Trying to produce a FF8 style-face: no shading, no colour (aka bad pencil art)

[SorceressKyrsty]

I'm making a sequel to Final Fantasy VIII, because the story cut off funny in the "wtf is going on with this?" region. These are the two new characters. Aside from these, if I can refine drawing in this style I have to make Fuijin's, Raijin's, Ellone's, Xu's and Nida's. >_<.
Here's the two I've currently done...

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A girl named Kirsti. She's supposed to have the same sort of "dark emo" kind of look as Squall's art, as well as the scar. Part of the story line (click the link in my signature)

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A boy named Spencer. I don't like this one really, I have difficulty drawing boys (as well as drawing in this style, my normal style is manga/anime). I think I messed up his eyes. His hair is supposed to be layered, but the right side ended up looking like a fringe >_<

Comments, critisism? Both appreciated. Please don't flame the game-sequel idea, please!

 

[ultimaodin]

No offense but please remove the scar as that is a Squall trade mark. The chances of them both having an exact scar is highly unlikely!

Also I saw nothing wrong with FF8's ending so I have no clue where you going to pull your concepts and storyline from but if you pull it off then kudos!

Anyway back to the art again:

The eye's in the second one are actually better than your first. The first one looks like you've tried to combine the FF8 style with abstract, the eye is way to far away and flatened compared to the nose shape and position.

Also you point the chin a bit too much! Otherwise they do look relatively close to the FF8 style but it looks like you've taken actual elements from existing characters. (AKA the scar for example)

Keep at it as well as make them a tad more origional and you will get the hang of it... maybe... unless your like me...

 

[SorceressKyrsty]

The reason she has that scar is story-line related but I can't really reveal that or they'd be no point in making a sequel, would there? It's a major storyline tie-in, also conceding with the actually main storyline, which explains how GF's are created, and why Squall is so influenced by jewellery that, in the future, has the same name as a GF controlled by Ultimecia. The actual game didn't explain all of that, just said that GF's were a form of para-magic.
I wasn't actually looking at a picture during the original sketch of the girl, but then I went and had a look at some FF8 eyes. They're mostly based of Selphie's.
And everyone says that about the chin... Working on it if I can find the sketch...

 

[ultimaodin]

Well if your doing a lot of defining then I take it Hyne will take part as a major focal point.

Afterall if Hyne was the cause of magic and para-magic then you would have to have a lot of links to him.

That means a lot of devolging into the sorceress war and such.

Also the eyes are fine except that they don't match the perspective! Try working on that a little better.

 

[xinrua]

whats up with the pointed chins?
I' scares me a bit.....
your hair is a bit how should I put it, good.
and you neck is super-man long!!!!
And lessing down the size of the nose.
Anyway, nice job.

 

[moog]

They both almost look the same, imo.