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Agalera (Working Title)

Cait

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Agalera
This is only a working title at the moment, and not really sold on it. So it might change in the near future. This is an idea that has been running around my head for some time, and I am finally ready to make it. I just want to say that I don't mind people being honest with me, just remember to be polite and constructive. A wise person said: You can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar. I, also, don't need ego stroking (Not that ever happens :blank: , but it's something I don't want started.)

Concept
The original concept for Agalera is the world of dreams or as it is really known as the realm of the Gods. Each night, we cross the river (symbolic) between the mortal realm and the the realm of the Gods. This land is known by many names, but it is a land of wonder, with magic and the Gods. In this world, there are several types of people: The dead (Ancestors, who have decided not to be reborn), children (Who are learning and growing to be the people they want to be when they're adults) and phantoms. Phantoms are people who no longer believe in this realm, and have lost all hope in dreams (Not always, but most of the time). They are chaotic, because they are people who are dreaming without restraint. This is the concept for Agalera. A land where anything can happen. The saying: As above, so below must certainly fits.

Important terms:
Phantom: Are often hard to see, because they take many forms and shapes, and can be deadly or peaceful. In reality, they are merely people who are asleep, who aren't aware of their surroundings in this world. They awake, forgetting a lot of the realm.
Hero: Heroes are sons of Gods, change the world through their actions... Also, called Avatars. They are born into the mortal realm, and are born with the fate of the mortal realm.. Meaning, they, too, die.
elves: In my game, Elves are human beings who have obtained higher awareness, not beings with pointy ears like fantasy books. I am thinking of using the Norway spelling of Alf instead. However, with A.L.F. also being a show about a short alien that ate cats, not entirely sure.
Phantom dragons: These creatures appear as dragons, but they are in fact dead humans, who were greedy in life. Thus reborn as dragons, but they in fact rejected by another species of dragons. The phantom dragons are nearly all black, and now, like shadows than flesh and blood. They hoard gold like all the traditional dragons are suppose to do, but in reality, real dragons don't hoard gold, only phantom dragons do.
Dragons: These wise and noble creatures and know as forces of change. They are very different than phantom dragons, and that they are creatures who can pass back and forth between this world and the next, (Mortal) realm. They have a Goddess, who is in fact known as the mother of the their kind, and they give her tribute to her in the temple. Although, some times, it can be gold, but many times, it is something else, like food or service to her temple.
Fae: The fae are believed to be spirits with wings, but in fact they are souls of unborn children who are new souls waiting the appropriate time for their birth. It is believed that only when the new soul is strong enough will the Goddess allow them to be born, and she is very protective of what she calls her children.

Protagonist Characters
* Name: Duke Vye Cruiza
*Quote: "The only God I know of is my sword..."
* Age: 21
* Appearance: As a youth, he had blond hair like his younger brother, but one morning, it turned white for no apparent reason.
* Weapon(s): Swords
* Talents/Hobbies: Fencing, chess, horse back riding and hunting
* Occupation: Runs his family business (Wine)
* Hometown: Galisbery
* Social Class: Noble
* History/backstory: When Vye was a child, hundreds of children, if not thousands from all over the world were found in their bed dead for odd reasons. Each child had the same mark on them, but the adults believed it to be a disease. Spiritual leaders from all over the world said it was a crisis in the spiritual realm, but no one believed them. They claimed that a wizard was killing children, and they had tried to stop him; only to be defeated. Parents would go to strange lengths to save their children, none of which actually worked. Then, one day, it suddenly ended as quickly as it began. That was on the morning that Vye's hair turned from blond to silver or white, and no doctor could tell the Duke why. As it was, Vye had lost five years of his life, and had to be helped.. it was only his memories he lost, none of his abilities or anything he learned... just memories.

As it happens with all young children, he turned into a young man. He turned away from the Gods, believing there to be nothing.. he became atheist, and when his parents passed away, he became distant. He took the title and it futher alienated him from his brother, Willheim. In the mortal realm, or our world... There is certainly a religion that is very different from the old ways, or paganism, and teaches that these religions were the work of demons. This is the only religion that people from his world know, and it is also, the one that Vye rejects in total, as man made. He thinks that all religions are man made, the other ones that have survived into the modern age.
* Current story (as of where the story would begin) Vye awakens in the middle of a field, with little memory of how he had gotten there. He only wants a single thing: To go home again. A fae tells him that he saved the world once, but it was merely a game.. The world needed him to save it again, but he had to seek out a Devon Vipond. (To be honest, he doesn't quite believe any of it.)

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* Name: Alania Fredericks
* Age: 22 years old
* Appearance: Short red hair, simple dress for her job in a bar
* Weapon(s): magic and her physical weapon is her fists, mostly.
* Talents/Hobbies: Tossing out drunks, despite her small size and serving drinks faster than you can blink (Kidding)
* Occupation: Bartender
* Hometown: Agaenia
* Social Class: Middle Class
* History/backstory: Alania was a rather boring young girl, who only wished to work in a bar, either as a dancer, or as a bartender. She originally meet Karisa at school, and they became good friends. It was because of Karisa's teachings that Alania was able to continue to be aware of the land of dreams, as she called it. She lost a young brother to the plague of death that resulted in hundreds or thousands dying mysteriously. They cemented their friendship, when Karisa admitted that she was one of four legendary warriors who put a stop to the wizard. She learned that her friend was looking for someone, and out of obligation, she decided that she would help.
* Current story (as of where the story would begin): An odd couple of friends, a temple maiden and a girl who worked in a bar... they are still searching, for her friend, but it is a search that is placed on hold when the wizard returned...


Quote: "I have to find him... I have to meet him again."
* Name: Karisa Lee Cook
* Age: 21 years old
* Appearance: A young girl with red hair, and a simple village girl at best.
* Weapon(s): rods, and staffs
* Talents/Hobbies: Healing magic, mantras and chants.
* Occupation: Temple maiden in training
* Hometown: Agaenia
* Social Class: Peasant
* History/backstory (childhood, adolescence, etc): Karisa as a young child was always teased about her red hair, that she was the last angry little girl. Or that she had a temper, because of her red hair. In her dreams, she had blond hair (because a girl in her school has that color and was always seen as happy.) She didn't know that blonds had their own problems to deal with. Her parents were never worried about their daughter, and left her fate up to the gods. Their daughter decided after the deaths, to enter the temple service but would never tell her parents why. She had fallen in love and at that moment, decided to search all the other realm to find him... even if that meant looking for his phantom... she never could find it.
* Current story: The deaths have begun again, and with talk about a disease starting again.. she knows that she like last time, can not sit on the sidelines. However, she is well-versed temple lore and spiritual teachings. that give her an advantage that she didn't have the first time.



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* Name: Illianna Alfsung
* Age: Deceased spirit
* Appearance: Green hair in a simple hair style.
* Weapon(s): Swords, or anything that she chosese to use.
* Talents/Hobbies: Blacksmithing, and fighting.
* Occupation: Used to be a warrior in life, blacksmith, but mostly, she's a blacksmith only these days
* Hometown: The mountain
* Social Class: None
* History/backstory (childhood, adolescence, etc): She was a young woman, who was trained in the art of ninjutsu, and was a ninja. She learned to forge swords from her uncle, because a good weapon, as well, as a warrior was worth their weight in gold. She went on many missions, and was happy doing what she loved. The ninja were betrayed and her entire village was destroyed. She has lived in the afterlife ever seen, but many people suggest that she could be reborn; however, she doesn't want to go to a world that is foreign to her way of thinking. During the time of the wizard, he went to see her, but she turned him down... thankfully, he couldn't kill a soul and he knew it, only the living children were the biggest targets.
* Current story (as of where the story would begin): She has begun to suspect that the wizard has returned, but with greater power. She knows that this time, she wouldn't be safe, as the wizard has gained the ability to destroy even the souls of the dead now.

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* Name: Adam Crysil
* Age: 56 years old
* Appearance: Appears as he did when he was a young man
* Weapon(s): Swords
* Talents/Hobbies: A fine fighter, and is good with stealth.
* Occupation: Serves the king
* Hometown (one of the ones listed above or a desert outpost): Orfielia
* Social Class (noble, middle, peasant, exile): believed to be noble
* History/backstory (childhood, adolescence, etc): Unknown, mysterious
* Current story (as of where the story would begin)

Important People
Quote: "I want to be a hero... I want people to notice me."
* Name: Adonis Dracon
* Age: Appearance (20) Real Age: 7 years old
* Appearance: He appearance was a warrior, noble, blond hair and always clean.
* Weapon(s): Swords
* Talents/Hobbies: none
* Occupation: None
*The Past: Adonis believed in action, having fun and always tried to do the right thing. When the wizard began to kill people, he didn't hesitate to decide to stop him. It was what the hero always did. Adonis fought the wizard but instead of killing him.. made him a shadow instead. He did this, because he was a child, and he couldn't kill anyone. Unlike the wizard who was a child as well.


Quote: "You're so smart..."
* Name: Anya Saint James
* Age: Appearance 16, real age: 7 years old
* Appearance: Blond hair, a typical girl in dress..
* Weapon(s): Rods (Her favorite character used a rod, she wasn't very original.)
* Talents/Hobbies: Flower arranging
* Occupation: None
* History/backstory (childhood, adolescence, etc) Anya meet Adonis by chance when they first arrived in the realm of the Gods. At this time, it is believed that they believed as other children did and it was merely a dream. After they began to travel, they became good friends and she was excited that it would mean they'd spend more time together. Adonis vanished, becoming a phantom. She swore that she'd find him again, and learned that she had fallen in love with him... only after he was gone. This girl would grow up to be Karisa

Quote: "Don't bother me, I'm stealing..."
* Name: Devon Vipond
* Age: Unknown
* Appearance: Has the appearance of a thief
* Weapon(s): most weapons, but in a good battle, likes daggers.
* Talents/Hobbies: None, he won't share any knowledge about himself.
* Occupation: Thief
* History/backstory (childhood, adolescence, etc): Unknown


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* Name: Hiro Franklyn
* Age: 16 years old (Appearance and real age)
* Appearance: Blue hair, brown eyes
* Weapon(s): claws
* Talents/Hobbies: Martial arts, video games and manga/anime
* Occupation: He wanted to draw manga or anime.
* History/backstory: Hiro is a youth from Japan, who wanted to be a manga artist when he finished high school, and began to travel around with the group in order to expand his knowledge about other kind of people and events... He was a rather good fighter, because he said his father insisted that he learn martial arts. Not much is known otherwise.
Antagonist

Quote: "Defeated once, but not again!"
* Name: Sir Willheim Cruzia
* Age: 21 years old
* Appearance: Blond hair and blue eyes; wears armor
* Weapon(s): Swords
* Talents/Hobbies: Fighting, fencing, chess, and the dark arts.
* Occupation: AWOL Knight
* Hometown: Galisbery, but lived in the capital, Devonsil
* Social Class: Noble
* History/backstory: Not much is known about his childhood, but what is known that after the deaths of children stopped..He told his father that he wanted to be a knight and was sent to be trained by a family friend. A knight by the name of Sir Allensberg, and the young man, was knighted at the age of 20 years old. After finishing his training, and he has served the palace for almost a year... He has kept to himself mostly, and hasn't gotten along with his elder brother, who is also his twin brother.
* Current story (as of where the story would begin): After being defeated by the Adonis, he learned the person who defeated him was his brother, but when his elder brother had forgotten everything. He vowed to return to Agalera and finish what he had originally started. How he returned no one knows, but he did return and with magic even stronger... he has much more knowledge than he did as a child, and more imagination. Even the Gods are helpless to fight him.

Quote: "My master is the only one I serve with my heart...."
* Name: Tila Greychild
* Age: Not known
* Appearance: No one knows, she keeps changing her appearance to hid herself
* Weapon(s): Anything
* Talents/Hobbies: Doesn't say
* Occupation: Unemployed
* Hometown: Unknown
* Social Class: Peasant
* History/backstory (childhood, adolescence, etc) One of six other people to serve the wizard, but the only one who still can go there. The rest are phantoms, but no one knows why these children joined the side of the wizard. Soime said that it was likely because they left powerless in their own world and was attracted to someone who was willing to take action, instead of talking.
* Current story (as of where the story would begin): She has served her master's interest by finding a way for him to return to the world of the gods, not in a dream, but physical. She is his biggest supporter, now that the rest are gone, but only she knows what he is actually looking for.
Now without further ado my characters (only two right now):

Story
The story begins with the end, the battle between the four warriors and the wizard, and the return of a driven man. He has always felt powerless in his life... no one has ever known, because he keeps himself isolated. Another young man, his brother is told that he saved the world once and he has to do it again, no longer the idealistic young child, he used to be. Brother against brother, with one trying to kill one, and the other, deciding he had to do whatever it takes to stop him. Yet, torn if that means he will kill his brother or ultimately save him?

Plot Analysis
In the characters, each of them had reasons for their dreams, and what they wanted to be seen as. It would help them become the people that they were meant to be, but young Vye forgot everything about the past. His childhood has no influence on what he would become later in life, and the inner conflict is not only with his brother but his confusion about what he knows is the truth, or what is a lie, as nothing makes sense anymore.
Setting Concept
Mortal realm: This is the world of the living, it doesn't matter which world, it is the same.
Agalera (Or the field): The world in which most people go to this world is much like our world, except it is filled with souls. Souls can either be reborn, or stay here, it depends on what they want.
Hell: A place of self punishment, many souls come here, because they think they should be punished and sometimes on a rare occasion, the gods have been known to send people.
The Gods imperial palace: The place where the gods gather, souls who have obtained a higher wisdom that many, it is extremely hard to be able to become a god. They allow a king to rule over the Agalera, but they take care of more than just the spiritual realm, but occasionally, they are born as avatars to keep the mortal world in check.. to make sure that they don't fall off the path. Normally, they are known to allow free will, but will only interfere when free will is threatened.

To Do List

Continue Story Development
Develop minor characters, such as the Gods and the important people in the town, such as the king.
 

Cait

Member

UPDATE:
I've edited the main character a bit, added more important terms, and I've begun to really think about the name. I'm deciding between Agalera (Something I created) and Gottreich (German for Gods realm). I don't know if its correct, as I translated it to German with babel fish, not entirely correct many times. So if anyone has an opinion, let me know.
 
My mother language is dutch but i know some german as well. (besides english, spanish and french, damn i know a lot of languages xD)... Anyway. I'm 95% sure it is 'Gottes Reich' ;)

You're story could be good but be sure to work it out more. If you gonna give it little attention it might become unoriginal and dull, but you did made a good start.
 
gRaViJa":3fsu03xe said:
My mother language is dutch but i know some german as well. (besides english, spanish and french, damn i know a lot of languages xD)... Anyway. I'm 95% sure it is 'Gottes Reich' ;)

You're story could be good but be sure to work it out more. If you gonna give it little attention it might become unoriginal and dull, but you did made a good start.

Mother language german, here, so make this a 100%. :wink:
 

Cait

Member

:haha: No, I have a story, but my biggest problem is sometimes, with explaining it so it doesn't sound so ... well, cliche. I am going to post it, and I've written it down. Edited it. Sometimes, I've explored so many kind of stories that well, many things are cliche to me. Here it is.
Story:
Over a decade ago, A wizard grew in strength, and power, and began to take a hold of the realm piece by piece. The deceased souls did nothing, as it was job of the Gods to protect the realm. No one knew how the hero, Adonis had gotten involved or his real name, but they knew he was a mere child playing a game of being a hero. He was defeated, but that was almost a decade ago, no one has seen the hero, but the girl, who fought along side him... is still searching.

A driven young child, Willheim, has always felt powerless and helpless in his life, and now, he has grown up into a driven, ambitious young man, with even darker intentions than he had as a child. He has entered the realm of the Gods with very powerful intentions of becoming God, himself. The Gods are helpless, because they, too, are subjected to fate. With new spells, he can destroy even a God, but in a fluck of history, his elder brother with the same blood running through his veins has access to those same powers.

He, alone, can stop his brother, but he is no longer the idealist youth that he used to be. As brother fights against his brother. Willheim with hatred for his brother, Vye, is trying to kill him, and Vye, who is wants nothing more than to save him. He is torn, if that means he will ultimately kill his brother or some how pull of the impossible and get the young man to stop his intentions.

The only bad thing about being in the Gods realm, with his physical body is that this time if he dies, he won't just wake up in bed, but die just like he would in real life. Can he solve what caused a child to become that twisted and power hungry, instead of playing like all those over children? Does it matter what is the reason or why?

I know that I will likely change this, and that I want twists and turns. I am, also, going to have different ways of defeating the boss of certain dungeons. In the first area, the main character is leaving the forest and heading to the town. He must pass through a cave, and has to fight a slime. You can defeat this slime, one of two ways. 1. Roll a giant rock or 2. fight it and defeat it. If you fight it, you might gain a rare sword or something else. I want to give a player some options, and trust me, I've played those kind of games... a character would piss me off and unable to kill that irritation. So that's my intention behind what I want with choice, and you'd have to pay for doing it, something might not happen or something else.

The end goal would be to fight the wizard, or the main character's brother, and you decide his ultimate fate. As the main character begins to regain those memories of the past, and grows from them; to become a very different person.. one who isn't an idealistic young man, but want will he become in the end of his journey depends on the quest and side quest and the memories that he unlocks from those past.

Spoiler: The one disadvantage that his younger brother has over him is that some how he figured out who Adonis was. And Vye, doesn't remember anything, and he for years, didn't care.If you see something in the story that has been done to death.. let me know and I'll see what I can do to change it. I've explored so many different angles that everything is cliche to me now.
 

Cait

Member

I was actually attempting to change the subject line when it posted my first post as a quote... :huh: I did not mean to do this... since it is only ever three days you can bump something without a something major to post. Sorry, Mods, I didn't do that on purpose.. :eek:uch:
 

Cait

Member

UPDATE: August 30th, 2009
With the name changed to GOTTES REICH, I've begun on my titlescreen, but if anyone wants to see it... here's the link. viewtopic.php?f=92&t=67170 I've been having some trouble, to get the affect that I want. Maybe someone out there knows how I could get it. I would post them here, but as I am aware... that's is clearly against the rules, but nothing wrong with posting a inner site link.
 

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