Celestial Odyssey

[Hayabusa123]

Celestial Odyssey
Maker: RMXP
Creator: Hayabusa123
Special Thanks To:
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Story:

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    Long ago, the world was at peace and mankind lived without fear...

That was until Satan 'The Prince Of Darkness' and emperor of the underworld rose from the depths of hades.

With an unquenchable hatred for humanity he unleashed a devastating attack upon mankind with his demonic powers and the Earth was plunged in a state of chaos and darkness...

Four brave monks combined their powers and tried to vanquish the evil from the Devil.

They sought to end his reign of terror but instead created a far worse evil.... this evil was Evirus.

The monks sealed Evirus in the Dark Realm forever....at least.....

They thought they did...
(Suggestions?)

Characters:

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Name: Kageyoshi
Age: 23
Bio: Kageyoshi is a young warrior, although he doesn't like fighting, he wants to avenge his father's death in a war. When this war of mankind begins, he and some of his friends will go to the one man they know will stop it.
Class: Fighter
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Name: Zasushia
Age: 26
Bio: He is a Lancer of King Detros and is the guard of Princess Ofilia, After his father's death, he travels with Kageyoshi and Zakura to end this war.
Class: Lancer
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Name: Zakura
Age: 23
Bio: She is Kageyoshi's best friend since they were little. Back then, she always took Kendo practice and is now a great swords women. When the war begins, she goes with Kageyoshi on the journey for the one man that can stop it.
Class: Fighter
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Name: Senshia
Age:???
Bio: Senshia is a young wood elf, she was found in the woods by Kageyoshi and friends. When they healed her, Senshia agreed that she'll help them on their journey. She is excellent with a bow.
Class: Hunter
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Name: Sovuru
Age: ???
Bio: Sovuru is used a student of a great sorcerer, and his father was the greatest of all warriors, so when Sovuru grew older, and practiced these 2 classes, he became what is known as a Paladin. He likes challenges, so when he meets up with Kageyoshi, he challenges them to a duel.
Class: Paladin
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Name: Demon
Age: ???
Bio: They reside in the dark realm known as hell. These are the monsters that fight in the war.
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Name: Evirus
Age: ???
Bio: He is the darkness of satan himself, it is believed that he has no pure energy or a shade of light at all. He was awakened when the humans fought the war against the Demons, that's when he unleashed his powers and plagued the world.

Screenshots:

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^title screen I created^
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^Menu^
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^Battle^

Credits:
Scripts:
1.Enterbrain
2.RPG
3.Blizzard
4.Minkoff
5.Moghunter

Graphics:
1.green raven
2.RPG Revolution- Animated Battlers
3.DollMage
4.lucksta

Audio:
1.Midishrine

 

[Magicant]

Among the myriad of typos and cliché story, I think the icing on the cake came when I saw Arshes head slapped onto the Alestian battlers. Being completely blunt, the project just doesn’t interest me. The battlers look mediocre at best, they don’t match at all, the story is lacking in a lot of different ways. Mostly originality, I understand it is hard to be completely original these days, but you used the magic number when it came to sealing the demon away. FOUR (insert class/characters here)

I suppose if you have the magic ability to make a boring/lackluster story amazing, I’ll check it out. But please, before you continue to post, remove typos. Nothing is more awesome then seeing incorrect use of “your/you’reâ€

 

[moog]

Why did you list midishrine twice?

 

[Hayabusa123]

Ok, thank you Magicant, and I'll post some screens of my mapping, although it's terrible

 

[dadevvtsvre]

Just a suggestion, when using scripts like Mog's Menu script, I would suggest changing the graphics around a bit. To me, seeing the same ones he provided just shows laziness. I think it would look a ton better if you customized it for yourself.
That being said, as previously mentioned, your story is very cliche. I suggest reworking it so that it's not about an evil creature sealed into the Dark Realm coming out again...
So...yeah. good luck