury has pointed out the idea, although nothing really new can become a good story. Like so many people forget it's not the overall idea that can become bad and cliche. It's the way it's told. Take a story as common as a man with no memory attempting to save the world as an example. Just because we've all heard this before would not stop a great storyteller from making it interesting and really good to play. So. Take your idea and run with it. I'm interested in seeing how this turns out in 2-3 months time.

 

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It's not "Affliction", it's "Alignment". Unless you're planning on giving them different diseases...

 

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Added more of the story and battle tech of Alvein, also im searching for a mapper

 

[Sol_Fury]

It's sounding good. The Extend Tech sounds like a good tradeoff that might be useful tactically. Things like that are always interesting to see.
As for the story, it's still early days but it sounds like it definately will have some sort of neat political angle on it. Racism on the part of the king, a "them and us" attitude to the Elves... could be very interesting to see the situations that leads to.