[XP] ~~~Dragon Ghost~~~

[Skweek]

The Story

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The young hero, (name and gender is chosen by player), is standing alone in the snow, when an ancient dragon guardian, Zenith, appears and teleports our young hero off to a mystical land without much explanation. Once there the young hero must discover who he really is, and what he is meant to be doing. Along the way Zenith will occasionally drop in and offer hints and point our young hero in the right direction. As well as the main story line there is separate stories, as well as tutorials in the form of quests. There is mini-games and fun skills to be enjoyed.

Characters

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The Young Hero
- Age : 16
- Race : Human
- More to be added I haven't finished character development

Zenith
- Age : Undetermined
- Race : Dragon
- More to be added I haven't finished character development

More to be added I haven't finished character development

Screen Shots

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Note: these screen shots are not final maps/images. I am going to touch up the graphics once the actual game is finished. However helpful comments are very good, and will be welcome :biggrin:

This is a secluded beach, it is part of the first two quests.

This is part of he Home Town.


This is an area for woodcutting, one of the non-combat skills.


The starting cutscene.

The "official" game website is also in my link. Please comment on your likes/dislikes but please don't be mean.

:thumb: Skweek

 

[bacon]

Story: Your story is very cliche. There really isnt anything original or innovative. Not only is it cliched, but it doesnt make sense. You dont explain what the hero is doing in the snow place, who the dagon is, and where he is teleported. There really isnt much thought put into this. You need to be a lot more original if you want to be successful.

Graphics: Your mapping needs major improvement. Your cliffs are straight, your exteriors are empty, and you misuse alot of tiles. That 4th screenshot is awful. There are half log and half snowmen. Why would logs be arranged this way anyways.Your character is also on a cliff in the 1st screenshots. Overall, your mapping needs major improvement.

Other: In the snow screenshot, the text doesnt really make sense. He tells him who he is, then asks if she knows who you are. It sounds odd. Overall, this projects needs some serious work if it want to be sucessful. You have a bad story and bad mapping. Try going to the mapping improvement thread if you need some help or read some tutorials on story creation and mapping. They may do you some good.

 

[RATED-RKOFRANKLIN]

The story has potential. I just have to wait for a demo to truly judge it. The mapping needs work. The maps look way too empty. Good Luck

 

[Skweek]

Yeah I am working on the maps now, oh and good point "Your cliffs are straight, your exteriors are empty, and you misuse a lot of tiles. That 4th screenshot is awful. There are half log and half snowmen. Why would logs be arranged this way anyways." I am fixing all that now. And, "Your character is also on a cliff in the 1st screen shots", yeah, i want looking when I changed he starting position for that one *oops*