Avion from my game, ksvb style

[NexS]

ok, the gif shos the hair is good.. but the rest is not

here's my offering:
you've used outlines that are far darker to those that the template uses, so either lower the saturation of the outlines or darken the ones on the skin.

another thing is the animation of the clothing. you need to make the folds change as if the wind was really blowing it around, also have a look at the rest of the clothing.. do you not think that pants and shirts should move as well??

one last note on the shading, you haven't really put alot of work into the blue cloth parts orthe shoes.. play around with it till it looks spot on
keep up the good work

 

[vvolfster]

i like it man. keep it up :D

 

[monkeydlu]

Thanks NexS, I appreciate the tip on the outline, I'll see what to do about that.

The clothing right now sucks, especially the right side, I probably never would've noticed this cuz I hadn't yet until you noticed it, thanks.

I might go and add movement to the shirt sleeves, but the pants will be hard to do so, the blues are very dark and practically impossible to shade.

and I'm glad you like it, vvolf

 

[Alistor]

nice transition to a Considerably smaller, but still elegant Halfkaizer Model. Kudos, Monkeydlu.


':| wow... People still use this old template? ...i haven't worked on them in so long... [/FONT]

 

[NexS]

if they're too dark to shade then make one dark shade and put in highlights... don't just give up on something

 

[monkeydlu]

haha, thanks Alister, this was the first animated battler I'm trying my hands at, and this was really the only one I could find, the white ties one wasn't finished, and so I didn't really know what to do >_>

I'll keep trying, I'll post how it comes out, but unfortunatly...this week is exam week :P

edit-

http://img210.imageshack.us/img210/1738/avionoj2.gif[/IMG]

How's this look?

 

[NexS]

i can still see dark outlines... but it's a little better.

as for the cape
here try this...
draw the parson on a piece of paper and the four frames you are using.. now imagine how the cloth would fold and wave in the breeze
try this site, it may help

 

[monkeydlu]

alright, thanks, I'll trying that out ^__^

I love manga btw, big anime fan, lol, but I'm not relaly that good yet >_>

http://monkeydlu.deviantart.com/

 

[NexS]

off topic : the pics you drew aren't too bad, but you'll get there as long as you keep trying and pracicing

 

[monkeydlu]

thanks, as for the sprite, I think I've figured out what was wrong, so I'll fix it up.

I'm getting less time on my hands, so I don't think I can afford to keep using time on this one animation as there are still like 9 more to deal with, lol.

 

[NexS]

but if you get this one up to scratch then you know what to do for the others... that way you wont have a whole bunch of dodgy ones