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the chosen one. ( let me know what you think)

ok..this is my first game and i want to hear your opinion about it.(sorry my bad english im spanish)

Story:
20 years ago a priestess lost her father.
4 years later she gave birth to a little girl.
but the world of Caisin was not the right place
to give birth to little ones especially for the
priestess each of them have their own duty,
to protect Caisin's life crystals from destuction.
if they get destroyed the world will perish.
but priestess Maria let her child live
and she gave her a name ''Marion''
but the times were hard and she couldnt take
care of a little child while the other priestess
were trying their hardest to keep the crystals alive.
so she sent Marion trough the time portal.
and placed her in a small forest town ''Eshik''
''im sorry'' was the last words Marion ever heard from her mother.
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The little girl grew up to be a fine Warrior
training under the high respected Elders she and her friend Marcus
became werry close.
since Marcus lost his parents in the great war agains the Cameons,
he never trusted anyone but Marion.
but when the oldest Town elder elder 'esha'' takes
Marcus away for 3 years everythings changed.
the Elders died, the Cameons and the Eshiks continued fighting.
and Marion lived her life unknowing what was gonna happen to her.
in time she would know.

Marion castelle.
age: 16
Class: fighter.
description: Marion is the main heroine of the game,
she has a strong will and she always belived in the town elders
she always has faith in herself and her friend Marcus.
after reading Marcus note and meeting with a mysterious man
Marion is sent trough time again without knowing where she came from.
all she knew was that she needed to find Marcus, and that fast.

Marcus Latzon
age: 17
Class: Fighter
description: Hes been Marions childhood friend as long as he can remember.
he lost his parents long ago in the great war.
he live alone in a old cottage.
after returning to the village after 3 years of training
he mysteriously(??) disapeared from Marions world.

Zayne

age: 19
Class: white/dark mage
description: a character you will meet later in the game.
after revealing lord Kasum's plans Zayne escapes his prison
and decides to join Marion in her quest to rescue Marcus.

Vera
age: ??
Class: ??
description: a wierd girl who helps Marion in her quest.
her birthplace and past is unknown...

screen shots coming soon!!


should i make a demo of this game?
should i work more on the story ? (i aready know that i need to)
or should i just throw this game away?


maps: 24% done
Charas: 96% done
script: 5%
face graphics: 60%

Contact me on  jannem_96@hotmail.com if you want to getin touch with me.
 
I would work a lot more on your story, since that looks more like a short opening dialogue than a real story...

Also two screenshots is a minimum requirement for a post here. Since you said "screenshots coming soon" I'm guessing you're in the middle of taking some, but if not you need to add some in. If that's not possible then you haven't got enough of your game done to warrant having a topic here.

2.) Minimum Posting Requirements for a Project Topic
When you start a project topic, you must have at the very least two screenshots of your work in progress, in addition to one full paragraph of story description.  It shows that you are making a definite effort to make this game a reality, and are not just spouting a random idea that you came up with two seconds ago.
 
Commander Wyatt":1rkxe4xk said:
I would work a lot more on your story, since that looks more like a short opening dialogue than a real story...

Also two screenshots is a minimum requirement for a post here. Since you said "screenshots coming soon" I'm guessing you're in the middle of taking some, but if not you need to add some in. If that's not possible then you haven't got enough of your game done to warrant having a topic here.

2.) Minimum Posting Requirements for a Project Topic
When you start a project topic, you must have at the very least two screenshots of your work in progress, in addition to one full paragraph of story description.  It shows that you are making a definite effort to make this game a reality, and are not just spouting a random idea that you came up with two seconds ago.

yea..thnks for the reply. im gopnna chnage the story as soon as iget some mapping done and such cause im making this game alone and i could use some help '-_-.
and im not sure how to put up screent shots and pics and such yet.
 

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You can take screen shots by pressing alt + PrtSc if you're on windowed mode. Then open whatever image editor you have and paste. Save this and upload to an image host. Personally I use imageshack, since there's no signup required.
 

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