A Legend's Adventure [VX]

[W H I P Cat]

A Legend's Adventure
Created by W H I P Cat

FEATURES
Pet Summoning (and calling back)
Cheat Codes (one will be revealed.)
Multiplayer Online Play (working on it. Not available in demo.)
Herblore (May be available in demo. Very little finished.)
Mining (Might be available in demo. Very little finished.)
and more...

STORYLINE
A young mage named Matt has ran away from home. He has nothing to remember his family by except 500 gold pieces and an old staff that his grandfather gave to him before he died. He has wondered over 1,000 miles and has ended up in an old town called Castlestone. Now he has grown up a bit and want to be like his grandfather. He wants to slay dragons and demons and go on an adventure.

MATT
Age: 15
A Runaway
A Male

PETS
Sacred Beast
Berserker
Inferno
Cat
more coming soon...

CHEAT CODE

Spoiler

1992 - Brings up a Rare Shop on-screen

TEAM
I am working alone at the moment. :down:
Scripters: Recruiting up to 2
Brainstormers: Recruiting up to 5
Spriters: Recruiting up to 3
Beta-Testers: Recruiting up to 2
If you want other positions post and I will see what I can do...

 

[Luminier]

Hi, this thread really doesn't have enough information! You need to go more in-depth with things like your characters, and you also need at least three screenshots! It's really unacceptable that you posted with a little "more to come" note at the end of your post. I mean it's not like you couldn't have waited to post this or something. :\
Anyway, please edit in the appropriate information when you have the chance! Preferably within the next 24 hours. Thanks.

Also Dissonance that's spamming please don't do that!

The SPAM cleaner was here!

 

[ellenor]

Well about the storyline.. it is a little to short to really say anything but what is this about that he want to be like his grandfather?
If he remember nothing about his family how come he knew his grandfather slayed demons and monsters?
And why would he want to do the same?
any special reason?

Well good luck with your project ^^

 

[W H I P Cat]

Soz. Photobucket wouldn't work for me yesterday. I have the screenshots posted. BTW there is only 1 hero.

@ellenor: I mean objects he has to remember him by.

 

[Luminier]

There's still tons more you should be telling us. I don't care if you only have one character(which i highly doubt; even if there's only one playable character, there's got to be at least one other important person in the story), you should at least elaborate on that one character. Right now all I know about him is that he is named Matt, is a runaway(i can smell the self-insertion already) and has generic RPG pretty-boy hair. Tell us about his personality, his background, his motivations, anything!

Your story is a bare-bones and pretty much screams that you haven't thought this idea through very much. Why would he run away from home(which also begs the question: how old is he? the faceset you've chosen for him doesn't imply he's any younger than 20-something)? and why doesn't he have anything to remember his family by except money(which btw is a shitty way to remember your family since you'll have to spend it sometime)? also why does he want to slay demons and go on an adventure? seems like a half-baked idea you thought about for a little over ten minutes and then opened up RPG Maker and started mapping(though im sure it was the other way around, it always is). I think you'd benefit greatly from having a thread in Concept Development, where people can give you in-depth critique on your story and such.

As for the features...
Pet summoning? How does this work? And what is calling back?
Cheat codes? lame. also not a feature
Multiplayer online play? i highly doubt you could get this implemented. but on the off-chance that you can, you should elaborate on how it would work.
what is herblore?
how does mining work?
and more is dumb. if you have more features you should say so. keeping things such as that a secret is not a good way to get people interested in playing your game.

 

[Xephyr]

This is about as bad as it gets.

Your screens are horrible, and they're only MENUS.

Is there no hope for humanity?

 

[Luminier]

Hi Xephyr, that post was really uncalled for. Saying "this is terrible, you reflect poorly on the entirety of the world" is not constructive criticism. Unless you have legitimate suggestions on how he should improve, or unless you can point out specific things which are bad, and explain why, please refrain from posting. Thanks.

 

[trebor777]

joining luminier comment...
how come he managed to travel 1000 miles on his own, at the age of 13/14 ( i assume he turns 15 at the end of his journey. ) ?

 

[Luminier]

oh i didn't even notice that you listed his age. that's horrible. not only are super-young heroes an irritatingly non-sensical cliche, but the fact that this guy is that age only cements my suspicion that he is a self-insertion character

gj :|

 

[Xephyr]

Hi Xephyr, that post was really uncalled for. Saying "this is terrible, you reflect poorly on the entirety of the world" is not constructive criticism. Unless you have legitimate suggestions on how he should improve, or unless you can point out specific things which are bad, and explain why, please refrain from posting. Thanks.

Hi Luminier, I realize my post was uncalled for. I apologize whole-heartedly and swear on my life that it shall never happen again.

Pet Summoning (and calling back)
Cheat Codes (one will be revealed.)
Multiplayer Online Play (working on it. Not available in demo.)
Herblore (May be available in demo. Very little finished.)
Mining (Might be available in demo. Very little finished.)
and more...

Pet Summoning: um......okay....
Cheat Codes: nobody likes cheat codes they ruin games
Multiplayer Online Play: please don't do this.
Herblore: lolwut? dealing with plants? explain what this is.
Mining: done before but can be fun if done right.

A young mage named Matt has ran away from home. He has nothing to remember his family by except 500 gold pieces and an old staff that his grandfather gave to him before he died. He has wondered over 1,000 miles and has ended up in an old town called Castlestone. Now he has grown up a bit and want to be like his grandfather. He wants to slay dragons and demons and go on an adventure.

1. ran away from home? why?
2. 500 gold pieces to remember his family? lol'd. old staff, k.
3. 1,000 miles? on foot? does he have a horse?
4. oh for the love of. "lets go kill stuff for no reason"


your characters section is a laugh fest.



it seems like you can only get pets through your cheat code. what the fuck?



that team request is not gonna happen, and even the best games don't have that big of a team. and brainstormers? really?

 

[W H I P Cat]

Hi Xephyr, that post was really uncalled for. Saying "this is terrible, you reflect poorly on the entirety of the world" is not constructive criticism. Unless you have legitimate suggestions on how he should improve, or unless you can point out specific things which are bad, and explain why, please refrain from posting. Thanks.

Hi Luminier, I realize my post was uncalled for. I apologize whole-heartedly and swear on my life that it shall never happen again.

Pet Summoning (and calling back)
Cheat Codes (one will be revealed.)
Multiplayer Online Play (working on it. Not available in demo.)
Herblore (May be available in demo. Very little finished.)
Mining (Might be available in demo. Very little finished.)
and more...

Pet Summoning: um......okay....
Cheat Codes: nobody likes cheat codes they ruin games
Multiplayer Online Play: please don't do this.
Herblore: lolwut? dealing with plants? explain what this is.
Mining: done before but can be fun if done right.

A young mage named Matt has ran away from home. He has nothing to remember his family by except 500 gold pieces and an old staff that his grandfather gave to him before he died. He has wondered over 1,000 miles and has ended up in an old town called Castlestone. Now he has grown up a bit and want to be like his grandfather. He wants to slay dragons and demons and go on an adventure.

1. ran away from home? why?
2. 500 gold pieces to remember his family? lol'd. old staff, k.
3. 1,000 miles? on foot? does he have a horse?
4. oh for the love of. "lets go kill stuff for no reason"


your characters section is a laugh fest.



it seems like you can only get pets through your cheat code. what the fuck?



that team request is not gonna happen, and even the best games don't have that big of a team. and brainstormers? really?

Herblore is making potions. And i put the wrong cheat code screenshot. The pets arent obtained by cheat code. My bad. The rare shop is where you buy things that make u invisible or change the weather and stuff like that. I know my storyline is horrible so I'm gonna try to fix it. Trust me, when you play the demo when it comes out you will not be disappointed.

 

[Luminier]

Hi thanks for ignoring most of what I said. Also don't quote entire posts if you're just going to respond to one or two things--especially when the posts are so tall-- it's annoying.

 

[ebhz.Ash.4rm]

I'd just like to say I was playing an MMO this morning and got a quest to get 20 herbs, I had to sit in front of herb bushes for 5 minutes waiting for a little bar to go from 1 - 100% 20 times, this was not fun. If you plan to put any such system in your game I say scrap it now and make it in some way interactive or just have them get the herbs instantly and devalue them by making em sell for 0 of whatever currency you use. Just came to mind.

What your hero does seems a bit (okay waaaaaay) too extreme for a 15 year old to handle, I mean travelling 1000 miles alone is possible but why even bother, he has a nice home, right? And he can have dreams fair enough but there doesn't seem to be any direction for the plot. If I play this, get plopped down in Castlestone town wanting to slay random mythical beasts with an old staff and 500 gold coins I'd close it within a minute. No direction or aims, no point playing.

 

[Xephyr]

Herblore is making potions. And i put the wrong cheat code screenshot. The pets arent obtained by cheat code. My bad. The rare shop is where you buy things that make u invisible or change the weather and stuff like that. I know my storyline is horrible so I'm gonna try to fix it. Trust me, when you play the demo when it comes out you will not be disappointed.

I hope so, we need some good VX games. Just use other games as influence. Go download Prophecy: The Demon Kingdom.

 

[W H I P Cat]

Away for a week on vacation.

PixelJunk.Eden: Thats not how it is. Some monsters drop Herbs or you can buy Herbs at the store. Monsters drop Unidentified Herbs so there is a chance you can get other herbs if you identify it. You can also plant seeds to get Herbs.

Xephyr: I'm doing my best. Keep in mind that this is my first game with any RPG Maker.

 

[z3r0void]

The mugshots are all messed up =\ They don't even fit with each other because, there all over the place =\ (Notice you got mug from warcraft3/Dota)
And the Storyline sound unreasonable,I don't think 500g is going to last on a trip OVER 1000 Miles O.o
There should also be reason he want to kill dragons , Sound like your just gambling his life in the game.
He need reason why for risking his life

Try to get mugshot that partly matches in types And Seeing the background of menu I think you need to work on your maps a bit. And don't Tell Everyone The cheat in the game,That just ruins a game.