Shadow Quest

[Vazoh]

A project I started the other day, I think this will be a good project.  :thumb:

Story [sofar]
[A Soldier named Ganon has retired, and his son Ranon has had a dream about one of the wars that Ganon was in, he goes and tells Ganon about it, but he already knows that the Shadows have returned... So Ranon sets off to Litchon castle and fights the beast there, in hope that it would slow the Shadows down... But to no prevail...][/spoiler]


Theory of Shadow

[light and Dark are not enemys, it is the thing between them that both of them have war with. Shadow is what you get if you cross Light and Dark together. The shadow cast by a "Normal" Human is completely harmless, unless anyone dwells in it for their whole life... An evil being's shadow is much more powerful, as is an Angel's or a very positively renown person. This is most Human's belief, but many dwell on the fact that Shadow is the helpful being, and Light and Dark are evil.][/spoiler]


Screenshots


[http://i36.tinypic.com/28amagi.jpg[/img]

http://i37.tinypic.com/1z6dvk6.jpg[/img]][/spoiler]

Features

[Mr. Mo's ABS

Gangsta Shadows

No classes!(you can use bow, gun, sword, axe, all magic, ect

A Challenge in killing n00b Shadows][/spoiler]

Demo

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[So fist]

Lose the screenshots this is not a promotional forum.  Please read the rules:

http://www.rmxp.org/forums/http://dev.r ... 28#p435728

Read the first two posts.

 

[death by moogles]

Who's the protagonist?
o.o

 

[Vazoh]

Oh... Right... Can someone please move this to the appropiate forum? Because I love my Screenies

 

[seven]

-Story is clich'e
-Difficult to understand what you're saying
-Messed up php (such as it actually saying "spoiler" when there are none)
-n00b shadows? What?
-A demo isn't a feature
-What about characters? You had a features section, but no characters?
-Very little information is given
I'll stop here because there aren't any more details to critique on.

 

[Dalton]

Say, Vazoh, don't you think it is a bit early to post this? I mean you just canceled your first game the other day.

As far as I can see you are just summarizing what you have done so far, giving us very little information about the game.
This is just not what people expect from a project discussion thread. Just figure out what your game will be like, than start a thread about it. I mean I just canceled my game as well (data loss, kinda same reason you did) and I do have an idea for another game, but I will let it develop first. Right now I am getting the story straight and look for recources.

The way your thread looks it makes me think you just collected a bunch of scripts started making an RPG just like it sprang to your mind and then typed exactly that here. Maybe if your thread was a bit more organized this would look a hell load better. Learn how to use spoilers and try expressing yourself a bit clearer.

Hope this helps

~Dalton~

 

[Vazoh]

how do i use spoilers? :sad:

I did originally post it in early project discussion, and then it got moved.

 

[moog]

Please explain what Gangsta and n00b Shadows are, as I am interested.

 

[Vazoh]

delete this thread please, my project got deleted :sad:

Then let it sink down on its own? We're not your personal servants. If you want to be able to delete/lock your posts on a whim, donate and get a sponsorship. Nobody's gonna delete this just because you can't take criticis- er, I mean, because your project got deleted.
Luminier

 

[Dalton]

Oh, boy... You don't have to delete it. Just sit back and relax. People are a little bit harsh here, so you can get an idea what is wrong about your game.
And how long was your game in development before you posted this, huh?

I know how you feel. You want to go out into this forum and tell everyone that you are making a great game. But maybe you should do so, after you have done some stuff about it. Sit back work on your project some weeks (or evens months) and when you really have something to show, show it.
Look at other game threads and see how people present their games. This can give you a clue on how to present your topic, so people will take it seriously.

Projects just take time, even with RMXP. Take your time with this project and then try again. I bet it will be a hell lot better.

 

[Vazoh]

my project did get deleted.

 

[Dalton]

Just saying.... And it can't be to hard to start over... With my project it was different, cause I had been working on it for one year, when my Pc crashed...

So stop acting like we crushed your dreams and think about what we said and how you could improve. Maybe than we will start to be less harsh.

 

[Mustardy85]

-Story is clich'e
-Difficult to understand what you're saying
-Messed up php (such as it actually saying "spoiler" when there are none)
-n00b shadows? What?
-A demo isn't a feature
-What about characters? You had a features section, but no characters?
-Very little information is given
I'll stop here because there aren't any more details to critique on.

Lol, I like that super critics reply... especially when you picked out so many of the flaws in his post.

 

[Balian]

The forest map is good. The only think you could do to fix it up is add some flowers, weeds, small rocks, etc...

But like the others said, If you really love this idea, Don't flush it down the toilet. Expand on it and make it better. Make a deeper/richer Background story then add your main conflict that your hero must overcome.

btw, spoilers are easy. Example here.
http://img47.imageshack.us/img47/6929/exampleac2.png

 

[Luminier]

why are you still posting here, he said that he couldnt work on this anymore! i was just gonna let this sink to the bottom of the forum on its own, but it looks like ill have to lock it since you people cant seem to be able to read:|