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The Gifted Child (In need of some constructive feedback)

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In the universe, there were three worlds. There was the world of Devils, the world of Gods, the world of Humans and Elves.
Devils were evil creatures, and their main reason for living was destruction. Their world was one that was full of hate, cruelty and tyranny. Despite this, however, they were powerful creatures for their focus on weapons and dark magic studying made them strong and very acknowledged of war issues.

Gods, on the other hand, were peaceful and good creatures. They lived for good and peace, and wished no hate either for Devils or Humans and Elves. They were powerful as well, but not as good as the Devils.

It came that the Gods discovered that the Devils were planning on taking over the Humans' and Elves' world and add it to the Devils' community. Being the good creatures they are, the Gods decided to put an end to the Devils' evil plan, thus beginning an endless war.

The war began and there seemed to be no end for it. The Devils were much more powerful than the Gods and in many battles - if not all - the Gods would be defeated. The king and the queen of the gods, however, decided to risk a plan in order to save their kingdom. There was known that a huge power was stored in the heart of the forests called Veneroso. The power was enormous and powerful enough to defeat the Devils. However, the royal family feared that if the Veneroso falls in the Devils' hands, the Gods' world would be over. So they only used a little bit of it- a little bit that was enough to defeat the Devils, and the rest they decided to hide it somewhere where the Devils wouldn't be able to find it. In someone.

They decided to store the power in an elf's body - a newborn one -. So they sent who they can trust with the power of Veneroso for this mission and a little girl was chosen for this.

After that, the Devils and Gods faced each other in a deadly battle. None survived of all, none but a demon called Cruella. Cruella knew about the gifted child and being the devil she was, she decided to search for it, to finish what her people began.

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Today, Cruella finally knows who is the gifted child. With her partner Ray, she is expecting to capture the gifted girl, called Rosaline, and take the power for herself.

Meanwhile, Rosaline and her best friend Amy graduates from the Academy as full-fledged clerics. They now are planning on living their life, having adventure and using what they have learned in their academy. Yet little they know that their life may have so much adventure than they can ever imagine.

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Rosaline Roland
Age: 19
Gender: Female
Race: Elf
Meaning of Name: Fair Rose
Personality and Bio: Rosaline is an energetic and an active girl. She likes adventures and would never be found calm or peaceful. Although she appears to be a bit tough on the outside, she is kind and gentle in the inside.
Rosaline lost her parents when she was young due to an attack from the thugs on her village. She moved to Trissina and was taken care of by the Academy. She was raised to be a cleric.
Rosaline is totally unaware of the eternal power she holds.

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Amy Rose
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Meaning of Name: Love/Lovable
Personality and Bio: Amy is very kind and gentle. She is so shy and innocent. She doesn't like to get in trouble a lot and always prefers to follow the rules. Despite this nature, she sometimes gets out of it because of her best friend's Rosaline actions. She is not the adventurous type which is one of the reasons that made her become a cleric.

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Ray Summon
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Race: Half Human - Half Demon
Meaning of Name: Wise Protector
Personality and Bio: Ray is Cruella's partner. He is a mage swordsman, who can use both weapons and magic. Meeting Cruella and her telling of her 'love' for her and how she would spare the power with him if they found it, Ray is taking advantage of that fake love. But what he doesn't know is that it is a true lie.
He has been sent by Cruella to capture Rosaline, but will he succeed?

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Zane Truse
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Meaning of name: Beloved
Personality and History: Zane is a mage who is handsome, kind and caring. He is popular among ladies, but none of them ever interested him. His magic is as good as his good looking. After graduating, Zane has been wondering what to do.

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Cruella
Age: Unknown
Gender: Female
Race: Demon
Meaning of name: Evil and Cruel
Personality and History: Little is known about Cruella. The known is that she has been seeking for the gifted child for years. Meeting Ray, she decided to fool him by making him think that she loves him so that she could convince him to join her on finding the gifted child.


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~ Custom Menu, Item, Equip...etc screens.
~ Surprising Actions and Unexpected events
~ Party members that only appear to certain events
~ A lot of custom graphics and music - Credits goes to their owners.
~ DQ Church System

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Now Recruiting!

1 Musician - I would like the game to have it's own music, like it's own soundtrack. But as this is not an easy job, I need 2 persons who can compose well-done music. Requests shall be expected up to 2 BGMs a week for each person.


Current Team:

Me - Developer, Mapper, Spriter
zchin - Mapper
forcem - Musician
Stripes (from another site) - Spriter and Mapper

I'd like more to join!

Now you ask, why would you join this game? Now I can't offer money but I promise you, this game is an active one. It won't be a while and then it dies. I can guarantee that you will have fun and earn experience and enjoy being in an active team.
 

zchin

Sponsor

No offense but my first glance at the title picture I though it was "The Gifted Chila" the if you could you might want to have the D's changed, other then that, the game looks like it's going well. Cruella sounds like the little mermaid :grin: . You might want to take out those outlines with the profile pictures, a good way of doing that is to go to Gimp and smudge the pixels just before the black outline and it might make a nice antialasis (Not sure how to spell that but).

Now after that criticism I might want to join as a mapper. I think that the story is nice though I'm working on my own game I might not be able to do a grand cave in about a week. I am currently away from home on a vacation and cannot start right away, I guess I can be a little supporter for small jobs. My vacation ends in about a week by then I might be able to help you with the profile picture outline (if you'd like).

Thank you and have a nice day
 
lol Chila doesn't sound bad. XD

But yeah, hopefully, I can get a new logo soon. XD

And hmmm I wonder why does Cruella sound like a little mermaid though. :haha:

And I don't much mind the outlines. I am bad at graphics and don't really wanna spoil it out so I'll just leave it for now.
 

zchin

Sponsor

I just can't get over how I didn't make much sense, I meant Cruella from "The little mermaid" which is a disney movie.
 
lol There was a Cruella in the little mermaid from Disney? XD

And if you would like to join as a mapper, please send me some examples of your maps when you are ready. ^^
 
I think that Cruella was the antagonist in 101 Dalmatians, not The Little Mermaid. The villain in The Little Mermaid was named Ursula. Who is the girl in blue clothes that is in the story, features, etc. graphics? I don't think you mentioned her. Are devils and demons the same thing?
 
@zchin131: Nice map. ^^ Alright, you are in. Please, when you are ready to map anything, please send me a PM telling me that you are ready. I have everything planned and all.

@danyo34: The fairy is a little "something" that isn't part of the plot story. You will only know who is she when you play the demo and finish it. And yes, the devils and demons are the same although with little differences.
 

zchin

Sponsor

I got mixed up with the little mermaid and the 101 dalmatians movie,
mermaids look just like puppys! :biggrin:
Edit: By the way, you made a typo, in the recruiting musicians, you said persons when it should be people
 
@Love hey, Love i see you have posted your game here too. i want to help too but im not that talented. lol. keep up the good work Love.

@zchin131 hmm, gifted Chila. didn't notice it since now that i read your post. it does look like "a" but i read it fine the first time i saw the logo, and i just imagined how mermaids would look like puppy's :haha:
 

zchin

Sponsor

I, have actually seen one. It was trapped in a box called television! :cry: Poor puppy!
Anyway, I really look forward to what the new logo looks like from Theory!
 
Ahh yip. I asked for a logo from Theory and hopefully, it will be done soon. ^^

I am sure he is going to make it look great. ^^
 

zchin

Sponsor

I made a request there to! Sadly I didn't make it in... Anyway, I made a poll in my project discussion

Here

and I am looking for people to use the poll...
After the server went down it has been very vacant lately... I wonder why though... Anyway, Tell me what you think about the map I PMed you and tell me what it needs and doesn't need.
 
@zchin: The map was just awesome! There were some mistakes here and there but overall, it was good. :) I edited it a little, though, so I hope it's ok.

And I am checking your topic now. ^^

Also, I have a little update here:


* An evented title system
* A new intro with more info about the background story of the game
* New maps, new dialogues and improved quests.
* New sprites, effects and music.

What is left to be done:

* Remaking the opening
* Might add a new quest
* Adjusting the enemies
* Remapping a few places (Thanks to zchin, though, I am almost done with that. ^^)
* Improve more dialogues and cutscenes.

And here is the title screenie:

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