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[Project Shadow] Concept (recruting)

[Project Shadow]



Hello all! Lonelyelf here, with my 16th released game concept. (yep, 16) The title above is not actually the name, though. It's just the project/concept title (name not yet figured out...) It's basically a moderner run-off of my concept Night is Day, just stealing the theme. Yeah, a shadow...
I can't do this whole game myself, of course. Really, I suck at everything but music, art, and writing. But I still suck at pixel art... This project is big. My biggest yet. This one I want to finish, though. And usually my projects don't take off because I'm not so well known on this forum, and people are too lazy to read all this crap. But please, take the time to read the outline, comment on the story, and drink some tea while you're at it. Enjoy!

Story:

The world of Erical is falling to destruction by it's own hands. A shadow has appeared over the land for an unknown reason. Supply is dwindling as resources dissapear. Wars are popping up everywhere, and an internal threat is killing off the world-government. With the shadow, all the people are becoming somewhat different, more aggressive, and selfish. Somehow the shadow is effecting the people mentally, or maybe magically. But there are a few humans with a strange disease that somehow protects them from the shadow's grasp - but including the effects of the disease. You are one of those few. Grown up with a immunity to the shadow, you must live within the world chaos with your disease, and it's marks.

Periods:

The Before: Before the shadow, Erical was living in a world peacefully, all the neighbors in harmony with eachother - probably perfect. But still, a life-threatening disease has hit few of the population, and appearing in more places. This disease is mental, caused by something physical and unknown, and causes the mind short painful visions ocassionally, and sometimes complete control of the brain. Black marks are left in the obvious of places.
Shade Beginnings: The shadow wasn't obvious at first, just slowly, gradually getting darker during the day, until one day it was nearly as dark as night. Plants died, water dried up, and the air was thick with smog. Days were dry and cold. Over resources, people and nations fought. A new chaos had formed, and it seemed that an evil face was smiling over the world.
The War to End All: A, *ahem* World- err... Natio- um... The Great War enrolled all of the countries of Erica. Hundreds from each country were drafted, only to die for total control. Each nation wanted the others out for resources and such. Churches were burned because of belief that they had caused the shadow. After not long at war, a great warrior rose with ancient powers and took over the whole area. Under his control, towns were burned and people prosicuted. A new religion was formed just for the new great leader. It was stated by law that all had to follow the beliefs. Here, the shadow grew stronger, not in darkness, but in existence. In the people's minds, there seemed to be another shadow.

Other periods are in the game, but are not included because of concept form. More periods will be added when compledted.

Plot: You are living on the streets, 3 years into the shadow, without anywhere to go - Until one day you meet a girl named Arisa during the burning of the churches. She is trying to stop them, following her parents' ambitions. Of course, she is on the move, so you see her shortly. When she is gone, you return to your base, and stay there for a while. A few days later, you see the girl again - and her parents have been prosicuted. She has decided to rise against the emporer - something you think is impossible. Arisa has also decided that you'll help her, which you agree to, surprisingly. Now you are on a journey, trying to set up missions against the government, and discovering things about the shadow along the way...

Characters:

maincharacterriku.jpg

Main:
Name: Rikhard / Riku
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Job: Rogue
Info: Riku is a 17 year old "diseased" living on the streets of one of the greatest cities. He was abandoned at a young age, and left to live alone. He's quiet and usually doesn't say much unless needed. But spite his personality, Riku is first to attack. He has lived on the streets for a long time, after escaping an orphanage at the age of 6. His main weapon is a shot gun sort of thing, and a dagger. He can't remember his parents, but he keeps getting visions (for his disease) of them dying, their faces invisible.
Special: His gun has bullets that can be infused with the materia to change their effect. He also is high on agility and speed.


arisasecondary.jpg

Secondary:
Name: Arisa
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Job: Mage
Info: Arisa is a political activist, orphaned, when her parents were prosicuted. Arisa is out to destroy the government's roots, and bring down the dictator of Erical. She is kind and outgoing, and loves to make friends, especially when she's in control. She's got something of a crush on Riku, and is often clumsy about it. She has no weapons, except for the materia stuff she uses for magic and summoning. She really missies her parents too. She has alot of people looking for her, and there's a plenty good amount on her head, since her parents were one of the biggest activists around. She continues to follow exactl as her parents had wished, and often times doesn't do things because she knew they wouldn't like it.
Special: When attaching materia to her gloves -or something- she is able to cast certain spells, and boost some. She also can do dual-spells with her invocations.

Character outfits are post-joining of an activist group. Nothing is permanent, and this is only concept, so the characters aren't for sure.
Riku's name is due to change.

I want to include the following scripts:
Reqium ABS by Vlad( i think) { add 8 directional movement
Final Fantasy Materia System by Atoa { and I need to change the name of "materia"
Partical Engine (author unknown)


Scripts unmade:
Overkill EXP. > Takes the number of Enemy-HP you went over when killing, divides it by 2, and adds it to your EXP
New Magic System > This magic system takes MP for magic, and uses them parallel-processed, and requires materia for certain spells (pretty much the ancient spells.) Also, certain spells take away from your health. Lastly, the Partical Engine can be used with it. - ooh, maybe dual spells with summoned beasts.
Mini-Map in menu > might be useful
Equipment quick-view > show the currently equipped weapons and materia, ect. right on the first page of the menu

Yeah, I have no money to spare, and no resources to give. I don't think many people would do these jobs for no pay and no reward, but if you will, well.... GOD THANK YOU!! I can also work with ANY schedule. This project can take years if you need it. Just tell me.

Pixel Artist
- Somethings may have to be remade. And E tileset is needed, and some editing for a more modern look would also be great. Whatever style you have, it's okay - as long as it doesn't suck. This is for VX, so know your layouts!
Scripters - lots of them too. There are several scripts that are important to the game that do not exist. Not too big, mainly status related, and patching together other scripts, maybe a cms or two. It's in RGSS2, so... yeah.
Music design - I'm good at this, but I need a little help for some songs. Part time, I just PM you with requests every so often

If you want to join, PM me, or post in this topic. I'll get back to you as soon as I can.

That's about it. I really want to finish this one, and I need a lot of help. Please post your comments!

-Riku
 
It sounds sort of unoriginal, the whole shadow based thing. With some minor edits though, you could fix this.

-I like the art design, it good.

^_^
 
Thanks! The shadow thing... yeah it sort of does, but in all of what I know, It's never been used in that way. It's pretty much just dark, no clouds, just dark.

-Riku

Gotta get off now, I'll be here tomorrow... POST! XD
 

mawk

Sponsor

sounding really vanilla. a lone wolf main character? a spunky, hyper female lead? (both of them relatively androgynous victims of high urban fashion?) you're brewing 90% of all anime casts. one or two words is a good place to start when you're determining a character's personality, but it's a very bad place to stop. remember to dance around the mold a little, at least to the point where people won't be able to guess your character's every action.

p.s. how does Rikhard (rickard/rick-hard?) contract to Riku (re-koo?) in what I'm assuming is supposed to be a western european society? Rik or Rikky, maybe, but english nomenclature isn't in the habit of tacking Us onto the end of things. that's straight Asian syllabification.
 
oh, hey, look! I'm on after I said I'd be off!

Umm, yeah. I know my character descriptions sucked. The clothing is the stuff they wear for the activist club-thing. IDK. It's basically the lowest stage a concept can get, right after the name (which I don't even have...) I'll edit that.

-Riku

P.s. Don't ask how it comes out of Rikhard.. It's my name, so I looked it up one day and it said it came from Richard and Rikhard. But how do you get bill out of william?
IDK
 
BUMP!

More than 72 hours now, I thought I'd bump the topic. I updated a little bit of stuff, in the scripts.
I am continuing to write down ideas for the game.
Feed back of all kinds are welcome!

Spots still open too.

-Riku
 
You seem a bit obnoxious, which I don't like, but that doesn't matter just wanted to say it.

The art's nice but that's about it, does not seem to fit in with your story at all though, if they're three years into what is sounding like the plague why aren't they filthy and starved? They may be immune to the mind control but that doesn't stop their food dying and the rest of it.

I read everything but characters cos I saw a spelling mistake and had to point out that you do not look like a good writer or like you have a polished, going-somewhere project if you have spelling mistakes in your post and also conversational talk. If you wanna tell us about your project do it but leave out all the umms as you sit at your keyboard thinking what to type next. The fact there are spelling mistakes mean that you didn't even use an in browser dictionary let alone openoffice or mso so you can't have had this planned long.

Now about the actual story it's more a narrative than an outline, you should detail events more clearly and clue us in on what's going to happen throughout the game. You've told us a little but we don't really get anything meaningful enough to keep interest in it or to want to work with you on it either.

Other periods are in the game, but will not be included for spoiler reasons.

No.

Don't tell us what you're not gonna tell us, and you should just tell us anyways, by the time this is released which is at least upwards of 6 months we'll have forgotten any spoilers, hell posting spoilers is even encouraged in Concept Dev. as we get a clearer view of what you're planning so we don't instead think you have holes in your story.

Please rewrite character bios, we aren't having a message on an IM you're trying to interest us in your game, please keep the information formal and clear. Your main male character is a walking, non-talking cliché, kheaven mentioned it before but just in case you thought you were doing something new I'm mentioning it again, it reeks of anime, the Riku reeks of KH though, not saying it'll bring the game down but it shows a lack of creativity and can also mean his name doesn't have any deeper meaning in the story.

Main female sounds like one of those annoying girls, never true to her feelings, always violent and so obviously in love with the main character. You can see all the rom-com cutscenes happening already.

Lastly, I doubt you'll find anyone willing to make an entire game's worth of graphics for you for free. Same goes for scripts unless you just want them to alter other scripts slightly or something like that but trying to get a whole games worth of effort for free is just not gonna happen, if they have the time and resources they could do it for money or work on their own project.

Thank you and goodnight.
 
Yea, I am a little, aren't I. Just this always happens. 5 posts nd my topic dissapears.

As I said, this is still a little bit Concept, and the exact dates are all very questionable, and probably won't even be there in the future.

Riku, is not at all anything from KH. It was days after I submitted this topic that a friend told me of this. The name is mostly likely to change, as well as a thousand other things too. The character outlines... I'll fix em. I admit they should be a little more straight and at the point. The girl, on the other hand, is somewhat like whats-her-name from TOS: DotNW... I probably should rethink a few of the ideas underneith, not make her so much obnoxious.

With the recruition, I have found a few good ways around 'everything'... I'll just need some tileset edits, a tileset for E, and a few sprites. I'll edit that when I can. But, like I said, I have no money to spare - okay, no money. And I don't know what resources people would want from me. I can do some good music, and some good concept art, but I can't color, script, or sprite. I also doubt many people would join - but I already do have a spriter and an extra eventer.

Keep up the good criticism! I'll update when I can.

-Riku
 

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