Title screen for my game

[bojox3m]

hi guys, please give constructive criticism on my title screen
i think im missing some thing here

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http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y164/happygirl05/eternity/Title0.png[/IMG]

1st edit: (change the font of eternity request by WeaponOD)

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http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y164/happygirl05/eternity/itonakya.jpg[/IMG]

2nd batch edit (the variation of font and the glow issue has been change)

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http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y164/happygirl05/eternity/hmmmsanalastnatu.png[/IMG]

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http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y164/happygirl05/eternity/ganito.png[/IMG]

on this update, i kinda play with the font, make it look like horns.. how is it to you?

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http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y164/happygirl05/eternity/finalwakoko.png[/IMG]

All criticisms are welcome! thanks guys

 

[WeaponOD]

I don't like the "Eternity" Text, i personally don't think it fits in, and maybe change the purple glow.

 

[bojox3m]

you mean change the Eternity word or the font on eternity?

 

[WeaponOD]

I think you should change the font.

 

[bojox3m]

ok thanks man. keep the critics comming guys~

 

[Lazarus]

I dont really like the purple aura around the words ':|
But i like the background, nice work :thumb:

 

[arev]

Those circles would simply rock if they were rotating but i tried making something like this once, and it didn't work (1FPS). Looking good so far.

 

[bojox3m]

hoho! i think that purple glow really need to be removed. (im quite attached to it though)

you guys think the font looks fine? and what color should i use on the font?

and thanks guys for the critics, i need a helluva of it!~

 

[$t3v0]

The background is great but the text does you no favours at all!

I'm not quite sure why or how you can fix it, But I just don't like the text.

Not a very helpful comment, I'm sorry.

 

[bojox3m]

@stev0: yeah man, the fonts are just off. ill change it now.

edit:
updated :D

 

[penemue]

Amazing work on the background but like it's been mentioned the font lets it down. Also, although the title Eternity; Symphony of Dreams most probably has relevance to the story of your game, Eternity, (and dreams) is one of those words that comes up in every second game title, try to change the words with a synonym finder or possibly the whole title altogether. Although hard to come up with, an original name can really spark certain peoples' interests within a game they might see.

 

[$t3v0]

It's better, but still not good enough to compliment the great looking background. Here, Take a look at this website and follow a tutorial that's describing the style you're looking for. At the moment it feels really bland and flat. But some of these text effects I just sent you should really bring it to life!

(I'm assuming you use photoshop? Or are you a GIMP?)

 

[bojox3m]

about the title: yeah.. the words eternity and dreams are already use but im gonna think if im going to change it. thanks for the heads up btw

@ stev0
hehe thanks for the links man. gonna check it awt!

Updated

 

[Lazarus]

I checked the newer ones you fixed, the last one looks best to me atleast.

But i think the 3D effect of the text looks kinda out of place.

 

[bojox3m]

Lazarus: w00t! i know there is something weird in that effect. im gonna try to fix it :D

 

[Mr_Smith]

The last one is the best, for sure. I like the font, and that red glow just does the final touch.

 

[bojox3m]

hmm.. if Mr_smit say so.. it'll be my final edit then.

to everyone: thanks for hangin here

 

[Lackluster]

Not bad... hell of alot of glow around the text though.