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[Drengeroth]

Hey everyone, this is the first game im going to really try to finished, and did a lot for it already, hope you like it

Story :

Spoiler

Once before all the times started, there was nothing but a god, The Holy light.
The Holy light was always in his white room, and alone.
This god once decided to create a civilization in one of the many, many, empty universes. Atleast, he thought that they were empty..

In the first era, the progress of this civilization went all well. They had learned a lot of things during their evolution, and The Holy Light was pleased.

During the second era, and they had learned that there was a god that gave the people lives, and thus they started worshipping The Holy Light, he was still pleased of the progress.

By the time of the third era, the civilization started to grow bigger and bigger, it looked as they were breeding like bunnies. And with the problems that a big civilization would had, has been brought with it.

The people started to choose sides for who they should follow, and they started to create seperate cities and countries, and eventually wars started.. The Holy light tried to stop this by creating protectors of the realm, called The Holy Saints. They failed to keep the peace...
And now it's the fourth era, it seemed that we were not alone in this universe. And a different god, a very evil one, who we call "The Darkness" has beseiged our world.
With all the power of The Holy Light and his Holy Saints, they tried to convince the nations again to stop fighting with each other and to work together if we wanted to have a chance to stop The Darkness. And miraciously, it worked and the nations started working together.

The High Council of each nation have come together to think up plans and ideas to stop this Darkness, and hopefully survive.
The Darkness' force of minions has been attacking a lot of important places like the major cities. We were able to defend most of the places, but with an awfull large death toll on our side.
We must now find out what The Darkness really is and how we can stop it, or else we will have to say goodbye to our beloved planet, and our lives..

Screenshots :

Spoiler

Criticism and ideas (for the name) much appriciated, thanks

Edit : Forgot to add, i might be doing something special with this game. Im going to break the fourth wall, if you know what that means >

 

[Jason]

Hmm, the story does seem a little cliché, but what doesn't these days, eh ? So I won't say anything particularly bad about it, although I think you should expand a little, where did this darkness come from, for example.

I can't say much about the mapping as I don't really like the VX Maps, however the last one doesn't look too bad, although if it's a church, I'd have the cross statue i the middle with the two people ones at either side, and remove the table and place something that could look like a pedestal for someone to stand at and talk.

A few ideas for the title could be (As cheesey as they seem, I'm just giving ideas);

The day of the dark
Nightfall
Saviour of the Light
Dark Encounter

You don't HAVE to use any of them, as said, I'm just throwing ideas there for you to give you a helping hand.

As for the thread itself, maybe you could add some character bio's, and add captions to the screenshots, telling us where the player is in them.

Good luck :thumb:

 

[Drengeroth]

Thanks,
the reason that i didnt add any char's bio's is because for a big amount of time you will be with one char. (yes i know, sounds kinda stupid) But if i'd tell anything about that char, that would be pretty much a spoiler :biggrin:
I'll edit the story quickly to be more detailed though

 

[LooseEnds]

Darkness Wanting
Noir Scorge

Anyway, jbrist pretty much sums up my feelings on he matter. It seems a bit cliche' but not to a gigantic degree, so long as your main hero dosn't wake up with amnesia and has to hunt down crystals.

The screenshots look nice. I like the church, it looks kind of country.
But why is that lake so square? It looks weird and icky...

 

[Drengeroth]

Yeah,ive got some problems with making those rivers/lakes, i tried to make it bend somewhat, im gonna try and fix it though.

 

[Xilef]

Darkness WantingBut why is that lake so square? It looks weird and icky...

It's an issue with VX

 

[Drengeroth]

Okay,i got some new screenies

Spoiler

1. In memory of... Blah, where have i seen this before?

2. Lets do some nice shopping

3. Nice and warm campfire

4. Less nice and less warm, old, forgotten house

 

[Jason]

The screenshots aren't too bad, although the house and shopping mall seem too big and empty.

 

[LiquidMetal91]

Got to agree about the house.
If it's an old abandoned shack, it would be smaller

Gr. LM91

 

[R.J.]

Piece of advice: In the campfire screen, darken the screen (a lot) and make a bright spot only around the campfire. It doesn't make sense for the campfire just to light up the entire area miles away.

 

[Drengeroth]

Thanks for the replies, i changed some of the things, and i edited the cave to be darker with some light

About the house/shack, its a kind of outhouse or cabin

Spoiler

Darker Cave:

Darker and probobly realisticer,old,forgotten cabin:

 

[Numb]

Hmm.
the cabin does look better, but as he said, you need to make it smaller.
Hold on, I will post an example in a minute.

 

[R.J.]

The cave looks a lot better that way. Very good.

 

[Numb]

Okay. I attempted to make a abandoned cabin/shed.

Spoiler: Cabin

Notice how more space is used, and the room is smaller, and more realistic. There's not a lot of empty space.
Also notice that there is a tint to the screen, to show that it is dark, but it's not completely solid black. Using a solid black makes it hard to see the room.
For that screenshot I used.
Red: -34
Green: -68
Blue: -51
Gray: 0
Edit:
I decided to redo the cave too.
Though the cave was acceptable, I thought you could make it better.
Something I advise you do is edit the hills, make them have more texture, and add a little bit of grass and moss.
And again, make it smaller. Making it smaller makes it more realistic and removes unneeded space.

Spoiler: cave

Edit2:
Also one quick thing. Keep the light around the fire. Unfortunately I didn't have the light script on hand so I couldn't put anything around it. But be sure to keep that in there to make it more realistic.

 

[Noir_Box]

I don't understand your story completely, for example you say "We were able to defend the most of it" and "we have been able to find a way to attack straight into the root of this evil. " But at the same time, you say that they don't know what or who it is....? How can they attack something they don't see, how did they plan against it? Unless they can see this evil as creatures or forces or something, and you just didn't state that clearly. And how did they manage to keep the peace so long if there were no protectors? Did evil not exist at all?

I'm not trying to bash your game, I'm just maybe giving you things you could explain more clearly or think about. I hate discouraging people, because with help, you never know, maybe they can produce something really nice.

 

[Drengeroth]

@ LunarEclipse : Thanks for the samples and the tips, i will hold them in mind. I dont have much experience in how certain things like caves and such look like, so i can make a mess of it.

@Noir_Box : Thanks for pointing out the flaws, ill try my best to rewrite the story a bit and make it some more..flawless.

 

[Drengeroth]

Okay,i have edited the story, it sounds and looks better, atleast, in my opinion then.

 

[RATED-RKOFRANKLIN]

The mapping looks nice. My only problem is that I'm not a fan of religion based games even if it is not a real religion. I also have an issue with the story. At first you say the plan worked and then it goes on that the war is still going on. If it worked then how is this war still going on?

With all the power of The Holy Light and his Holy Saints, they tried to convince us to work together if we wanted to have a chance to stop it. And miraciously, it worked..

We decided to all come back together as one and work together. The Holy Council of each nation have come together to think up plans and ideas to stop this and survive.
The Darkness' force of minions has been attacking a lot of important places like the major cities. We were able to defend most of the places, but with an awfull large death toll on our side.
We must now find out what The Darkness really is and how we can stop it, or else we will have to say goodbye to our beloved planet, and o

 

[Drengeroth]

First there was a war from in the planet, between the countries, shortly after that dark force wanted to invade the planet, and the holy light,with its saints, tried to convince the nations to stop fighting together if they wanted to win from the dark force

 

[RATED-RKOFRANKLIN]

Ok now I understand. When I read it again it made sense.