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Please help me find out errors :)

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Hi everyone, I'm trying to make a poster @_@
but I drew this when I Wasn't in the situation to draw :noes:

Before I go mainstream I want some critiques please like what to add here what to remove there and some tips :excited:

So here are the problems:

Legs,
skirts,
head & eye positioning

anything else?

Thank you :)
 

Lei

Member

id suggest turning the middle girls left foot (Its the one in the right in the picture) to the left of the picture.... at the moment its at an impossible bend.

Id also vary the hair styles a little more...

The picture is amazing though... just try to break away from the sephiroth styled center parting
 
Sephiroth Parting?
umm actually there's more to this poster I just need to confirm how to fix the heroes,

the hairstyle like that because

1.) Two of them are super Identical twins
2.) One is the elder sister :)
3.) And yeah, I already figured out the foot :P
 

Lei

Member

oh okay both problems identified... one of them wasnt a problem ans was intentional after all....

Scanning for errors.

RMXP\:Ynlraey\32127\Poster_Draft_Please_Critique_by_Enexodia.jpg

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Error: Skirt has weird bump above strangely twisted leg of center character.
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Error: Skirt (or are the shorts? Unidentifyable) on the main character have no thingies to hold the belt in place.
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Error: As you stated at the beginning, but both center characters feet need sorting....
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Error?: Not sure left characters ear would be showing....
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Scan complete!
 

Hmm ear, huh (adds to list)

edit: the belt's purpose was for the gun but since this is sort of do this later thing I didn't put too much detail to it so I won't have to buy a new artline drawing.
 
As you've already pointed out, the legs. The right most characters upper half of the leg is too short. It may seem odd, but the lower half of the legs is actually a bit smaller than the upper half. Other than it's pretty good.:cheery01:

I need to post up some of my art ':|
 

Kraft

Sponsor

Hmm... posters need some sort of balance in them. At the moment, the picture is very lopsided. (to the left)

What I mean, is that the whole picture isnt really centered, or equal. One thing that I would suggest to improve on that would be to either place something in the lower-right of the picture, under the girl on the right, or to take one of the rightmost sisters legs (which are bent towards the left-bottom) and straighten it to point lower right. Just one of them, it doesnt need both of them.

I think that would help, although without actually seeing it, I coundnt tell you if it definetly would... Or maybe just rotate the picture counter-clockwise a little...

I dont know... whatever ^_^

My useless input ^_^
 
Ynlraey;317281 said:
1.) Two of them are super Identical twins

*ahem

all anime characters are super identical twins.
>__>

anywho, i think it looks decent, aside from the obvious errors.. and i thought the skirt was shorts, tbh.
 
Do the other two really look like girls?
O.o;

Oh yeah, the reason it isn't center was I removed some of the borders for image compression Kraft, I'm not eager of uploading really biggy files :p

I did make the skirt like that for a while since I don't want to reveal a panty shot just yet (heck I'm trying to avoid it) so this'll face a huge revamp ^^;

As for anime being Identical, I don't know about that :/
 

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