The Apothecary's Son RPGVX

[leadbelly]

About:

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In another realm. A battle of magic and nature is at its peak. There are two sides, the Empire and the Naturalists. The Empire dont agree with the laws of magic, and dont except it as a way of battle or art. While, the Naturalists are all about magic and connect with nature and the elements to establish this. The Empire live out in towns covered with thick, brick walls too cover their people. While the Naturalists live in camps in the forests, and disturb the common nature of the Empire. While the Empire hates magic, the Naturalists hate the idea of not accepting magic. Their battle is ironic, somewhat like heaven verses hell. Heaven being the naturalists, pure and open-aspected. While, hell is the Empire, corrupt and simple.

The Naturalists consists of four types of classes. Each of them being able to control one type of element to their own skill. Each element being unique and powerful on its own, the one bearing this magical essence can bring great havoc if they choose their path wisely and experiance the word, travel and socialize with the many people of the world.

Throughout the game, your character will get stronger in certain areas(Strength, Dexterity, MaxHP) depending on how you socialize or do certain things throughout the game. Basically, your choices alter your characters advantages through battle. Making the game somewhat related to yourself. For example, if you have alot of Agility you are more of an assassin. If you have alot of Defense, you'd be more of a brute warrior.

The world doesnt only have good, but it has bad. The people in the realm have needs too, they seem to get a little cranky if they dont get "roasted". A small twig type tree root grows around the earth, it contains a certain chemical that gives off the same feeling as being high. Its substance is illegal, and if you talk to the wrong person or get to open with them while having the drug on you. You could be sent to jail.

 

[friend]

Really man, I want to critic but, there is rarely any information here.

The about really tells me nothing, the characters are typical and why on earth do they have Japanese names, are they in a Japanese setting?

 

[leadbelly]

its not really a japanese setting, more of a global setting. Just expanding my mind on this rpg ;\ :heart:

 

[friend]

Well, Japanese don't work well in a global setting unless it has alot of Japanese influences.

 

[leadbelly]

it does, i love the studio ghilbi series which is anime. i get most of my fantasy from that stuff like spirited away and etc. :box:

 

[friend]

it does, i love the studio ghilbi series which is anime. i get most of my fantasy from that stuff like spirited away and etc. :box:

Uhm, Japanese names give many people a bad impression and its overused...

And anime is a completely different genre here.

 

[leadbelly]

true, idk. i like the idea. i wish i could make a better one.
unfortunatly, im stuck with making this bs rpg for now to better learn how to create a more unique rpg ya know ? :thumb:

 

[Mr_Smith]

I agree to what Friend said, it is a start but not a great one. I think that this setting, and story, can go either way, to failure or to succes. If you want to achieve succes, you have to improve it alot, in my opinion.
Also aware of spelling mistakes, I don't say mine is great but if you make a topic like this you should always check it first. A few examples are heros instead of heroes and theif instead of thief.
Good luck on this RPG, and I'll check it once in a while.
EDIT, I didn't pay attention to it first, but why is the title Xaos Theory? I can understand the Theory, but what exactly is Xaos?

 

[leadbelly]

baha, dunno made the title blem just to get the theme of the game ;\
and ye im gunna make the game play and story really ill ;p i think some people might like it actually.

 

[Proto]

Well the story is wierd. How does Maya know the scar is evil? did the monster tell her? or did she take a wild fuckn guess and assume it was. And how is the world corrupted? The first paragraph says that they're saving the world or whatever and the second one says that Maya is trying to cure herself. With a plot like that, i don't see how u can drag it into a game. Who are gonna be the villains? The monster again? And from reading this, i can expect a stock ending. About the Characters, Sasuke is just stock, i can imagine any thief to match that description, but my opinion is JUST an opinion. BTW wtfawk is a Xaos? Is it the scar Maya got? Is it the planet? Is it the country? Is it the monster? How about I make a Naruto game without ANY Naruto characters, ninjas or anything. Instead, ill put Sonic the Hedgehog in it. Make the title have something to do with the game. Im guessing that ur new to RPG Maker but that's no excuse for not being able to think of a non cliche' story. This went on too long but think outside the ass and get a good game, not some 8 bit rpg shit.

 

[leadbelly]

well she knows its a scar of corruption since it gushes thick black blood, and looks infected and is already spreading and came from a cursed beast which is somewhat like a zombie, infecting people it scratches or bites.
bahah i love your critisizim. :smoke: :box:

 

[Proto]

lol, couldn't u add that in the story in the first post? Cause we wouldnt be able to guess that if we played it. But get ideas from games, even rpg maker games. Even if u have to rip off of other games, a start is a start.

 

[leadbelly]

ya man thats what im saying !
and ya sorry, im still working on the story as i get farther making maps and etc. in the game. but the overall game story i kinda get, but i know for a fact it will be fun and diferent ;\
but ya just keep commenting, it helps makes me start thinking more and gives me ideas thanks <3

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[Proto]

K, ill help you, just PM me what u need.

 

[leadbelly]

sounds good man, :heart:

 

[Sparx-1]

I assume that the game described in this post used to be different, but I'll comment on what I found in the first post right now...

...What you've got is a pretty good idea for a game. However, if the Empire is fighting against the magic-using Naturalists I doubt that they would win with the resources you described, considering that the naturalists could use magic to break down the "brick walls" and other things. They simply wouldn't be able to win with normal weaponry from a logical standpoint.

In my opinion, a good way to offset this would be if the Empire had super-advanced technology (of course if you want to keep a consistent 'fantasy' visual style instead of sci-fi, you could always use some medieval variant of steampunk). This would even out the playing field some and make things a lot more interesting.