Selena Eternal- The Angel Did Lie

[Daxis]

Title:
Selena Eternal
The Angel Did Lie

My second game.

Spoiler: Theme

The game will try to have a bit of a dark feeling occasionally penetrated by funny things. It won't be as dark as my previous stuff for anyone that saw it, although later parts eventually curves into that, as per usual my stuff.
The theme of the game deals mostly with humanity and existence. There's going to be heavy emphisis on betrayal by lots of people, those you hate and those you love, mostly cause my character development ideas went a bit out of control. There's going to be lies and hate, and losing yourself and succumbing to those lies. Family problems, strangely enough, will be added in, although it's a bit different for one of the characters. And of course, there's romance, but it's still messed up like my other stuff. I'm trying to keep it light, but the end theme is a whole lot of betrayal, magic and existence problems, and darkness in the end. Sorry.

Spoiler: Story

Existence is divided into three levels of existence.
The Spiritual energy condenses, and thus comes life.
Life dies, and the energy is dispersed into Dormant existence.
And the loose Dormant energy is collected into Spiritual energy.
That is the cycle of all existence, called the Soul Cycle.

In the beginning, before the Nothingness subsided,
There was one God, Azreal.
Azreal the Creator.
Azreal the Redeemer.
Azreal the Broken.
The God was broken, an unimaginable schism that rocked all of creation.

Anarchrid was created as the vessel of Azreal,
Yet the land broke,
And broke into three...
And so Azreal was broken...

But a god doesn't die.
A god changes.
And intro three Azreal broke,
The god broken as the land...

The three,
Mosmiotus is the god of the Spiritual,
Sosiorde the god of the Living,
Lamos the god of the Dormant.

An existence of a being needs a medium to exist,
A being made of flesh, spirit, or energy.
Thus every god is reincarnated,
A being that is the carrier of the gods,
A person a piece of Azreal.

Flesh does die,
And enters the Soul Cycle...
The Cycle begins anew,
And shall end that way.

Spoiler: Characters and Plot

Zeno
Age: 20?
Weapon: Swords
Bios: Found 12 years ago one the shoreline near Tress, Zeno had no memory at all. He was found by Selena, a bastard girl of the same age, and from there forth they grew up together, both loving each other... until Selena "died". With nothing holding him back, Zeno goes forth from Tress, into the world, nothing tethering him to the world... besides a single goal...
He's generally stoic, although it's maybe because of Selena's death. He's fairly even headed and perceptive.

Corine
Age: 18
Weapon: Daggers/knives/katanas
Bios: An annoying thief that takes pleasure in annoying Zeno, whose stoic nature naturally amuses her. She tried to rob Zeno in a forest near Tress, and was chased by a rabid beast while fleeing from him. Saving her(and getting him money back), Zeno wanted nothing to do with her. Corine's thought processes, however: "He's strong, has money, and easily annoyed." She decides to follow, maybe for another shot at the money. However... maybe there's more to her than just a commong thief...
Funny and hyper, she absolutely loves poking of Zeno's stoicness and silence, even if Zeno's not actually annoyed. She's smiling most of the time, although that might be because she's trying to rob you...

Montague:
Age: 22
Weapon: Spears/lances
Bios: Born in a rich city in a noble family, Montague hated every moment of it. Nothing would please him more than to escape him rich life and seek the treasures of the world, and, seven years ago, he did. Things change, however, when his father seeks him back, and reveals to him the secrets that have belied his family. Taken back, Montague barely escapes with his life. However, now, he has a much different mission in store for him...
He's a bit hotheaded sometimes, but keeps his temper most of the time. He likes to analyze the situation before acting, but will act rashly the other half of the time, so it evens out. Can keep a grudge, as his acts with his family has shown.

Analie
Age: 21
Weapon: staffs/ rods/maces. Okay, let's face it: she's useless without magic.
Bios: Analie is a mage born in the hidden magical city of Krievi, which is built around a huge magical tree. However, forty years ago, the magical tree, called the Krievi tree, started withering. Since then, mages of Krievi have long started exploring the world, searching a way to restore the tree. Analie, finally certain of her abilities as a mage, finally starts off her own voyage to restore the tree.
Tries hard enough, and is able to keep things light. Being raised in a total magical society has definitely developed her politeness to everyone, and keeps up a general lady like front. Is very driven to finished her goal of restoring the Krievi tree.

Cyrus:
Age: 26
Weapon: axe
Bios: A huge body guard hired by Analie to accompany her around the world. He seems to be familiar with everyone he meets, although he's never seen them before...?
Acts nice and happy enough when his friends are around, acts serious enough when the situation calls for it, and can act invisble and silent when something awkward comes up. Definitely a person that can hold everyone together and sane.

Elena
Age: 17
Weapon: bow
Bios: A banished elf of the Fiern, the tree elves. Why she is banish? No one really knows... Yet she seems to seek someone with a vengeance, although the times she despairs and wishes to die gets in the way sometimes.
Hates humans, even more than the usual for a Fiern. Harsh and rash to everyone, but then again, everyone's a human. Tries to do her own thing every now and then("You're just a human! I can do it myself..."), and maybe will mess up. Very hot tempered. Also has times when she's highly depressed and down, maybe because of being kicked out of the Fiern village.

Soren
Age: 20
Weapon: swords(?)
Bios: He's raised in the same village as Selena, coming on the same day as her birthday. He at first treated her like a close sister, he came to love her soon enough, although it was too late by then: Zeno and Selena had already realized they liked one another. Soren settled for other girls, but always had his eyes on Selena. Zeno and Soren were okay buds, but there was always just a little bit of rivalry there. With Selena dead, nothing bound the two together... Soren would do anything to get Selena back... anything...

Gengad:
Age: 21
Weapon: swords(?)
Bios: He's a general traveler guy, with a cache of money somewhere funding his travels. He met and was saved by Selena and Zeno a couple years ago, and has visted them every now and then every since. Not much is really known about him, but he's a good guy... right?

Razus:
Age: Middle aged?
Weapon: ?
Bios: A mysterious leader of the Azrealites... Merciless and Greedy...

The Azrealites
Bios: the dark organization in the shadows that seems to be working to destroying everything... Or are they?

The Hunter Organization
Bios: An organization of hunters and mercenaries located throughout the world with a whole bunch of gathering spots. For information and mercenary jobs, go here.

The Quintet
They call themselves a Quintet, but there are only four... Who is the fifth? And where do they get their godly powers?

The Phantom Slasher
Age: ?
Weapon: Sword/knife
A serial killer in the dark with unmatched skills. No one can catch him...

Veritas
Age: ?
The Angel.

Spoiler: Chapters and a quote from each chapter

Chapter !: Seekers- "We all desire, and we all live. Once we desire no more, we will have no reason to live."

Chapter 2: Way of the Slasher- "His blade was phantom, and so that is his name..."

Chapter 3: The Azrealites- " The organization of darkness, pulling the strings of the world from the shadows, named after the original god...... they are... the Azrealites..."

Chapter 4: Parting of Souls- "Maybe we'll meet again, if fate permits."

Chapter 5: The Siege of Belivier- "Die. Make it easier for us. That's the end, anyways."

Chapter 6: The Dark Quintet- "You ask why we exist? Why do you exist?"

Chapter 7: Phantom Slasher- "There is a reason, I believe, why you have to die."

Chapter 9: The Nightmare- "Leave... me... alone... in my... delusion of hope..."

Chapter 10: Dream like a Goddess- "Foolish me."

Chapter 11: Reality's Maze- "The hidden truth is a lie."

Chapter 12: Destruction of an Angel- "Hope still exists for the fallen."

Chapter 13: Chaos Resonance- "I eat the shards of the broken dreams."

Spoiler: Status

Database- 45% complete- still got enemies, troops, common events, and misc left
Story- 70% complete- got to fill in the blanks.
Mapping- 2% complete- Let's face it, it'll take forever...
Scripts- 100%(?) complete
Eventing- 1% complete- I've barely started
Puzzles/minigames- got 1 puzzle done...

Spoiler: Features

KGC Battles
8 Directional movement and dashing
FF7 Menu and various menu edits/addons/changes
40+ addons scripts for enhanced performance
400+ total in skills, items, weapons, and armors
Dark and involving storyline with deep, memorable features
...More...

Spoiler: Screenshots. Work in Progress

Solid Mapping. One of the reasons it takes so long.

KGC Battles.

READ THE TITLE: IT'S A FREAKING WORK IN PROGRESS!!!!

 

[Daxis]

I'll post more tomorrow, like updates, comments, and some more stuff.

 

[dadevvtsvre]

Either lose the screenshots or I'll move this thread to Project Discussion. If you want it to say here then you'll have to elaborate on a lot more, like your plot, (the events that happen during the game) your game's setting, gameplay mechanics, all the concept materials.

 

[Daxis]

Well, I guess you can move it if you want. One of the reasons I posted it here was because I didn't have a demo, and chapter 1 was so far off... I'd rather have it in project discussion if I had a demo to show...

 

[dadevvtsvre]

You don't need to have a demo to have a thread in Project Discussion, not at all. I'm gonna move this to Project Discussion for now.

If you really want it to stay in Concept Development, then take away the screenshots and check out this thread for some ideas of how to make this thread more "Concept Development-worthy". (don't forget, it's perfectly fine to have a thread in both Project Discussion and Concept Development at the same time, as long as they're not essentially duplicates.)

I'll leave some comments later so I can actually be useful!

 

[oboys]

I must say that I like the prospects of your story, although my tastes are not necessarily representative of the community at large. The onset and the theme both sound intriguing but I was disappointed to find nothing concrete about the story. How about following Dadevster's advice and posting more information for concept development? I would be interested to read and comment on that. In particular, post some of the plot points and as much details as you can.

I notice that you posted quotes from various chapters. How much has been written so far?

From what you have said so far, it sounds like a good overarching idea and goal, but it either needs work and/or you're hiding a lot. What you have said of the characters so far sounds nice, bar the main hero. For concept dev, you should preferably post more background, motivation, how they think, etc. Why do they have the characteristics that they do? The main hero seems mundane. Your typical "silent hero" and hence not very amusing. What are his goals? What are his weaknesses? Why does he go through painful fighting and training or even get out of bed? I would preferably like to see that you instead go with an original personality.

The battle roles of all characters also seem typical. That's acceptable but most likely there's a more original setting that is more suitable for and gives the story more depth.

Best of luck.

 

[Daxis]

I really can't tell too much about the plot, since lots of the game relies on the huge and complex story. There are lots of things that are needed to be learnt. It's way too easy for one to predict the story if I tell you too much. Of course, you won't be able to predict all of it; no one could, but it'll take just a little bit of the fun.

The main protaganist, Zeno, is NOT a silent hero, he's not just some brooding swordsmen that travels the world for no reason and finds out some evil plot and, being the heroic brooding swordsman, thwarts it. No, Zeno's a lot more, but characterization of Zeno is a pretty huge part of the story, so I put as much as I could without revealing the story but enough to foreshadow that things are larger than that.

Pretty much all the stuff up there is things that you will learn in the first chapter/Demo, so I'm limiting a few things.

Most of the major scenes of the story are planned, the beginning and how it ends. Like all my stuff, the middle is unclear except for certain scenes. I'm actually thinking of combining a few chapters, since, although each chapter has its own solid stuff, might be just a little bit thin on gameplay.

Yes, battle roles are typical, very typical. I definitely won't deny that, as I built them this way.

Chapter 1 is due at the beginning of summer break, so roughly 6 weeks; I'm pretty sure I might fail that deadline, so it might be at the end of summer break.(Realistically, that's what might happen.)