The Gate - HELP WANTED!!!!

Johoe · Nov 20, 2008

Hi,
I'm pretty new to working hard on my RPGXP project, I'm trying to make an ancient time-modern time game, you know, like dragon ball, the things in it are old,
but it's in the future...
The Story:

The story tells about a boy who died in an unknown accident, and a voice is directing him
to a maze, where he starts training, when he is ready, the voice asks him if he wants to help him in taking
over the Spirit World, or protect it (Bad story,Good story by order sayed).
Good Story: The player is getting defeated by four giant evil dark demons, and he is regaining conscience in a distant
place, and he sees two guys, called Rib and Lit, they are the guardians of Time and Space.
They decide to train him, and he gets his element after he reaches a certain level.
Afterwards, Rib and Lit summon a Summoner, to summon a summoning pet for the hero. (This is where I am in the making of the game)
After he trains enough, he gets a Summoned Creature Scroll which allows him to summon a monster.
Then, a dark vortex appears in the sky, and a dark being appears.
appearently, the dark being was the strange voice the hero heard.
then, Rib and Lit are trying to beat the "Dark Master" (that's the name of the dark being).
but with no sucsses, the hero tries his luck too, but again, lost.
Rib and Lit decide to train themselvs, and the hero, in the Chi World. (Insert what's happening in the Chi World)
After they train, Rib, Lit, and the hero return to the Spirit World, to defeat the "Dark Master", and his evil Rib, Lit and the hero's dark replicas.

That's basiclly the story, maybe i will improve it a little...
Anyway, I tried to take some scripts from this website, but I have some problems...
And I really need help...
so, if someone can help me with my game, I will send him the compressed game, and I will tell him what I am trying to do...
Here are some screenshots (Beware, there's 22 of them!):

Thanks in advance!
Johoe

Ellie · Nov 20, 2008

Please decide what you want this thread to be...

- A project thread belongs in Project Discussion and requires more info
- A concept thread cannot have screenshots and requires more info
- A recruitment thread is not allowed, though recruitment can be tagged on to the end of a project thread
- Support belongs in the support boards (General support, RGSS support for scripts, Script Requests for actual requests)

Ye have 24 hours to decide. *Dramatic music plays*

Johoe · Nov 21, 2008

I think I will make it a project thread, and I will ask in the end
if someone can help me, how does that sound?

Ellie · Nov 21, 2008

I'm moving this to Project Discussion then but you need to update your post accordingly, based on the rules and guidelines (it's not hard to follow, and you should have already read them before posting).

http://www.rmxp.org/forums/index.php?topic=35601.0

Namely:

2.) Minimum Posting Requirements for a Project Topic
When you start a project topic, you must have at the very least two screenshots of your work in progress, in addition to one full paragraph of story description. It shows that you are making a definite effort to make this game a reality, and are not just spouting a random idea that you came up with two seconds ago.

Eventually, we will have a thread where people can post these random ideas, and the rules will be changed to reflect as much. Until then, please follow these requirements.

Johoe · Nov 22, 2008

well, you see that I made a story spoiler...

Johoe · Nov 22, 2008

Anyway, please HELP MEEEEE!!!!!
By the way, thanks to pestilence, for helping me, really, thanks.

moog · Nov 23, 2008

Im not going to crit your story because its obvious its absolutely lacking and terrible, but you are asking for help on it so I wont bother telling you things you already know.

I just wanted to say CHANGE YOUR SCREENS PLEASE!! Half of those are just random shots of the editor; no one needs to see that dude, that's technichally not really a valid screenshot.

Also your mapping is terrible (this goes hand in hand with the plot so again, I wont harp as much) and I STILL dont really get what this thread is about because its so incoherently random that it makes me want to skip it, but oh well.

You also might want character descriptions and stuff as well, and maybe some interesting things you plan to implement, not just that you are going to leech as many scripts as possible and plant them into your game.

annnnnnnnnnd if you REALLY want people to help you with your game (I can look at it and already tell you its not going to be good) then dont tell them to ask you for help, just post them demo here. But I mean, it doesnt really matter cause this thread seems more like a CD thread if you would just remove your screens but oh well.

Get your thread more organized and up to par with other good looking threads around and then more people will be interested. And dont:

Johoe":3pm991x4 said:
Anyway, please HELP MEEEEE!!!!!

...post like this, its not heartening and people will ignore you fast.

Good luck.

Durastik · Nov 23, 2008

Wait, isn't the main character dead?...

That could actually be fun, but he needs motivation besides a voice to make the player want to do these things. Maybe he left a loved one behind and he needs to pass an important message on ie they're going to die from some horrible disease if he doesn't communicate to them where he died so they can find the medicine (that plot I used in a dnd plot, except the main character wasn't dead, but a turned into a beaver).

I think if the player is dead, that motivating them by making them have a real need to progress, should be important.

I can tell this is obviously a first project, so my advice to you is the advice that I wish someone had given me when I started:

Just dick around in the editors, make little stories, event games, maps, whatever. The more you use rmxp, the better you'll get at using it. Play other games made with rpg maker, learn and steal from it.

But most importantly, you will more then likeley not finish most of your projects, you are better to create a short story, event game or the like, and complete it. You can work on more abitious projects once you have the skill, but don't try amd make something beyond you means.

As for the screenshots, quality over quantity, most people will look at the first 2 at most, then not look at the rest, so find the best to maps or whatever you have and post them.

I see potential in this game, as I do for every game, so don't be disheartend, but remember that everything that you want in your game, you will have to make, so the less work you have to do, the sooner it will be out ^_^

Peace

Johoe · Nov 23, 2008

OK, first of all,durastik,imagine that you die, then you go to
where my game starts, it's something like Heaven, but a world of it's own,
it looks like earth, but older, and it's "job" is being Heaven.
Second, there are a lots of worlds like the one the player starts in,
the biggest two are: The Spirit World (Starting world), and The Chi World.
Third, I didn't even finish the good story!
Now, moog, I don't have any better screens.
Second, the first map screen is just reminders of scripts I DOWNLOADED (as in, I didn't make them, just so everyone will know).
Third, I made a lot of projects, but short, and lousy story lines. I barely did about 3 maps, and then made a giant, undefeatable boss.
Fourth, I know my mapping is lousy...
I hope I made everyone happy...

Johoe · Nov 23, 2008

BTW, here are the demos:
The Gate - Start + Good Story (Start Finished)

http://rapidshare.com/files/165969711/The_Gate.exe.html
The Gate - Bad Story

http://rapidshare.com/files/165969714/T ... y.exe.html

Project5- A testing project, with some scripts I want

http://rapidshare.com/files/165969712/Project5.exe.html

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