Seraphim Story

[plugz]

If I can save her life .... I'll save the others too.

Background Story
In the past...
There are many rumors about the sword of king. It's called Benafon.
Before the world was created. It's belong to the God called Hellem
Serveral people want to kept it for himself and declare the others i'm the king.
Unfortunately if someone touch it, they will die shortly.

Dargor the latest Emperor knows the secret of Benafon.

About 500 years ago. There are 2 Gods. Seraphim and Hellem wish to create living things in the world.
There are two Source of elementals are the essence of life creation, fire and water.
Seraphim is belong The Dragon's Tear, the source of water elemental.
Hellem is belong the Hellfire, the source of fire elemental.

But Hellem's greed do something very bad.
He's order his minions and declare war to Seraphim for which one purpose is captured the Dragon's tear.
This is overwhlemed for seraphims. But there are few survivors from this overwhelmed war.

After war ends.. Hellem use all sources of essence life to make living things as he wishs.
But he can't make this things alone for now. Because the sources cost the power more than he can imagine.
So he uses his left power to created 6 sources of elementals from Hellfire and Dragon's tear.
It's look like crystal. and place them around the world.

Fire, Water, Wind, Earth, Light and Dark.

Unfortunately he can't place the Dark elemental in the same places with the Light elemental.
So he use his weapon Benafon to make the other dimension of this world. It's called Reverse
But If he open this dimension, he will must drop his weapon in the real world to return and place the Dark elemental in there.

But everything he does, it's take a lot of time.

Serveral Years ago.... Many living things have been created on the world by the circle of all elementals.
One day the adventurer's name Gastahl found the Benafon. and pushed it out from that place.
the Reverse dimension was closed by him and make Hellem can't get out from his dimension.
Some survivors of seraphims get out from their hideouts. and disguised themselves like normal humans.

Gastahl thinks Benafon is the God's weapon. Because he's never seen any weapon like this before.
He showed it to all people in the town and declare a lies .... he was given by the god and choose him to be the king.

5 Years ago... Gastahl was death by unknown causes.
They're realized the Sword has been cursed. some people determined to hide and kept it secret in the unknown place.

For now. There are 3 influencial groups in this world.
Imperial - Groups of Emperor Dargor and his soldier who has belong all the town in this world. He want to capture the Benafon.
Rebellion - Groups of people who don't like the Imperial's bad deeds and protect the other people who was harmed by the Imperial.
Oracle - Groups of people who have ability to see the vision in the future. this group's neutral to the other groups.

Spoiler: Features& Screenshot

Save point with particle lighting effect

Passability Mini Map

Chances to get double items (and rare items)

New Battle Result Screen

Skill Tree for each playable characters

More Combos, More Damages

Battle Bonus Gauge
If it's full, you'll get some bonuses chances to double experiences, double golds, increase chances to get items from monster
But It can break by cause critical hit and one of your heroes die in the battle.

Every Weapon in the game can upgrade and equip abilities without limits.

- And Some Screenshots -

Spoiler: Video

Seraphim Story - Tech Demo
Seraphim Story - Menu Feature
Seraphim Story - Real Title Concept
Seraphim Story - Gameplay Movie 1

Progress : |||||||||| 75% Very soon!

PS. I'm sorry if I type wrong in any words. English is not my first language and it's my first game.  :crazy:

 

[Twirly]

This looks.. impressive @_@

 

[Mundane]

Woah. This looks really great. I can't wait for the demo.

 

[Cerus]

Don't use Disgae characters for you OWN characters or any other for that matter, no matter how good your game is having them in their really makes it seem unoriginal and brings it down.

 

[Mundane]

It makes it more original than half the games that surface here using the original RTP.

 

[Skie Fortress]

Who cares? In my opinion, it's fine as long as Etna isn't ACTUALLY Etna in this game, or Flonne isn't actually Flonne, etc. Which they clearly aren't.

Though If I were to speak from an unbiased standpoint, using Disgaea artwork in your game CAN be seen as a little self-defeating if your audience has played Disgaea before. Therefore in the worst case scenario, they'll most likely always think of the original characters when they look at the art, and thus will not connect to your characters and story.

But I could care less. Like I said, it looks good, and the systems look well designed and fun. As for your story, your mistakes in working and grammar throws me off a little, but I can get the gist of your story. It's nothing mindblowing in my opinion, but I think that it's fine as is. Just get an editor for your writing and you'll be set.

Good luck on this.

 

[SorcerGamble2]

Looking at what you have done so far, it is hard to believe that this is your first game.  It's looking very good.  One thing confused me though, in your spell list, you seem to have the same spell like two or three times, each time in a different language.  Maybe they are different spells though.  Keep up the good work.

 

[plugz]

Looking at what you have done so far, it is hard to believe that this is your first game.  It's looking very good.  One thing confused me though, in your spell list, you seem to have the same spell like two or three times, each time in a different language.  Maybe they are different spells though.  Keep up the good work.

Example:
Triple Atk and Triple hit is different Ability.
when you equipped Triple Atk, you'll atack 3 times in a row.
when you equpped Tripple Hit, you'll attack 1 time but hit 3 times.

So if you equipped it altogether, you'll attack 3 x 3 = 9 hits in a row.

that's combination technique. XD

 

[Cerus]

Make your OWN characters, I never said use the ones in RTP, it's not that hard.

 

[Skie Fortress]

Rather pushy aren't we? I understand your position, but I'd say you're crossing the line from calmly offering your opinion to shoving it down the creator's throat. You might want to re-evaluate how to come across.

By the way Plugz, could you upload that tech demo to another site? The one at Saveu is moving at a snail's pace. 1kbs. -_-

 

[Cerus]

Rather pushy aren't we? I understand your position, but I'd say you're crossing the line from calmly offering your opinion to shoving it down the creator's throat. You might want to re-evaluate how to come across.

By the way Plugz, could you upload that tech demo to another site? The one at Saveu is moving at a snail's pace. 1kbs. -_-

Its' not being pushy, I was making the word more pronounced to disambiguate that I suggested using the stock RTP, it's constructive criticism. I agree the game looks really nice and probably plays well, but it seems doing all that work and not having an orignal character in my eyes would always make it a 'good' game, when it has the potential to be better. Rehashing character sets is just something that annoys me.

 

[Luminier]

newsflash: telling someone to make their own original sprites because youre way too intimate with a certain number of sprites is not constructive criticism. it's just gay.

have a lovely day

 

[Cerus]

newsflash: telling someone to make their own original sprites because youre way too intimate with a certain number of sprites is not constructive criticism. it's just gay.

have a lovely day

*facepalm* I'm not 'intimate' with anything apart from wimmenz, I didn't express that I preferred a 'certain number of sprites', it's just after the work that has been put into it, why not invest in creating your own character set, it clearly seems the resources are there as well as their capability. That is the criticism I was trying to convey in my reply.

 

[Avadan]

Well... seems like the graphics distracts from all the cliche in the story crystal representing elements, rebels againts evil empires, mysterius young girl... once prisioner of that empire

Id probably play it anyway XD
Cuz Im a graphic whore!!


Graphics!!

I got nothing against using ripped grapics(I use them all the time ¬¬U) but when you only copy/paste them in to your game... thats a bit lazy.
You already know how to copy/paste them in to your battle template... try and switch some heads or clothes, recolor them(also the facesets) its not that hard
That way you wont be using Disgagega graphics in your game but the Disgagega Style (oh yeah :shades

Cuz Disagage uses an Isometric kind of movement your character looks funny when moving right or left, try to edit the walking animation to a complete sideview(at least only the hero) it think that will make him look much more integrated to the maps

With all the characters Disgeaag has why did you keep the main characters of the game has the main characters of YOUR game(ok only Elfina and Annabelle)...why?

Battle system!!

Again.. cuz of the angle of the characters have, you should try the battle system from an isometric view (kinda like breath of fire) I think it will look much better
The zooming feature looks fake cuz the battlers arent moving with it... maybe it whould be better to disable it

 

[plugz]

Well... seems like the graphics distracts from all the cliche in the story crystal representing elements, rebels againts evil empires, mysterius young girl... once prisioner of that empire

Id probably play it anyway XD
Cuz Im a graphic whore!!


Graphics!!

I got nothing against using ripped grapics(I use them all the time ¬¬U) but when you only copy/paste them in to your game... thats a bit lazy.
You already know how to copy/paste them in to your battle template... try and switch some heads or clothes, recolor them(also the facesets) its not that hard
That way you wont be using Disgagega graphics in your game but the Disgagega Style (oh yeah :shades

Cuz Disagage uses an Isometric kind of movement your character looks funny when moving right or left, try to edit the walking animation to a complete sideview(at least only the hero) it think that will make him look much more integrated to the maps

With all the characters Disgeaag has why did you keep the main characters of the game has the main characters of YOUR game(ok only Elfina and Annabelle)...why?

Battle system!!

Again.. cuz of the angle of the characters have, you should try the battle system from an isometric view (kinda like breath of fire) I think it will look much better
The zooming feature looks fake cuz the battlers arent moving with it... maybe it whould be better to disable it

Thanks for comment.

Etna and Flonne are the same concept from my storyline.
I did this game alone, so I don't have times enough to do everything with my hand.

In my opinion, I like all of characters from Disgaea theme very much.
I think if I can make the game from my fiction. I'll use something more beautiful than RTPs.

I didn't mean I want to make my game unoriginal and bring down the official game.
I really like Disgaea Characters and whole story is very different. That's all.
And in limited times i have. how can I do something different from the others?

PS. For make many ripped graphics and change idle characters to make it moves is harder than you thought... XD

 

[wildcard01]

Where did you find your battlers?!?
I've been looking for disgaea battlers for a long time D:

 

[ambrosepro]

Hmm...Nice sprites and stuff...But,your spelling...You could still improve on it.

 

[friend]

Where did you find your battlers?!?
I've been looking for disgaea battlers for a long time D:

STOP NECROPOSTING!

 

[AzureDemon]

holy sh--!

Man this looks amazing! Im dieing to see when it comes out :3

 

[Jason]

holy sh--!

Man this looks amazing! Im dieing to see when it comes out :3

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