The Teleporter

[stonzes]

The Teleporter is a RMXP game.
Ive been working on this all day long, and I got the first 10 min. Of the game done but I thought you guys would want to see just the begining.
Its a Funny/adventure game.
Have fun playing and remember the game is only 10 min. long. Its just the very begining of the game.
I would say the demo is more like a Cinematic to the game.

The Story

Spoiler

A man named Drade Rules the world by making a deal with a greater evil then Drade himself. You, must travel to the gates of Hell to defeat Drade and The Greater Evil (Funny Storyline) .

Download: http://prankboys.tripod.com/theteleporter/
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[mdavis901]

you should elaborate much more on the story besides just saying "funny storyline".
Nothing you've presented me with thus far makes me want to play this game, or even take a second glance at this thread.
Things you should probably add for more sucess:
1) Some more story
2) A couple character bios would be nice.
3) some features that make your game unique/special.
Thats all I can think of.
But aren't you tired of getting every one of your topics locked?
You should've learned by now that half-steppin isn't going to get you anywhere.

Good luck surviving! :thumb:

 

[stonzes]

Yup, Im still working on the story line. I will have it up as soon as possible. This is just so people can think about if they want to play this when the Full game comes out

 

[dadevvtsvre]

Downloading...now. As already mentioned, more information would be nice, such as on characters. And two sentences is hardly enough to get me interested and have enough knowledge about the story. Nonetheless, I'll try out your game.

Spoiler: Clicky

Okay, finished. That was quick. Anyway, you need to work on quite a few things. The first thing I noticed when starting is that you left the project unencrypted. It's not a big deal or anything, it's just that anyone can modify it to their heart's content if they want. If you don't want it unencrypted, remember to check the little checkbox when compressing the game data.

Anyway...the title screen you have there isn't very well done. Not only does it not fit into the screen (there is some blank space) but it simply shows lightning hitting a house, or something similar to that. It doesn't have much relevance to the actual game, besides the fact that the guy teleports around, and it shows purple lightning when he does.

The mapping is terrible, sorry to say...the first map shows nothing but bare ground, with a few randomly placed trees and a path. Then I see some guy named Drade, who wants to take over the world, standing on top of a castle...huh? I mean, I know it isn't really a serious game, but...still. Try and elaborate a little more, k? No one's gonna really like your game if they have no idea what's going on. Personally, I'm not going to play a game where it's just "ok4y ur thi sdude tat wants 2 take over thewo rld so just play it  :grin:" I've noticed that you're still working on a story line , though, which may explain the absence of a plot. In this case, next time, refrain from posting your project before it has any real substance to it, please?

So he casts a spell, and all of a sudden, I see a whole bunch of non-animated fires everywhere. If you don't know how to animate them, just let me know, and I'll be sure to help you out. Then, I'm sent scrolling across an ocean, then onto land where I see a perfectly straight cliff with the same tree tile placed all over. The Inquisitor placed many types of trees onto his tileset for a reason-so people would use more than one tree. I suggest reading some mapping tutorials for your own benefit.

Other than that, I couldn't help but grin when it showed the random little girls and the creepy "la la la" music playing. Although it makes no sense at all, really. Seriously, I have no idea what's going on.

My suggestions if you plan to continue this-work on your mapping (ex. not using the same tree tile over and over again, when there's at least fifteen different kinds you could've used) elaborate on plot (so I'm not wondering what the heck is going on) a little on grammar (not a big deal, it's just that certain words were spelt incorrectly, such as "wrong" was spelt as "rong" in one part) and redo the whole thing, with more plot details, character information, things that'll make me wanna play the game. Because as of now, I have no real interest of wanting to play the full thing. But good luck to you anyway. Hope these tips will help you out.  :shades:

 

[moog]

Your screens look really bad, also your grammar needs clarification. Perhaps try to fill up the random mass of space with colorful lands and other various objects? It reminds me of Suikoden IV sort of.

 

[Sonata]

Your title screen is horrible man. It's better to go with something simple than a shitty image found through a google search. And is that a Harry Potter font? Don't use that.

 

[stonzes]

thanks for all the help. Im going to make a new demo with all your guys advise in it

 

[Avgen]

Why dont you credit who made the "World Map Tilesets". I know you did'nt make it. Cause it were made by the same person who sprited the exterior and interior Medieval Tilesets.

I have'nt downloaded the demo yet though =/