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This is the first chapter of a story i been writing
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Chapter 1 Part 1
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Apris
Special Forces
Squad A
Gardu - Captain
Age - 42
Gardu was formerly the Lieutenant of Leon the hero of the Omega war
He is the only surviving member of the Apris Army who participated in the final battle of the war. He has a daughter but he lost his wife during the war. Gardu found Kyros while on a mission. He took him under his wing and raised him. He was promoted to Squad A’s Captain after the War.
Pilaf - Lieutenant
Age - 24
Pilaf has been Squad A’s Lieutenant since the age of 16. He is known as a genius when it comes to combat. Allow he has an attitude when it comes to respect for his captain he seems loyal to Apris. An elite group known as the Kutsuu has asked Pilaf to join them several times.
Akane - 3rd Seat
Age - 21
Considered to be the best out of the new graduates. He gets annoyed when Kyros gets respected just for being the son of Gardu when he clearly thinks he is the better soldier. He and Kyros are bitter rivals always trying to outdo one another.
Kyros - 4th Seat
Age - 18
Kyros was orphaned during the war and then adopted by Gardu his skills resemble that of his father. Although people expect great things from him he tries his best to live up to his fathers standards. Before graduation Kyros and Akane had another fight realising that Akane has become to strong he left Apris to train on his own.
Mia - 5th Seat
Age - 17
Mia is the Granddaughter of Leon. She shares the spotlight in the village with Kyros and for this she understands him well the two was close in the past but never seem to talk much now. She has some unique healing abilities passed down in her family
Squad B
Baku - Captain
Age - 26
He has only been a captain for a few months he was briefly in a team with Pilaf and Bravia. Before they became Lieutenants.
Inari - Lieutenant
Age - 24
His talents in Taijutsu earns him the Lieutenant rank he is considered to have the best Hand to Hand skills in the Special Forces.
Jetta - 3rd Seat
Age - 19
She comes from a well respecting family which use rare water element techniques. She’s short tempered with her comrades especial Zaak who seems to have a crush on her. She is considered to be a great female soldier who can hold her own against the best
Zaak - 4th Seat
Age - 18
The Younger Brother of Akane Zaak has been friends with Kyros since they were kids. He served alongside his brother and Kyros in the Apris Army
for 3 years. His skills in hand to hand combat rival Inari’s
Ruby - 5th Seat
Age - 17
A shy natured girl she aids her team by her ability to summon various creatures mostly used for spying and transport
Squad C
Shina - Captain
Age - 30
She is a strategist and the only female captain in the special forces
Bravia - Lieutenant
Age - 23
The daughter of Captain Gardu. She is very overprotected of Kyros appearing as his only mother figure. She has great accuracy with long range weapons able to hit any targets.
Obura - 3rd Seat
Age - 20
Never knowing his parents he grew up in on the streets. He became part of a criminal organization at the age of 14 where he went through some intense resistance training gaining unrealistic strength. He join the Apris army at 16
Nebra - 4th Seat
Age - 19
She was briefly apart of the Apris Seven the royal family secret assassin organization. After quitting she graduated into the special forces. She has great ability in stealth and assassination.
Dan - 5th Seat
Age - 18
Confident young man who seems himself as a ladies man. He served on the same team as Obura in the Apris Army in which they became close and consider each other as brothers.
Special Forces
Squad A
Gardu - Captain
Age - 42
Gardu was formerly the Lieutenant of Leon the hero of the Omega war
He is the only surviving member of the Apris Army who participated in the final battle of the war. He has a daughter but he lost his wife during the war. Gardu found Kyros while on a mission. He took him under his wing and raised him. He was promoted to Squad A’s Captain after the War.
Pilaf - Lieutenant
Age - 24
Pilaf has been Squad A’s Lieutenant since the age of 16. He is known as a genius when it comes to combat. Allow he has an attitude when it comes to respect for his captain he seems loyal to Apris. An elite group known as the Kutsuu has asked Pilaf to join them several times.
Akane - 3rd Seat
Age - 21
Considered to be the best out of the new graduates. He gets annoyed when Kyros gets respected just for being the son of Gardu when he clearly thinks he is the better soldier. He and Kyros are bitter rivals always trying to outdo one another.
Kyros - 4th Seat
Age - 18
Kyros was orphaned during the war and then adopted by Gardu his skills resemble that of his father. Although people expect great things from him he tries his best to live up to his fathers standards. Before graduation Kyros and Akane had another fight realising that Akane has become to strong he left Apris to train on his own.
Mia - 5th Seat
Age - 17
Mia is the Granddaughter of Leon. She shares the spotlight in the village with Kyros and for this she understands him well the two was close in the past but never seem to talk much now. She has some unique healing abilities passed down in her family
Squad B
Baku - Captain
Age - 26
He has only been a captain for a few months he was briefly in a team with Pilaf and Bravia. Before they became Lieutenants.
Inari - Lieutenant
Age - 24
His talents in Taijutsu earns him the Lieutenant rank he is considered to have the best Hand to Hand skills in the Special Forces.
Jetta - 3rd Seat
Age - 19
She comes from a well respecting family which use rare water element techniques. She’s short tempered with her comrades especial Zaak who seems to have a crush on her. She is considered to be a great female soldier who can hold her own against the best
Zaak - 4th Seat
Age - 18
The Younger Brother of Akane Zaak has been friends with Kyros since they were kids. He served alongside his brother and Kyros in the Apris Army
for 3 years. His skills in hand to hand combat rival Inari’s
Ruby - 5th Seat
Age - 17
A shy natured girl she aids her team by her ability to summon various creatures mostly used for spying and transport
Squad C
Shina - Captain
Age - 30
She is a strategist and the only female captain in the special forces
Bravia - Lieutenant
Age - 23
The daughter of Captain Gardu. She is very overprotected of Kyros appearing as his only mother figure. She has great accuracy with long range weapons able to hit any targets.
Obura - 3rd Seat
Age - 20
Never knowing his parents he grew up in on the streets. He became part of a criminal organization at the age of 14 where he went through some intense resistance training gaining unrealistic strength. He join the Apris army at 16
Nebra - 4th Seat
Age - 19
She was briefly apart of the Apris Seven the royal family secret assassin organization. After quitting she graduated into the special forces. She has great ability in stealth and assassination.
Dan - 5th Seat
Age - 18
Confident young man who seems himself as a ladies man. He served on the same team as Obura in the Apris Army in which they became close and consider each other as brothers.
Chapter 1 - Graduation
EXT. MOUNTAIN - DAY
A young soldier named ZAAK is making his way up a mountain just
outside of his hometown where a festival is being held in
celebration of the 15th anniversary of the end of the last
great war
ZAAK
(Sighing)
Listen to that. While everyones
down there enjoying the festival
I'm stuck up here looking for him.
He's such a pain in the ass
FLASHBACK TO:
INT. GARDU'S OFFICE - MORNING
ZAAK enters the office of CAPTAIN GARDU
ZAAK
CAPTAIN GARDU sir you wanted to see
me
GARDU
Yes of course ZAAK come in. I
wanted to ask you about my son's
disappearance.
ZAAK
KYROS?
GARDU
Today marks the 15th anniversary of
the end of the war. Its tradition
for everyone who is competing in
the graduation exam tomorrow to attend
tonights ceremony. KYROS being the
son of a Captain it would look very bad
for me if he didn't show. You being
his friend I thought you might know
of his whereabouts.
ZAAK
I haven't seen him since he left to
over 2 weeks ago. I heard he was
training east of here in the
mountain area.
ZAAK (V.O.)
Knowing KYROS he's probably forgot
hat day it is.
GARDU
ZAAK i want you to bring KYROS back
here before tonight.
ZAAK (V.O.)
I know he was gonna ask me that.
END FLASHBACK
EXT. MOUNTAIN - DAY
As ZAAK continues up the mountain path looking for his
friend he comes across a ragged tent and a recently put out
fire. He approaches the tent just then he hears footstep
coming from behind him. He turns around to see a cloaked
figure.
Before ZAAK has a chance the cloaked person launches towards him
drawing his sword he attacks ZAAK.
ZAAK defends blow after blow
ZAAK
(Smiling)
You've improved...KYROS
KYROS
How did you know
ZAAK
Did you forget we grew up together,
I know your fighting style inside
out. But it look like you've picked
up a few new tricks
KYROS takes off his cloak
KYROS
Well i have been training up here
non stop. Why are you here anyway?
ZAAK
I could ask you the same question.
Why did you come up here.
KYROS goes silent and goes to walk away
ZAAK
Did you leave cause what happened
in training with AKANE.
KYROS stops
ZAAK
Look sometimes...my brother...He
thinks he's above everyone else.
KYROS
No he was right.
FLASHBACK TO:
EXT. TRAINING FIELD - SUNNY DAY
All the candidates are gathered for training exercise.
During this training exercise CAPTAIN SHINA overseas a
sparring match between ZAAK's older brother AKANE and KYROS.
Wanting to prove that he is the strongest of the two AKANE
humiliates KYROS in battle.
AKANE
Your pathetic.
KYROS
(Angry)
What did you say.
AKANE
Why you've been slacking off and
living under your father's shadow.
I've been pushing myself to the
limit. And now compare to me your
just a joke.
KYROS
WHAT!
CAPTAIN SHINA steps in
SHINA
That's enough AKANE this is only a
training match.
AKANE
Fine
AKANE walks away
SHINA
KYROS are you injured?
KYROS
I'm fine.
END FLASHBACK
EXT. MOUNTAIN - DAY
KYROS
AKANE...he was right about me I was
slacking off. They were all saying
how the son of CAPTAIN GARDU will
pass the exam with ease, maybe I let
it goto my head. I was
overconfident in my abilities. But
now i ready for the graduation
exams.
ZAAK
Oh yeah about the exam, it begins
tomorrow.
KYROS
Yes after training up here so hard
I..What do you mean tomorrow, Then
what are you doing here
ZAAK
I came to get, YOU!
KYROS
(Frantic)
Then what are we waiting here for
we need to go back.
KYROS panics and rushes back towards the village.
ZAAK
He's definitely gotten stronger but
he acts the same.
EXT. APRIS VILAGE - NIGHT
KYROS and ZAAK arrive back at their hometown of Apris. All the
villagers are enjoying the festival and as night falls
everyone gathers around the memorial statue for the ceremony
to begin
GARDU
Today we pay respect to all those
who died in the name of peace and
on this day 15 years ago our hero
LEON lead our nation to victory and brought
peace to our nation. He was a great
soldier and a dear friend. Now MIA granddaughter
of our hero will light the torch on
this statue as a sign of Apris
bright future.
The torch is lit
MIA
Let the celebration begin.
With the ceremony over everyone walks away to join the festival
but MIA still stands looking proudly at her Grandfather's
memorial. KYROS approaches MIA
MIA
So you came back then
KYROS
We'll i couldn't miss this. You
must be very proud of
MIA
Yeah although i don't remember him
much. I feel honored to have had a
grandfather like him. Every time
things get rough I use think about him
and he inspire me to push myself,
to become just like him.
KYROS
Don't you feel like your just
living in his shadow.
MIA
How do you mean?
KYROS
I mean people expect you to be like
him and they dont relay see you for
who you are.
MIA
Of course.
KYROS
Doesn't that bother you.
MIA
Sometimes but its the things you do
that determines how people see you.
What have I done to make people
think otherwise.
PAN LEFT:
AKANE notices KYROS as he is about to approach him he is called
by his brother ZAAK
ZAAK (O.S)
Where do you think you'r going?
ZAAK walks on to screen
AKANE
It looks like the weakling has
returned.
ZAAK
Brother what is your problem with
KYROS your always jumping on him
every chance you get.
AKANE
Everyone favors him just cause his
the son of a captain. Tomorrow is
my chance to prove I'm better than
him.
ZAAK
You know he feels the same way. You
to are more alike than you know.
AKANE
ZAAK.
ZAAK
What.
AKANE
Tomorrow the exam will be tough I
know you'll do well but i want you
to be careful.
ZAAK
(Sarcastic)
Are you worried about your little
brother.
AKANE
I'd hate to break mothers dying
wish.
AKANE walks off screen
PAN RIGHT:
CAPTAIN GARDU walks over to KYROS and MIA
GARDU
I see you made it back then.
KYROS
I suppose I'm gonna get a lecture
now huh. Look I'm sorry
GARDU
Well I'm just glad to see you
alive. Are you ready for tomorrow I
hope you wasn't wasting your time.
KYROS
Im ready
GARDU
I hope you are cause it's not going
to be a easy. Dont stay out to late
your going to need your rest for
tomorrow. Remember to head towards the
cave west of here. Thats where the
exam will take place. Well I wont
see you tomorrow so good luck to
you both.
MIA
He's right i need to prepare. I see
you tomorrow KYROS.
INT. SIX CAVE - MORNING
KYROS wakes up and begin to head towards the cave to the
west of the village. Where CAPTAIN SHINA has gathered all
eighteen candidates to start the exam.
SHINA
Now that everyone has arrives we
can begin. You all the ability to
be apart of the Apris Special
Forces if that was not true you all none
of you would be here. However today
is the day you must prove your
worthy to become an Apris Elite
Soldier.
KYROS (V.O)
This is it.
MIA (V.O)
Grandfather i wont let you down.
SHINA
I will now explain how the test
will work. There are six entrances
to this cave inside there are three
spheres with the Apris crest on them.
Your goal is to locate the crest
and bring them to the exit.
DAN
Sounds easy is this really the test
you have to pas to become part of
the special force team.
SHINA
Well your quick to answer as usual.
I forgot to mention that inside
this cave is like a maze Im sure
while your trying to figure out its
secrets the creatures that live in
there will keep you occupied.
RUBY
(Nervous)
Creatures.
JETTA
Ha there's nothing to worry about.
SHINA
If somehow you manage to get past
them there are highly trained
soldiers from the Apris Army
guarding each sphere.
NEBRA
If we have to fight soldiers does
that mean there are rules for
battle.
SHINA
No, as soon as the test starts you
can do what ever it takes to get
your hands on one of the sphere's.
OBURA
So if there's only three sphere's
does that mean only three of us
will pass.
SHINA
You will all be divided into six
teams of three.
KYROS (V.O)
Teams i hope I'm not with AKANE.
SHINA
When I call your name please step
Forward. Team A NEBRA, AKANE, RUBY
NEBRA (V.O.)
I guess I lucked out with AKANE on
my team
AKANE (V.O.)
Stuck with two girls
RUBY (V.O.)
I wont let anyone down
SHINA
Team B EDWARD, ROY, SAKURA. Team C
will be OBURA, KYROS and MIA.
KYROS (V.O)
I've worked with MIA before but
OBURA I don't know a thing about
him.
OBURA (V.O.)
This could be interesting.
MIA (V.O)
Grandfather watch over me.
SHINA
Team D SID, YUMI and KEN. Team E
JETTA, DAN and ZAAK.
JETTA (V.O.)
Why do I have to be with ZAAK he's
so lazy.
DAN (V.O.)
Why did AKANE get two cute girls.
ZAAK (V.O.)
This is my chance to show JETTA
what i can do.
SHINA
The three of you left will be Team
F. Now each team will go to one of
the six entrances of the cave.
Remember for you to pass this
examination you have to work as a
team. I'll be waiting at the exit
when i give you the signal its time
to start good luck to you all.
EXT. MOUNTAIN - DAY
A young soldier named ZAAK is making his way up a mountain just
outside of his hometown where a festival is being held in
celebration of the 15th anniversary of the end of the last
great war
ZAAK
(Sighing)
Listen to that. While everyones
down there enjoying the festival
I'm stuck up here looking for him.
He's such a pain in the ass
FLASHBACK TO:
INT. GARDU'S OFFICE - MORNING
ZAAK enters the office of CAPTAIN GARDU
ZAAK
CAPTAIN GARDU sir you wanted to see
me
GARDU
Yes of course ZAAK come in. I
wanted to ask you about my son's
disappearance.
ZAAK
KYROS?
GARDU
Today marks the 15th anniversary of
the end of the war. Its tradition
for everyone who is competing in
the graduation exam tomorrow to attend
tonights ceremony. KYROS being the
son of a Captain it would look very bad
for me if he didn't show. You being
his friend I thought you might know
of his whereabouts.
ZAAK
I haven't seen him since he left to
over 2 weeks ago. I heard he was
training east of here in the
mountain area.
ZAAK (V.O.)
Knowing KYROS he's probably forgot
hat day it is.
GARDU
ZAAK i want you to bring KYROS back
here before tonight.
ZAAK (V.O.)
I know he was gonna ask me that.
END FLASHBACK
EXT. MOUNTAIN - DAY
As ZAAK continues up the mountain path looking for his
friend he comes across a ragged tent and a recently put out
fire. He approaches the tent just then he hears footstep
coming from behind him. He turns around to see a cloaked
figure.
Before ZAAK has a chance the cloaked person launches towards him
drawing his sword he attacks ZAAK.
ZAAK defends blow after blow
ZAAK
(Smiling)
You've improved...KYROS
KYROS
How did you know
ZAAK
Did you forget we grew up together,
I know your fighting style inside
out. But it look like you've picked
up a few new tricks
KYROS takes off his cloak
KYROS
Well i have been training up here
non stop. Why are you here anyway?
ZAAK
I could ask you the same question.
Why did you come up here.
KYROS goes silent and goes to walk away
ZAAK
Did you leave cause what happened
in training with AKANE.
KYROS stops
ZAAK
Look sometimes...my brother...He
thinks he's above everyone else.
KYROS
No he was right.
FLASHBACK TO:
EXT. TRAINING FIELD - SUNNY DAY
All the candidates are gathered for training exercise.
During this training exercise CAPTAIN SHINA overseas a
sparring match between ZAAK's older brother AKANE and KYROS.
Wanting to prove that he is the strongest of the two AKANE
humiliates KYROS in battle.
AKANE
Your pathetic.
KYROS
(Angry)
What did you say.
AKANE
Why you've been slacking off and
living under your father's shadow.
I've been pushing myself to the
limit. And now compare to me your
just a joke.
KYROS
WHAT!
CAPTAIN SHINA steps in
SHINA
That's enough AKANE this is only a
training match.
AKANE
Fine
AKANE walks away
SHINA
KYROS are you injured?
KYROS
I'm fine.
END FLASHBACK
EXT. MOUNTAIN - DAY
KYROS
AKANE...he was right about me I was
slacking off. They were all saying
how the son of CAPTAIN GARDU will
pass the exam with ease, maybe I let
it goto my head. I was
overconfident in my abilities. But
now i ready for the graduation
exams.
ZAAK
Oh yeah about the exam, it begins
tomorrow.
KYROS
Yes after training up here so hard
I..What do you mean tomorrow, Then
what are you doing here
ZAAK
I came to get, YOU!
KYROS
(Frantic)
Then what are we waiting here for
we need to go back.
KYROS panics and rushes back towards the village.
ZAAK
He's definitely gotten stronger but
he acts the same.
EXT. APRIS VILAGE - NIGHT
KYROS and ZAAK arrive back at their hometown of Apris. All the
villagers are enjoying the festival and as night falls
everyone gathers around the memorial statue for the ceremony
to begin
GARDU
Today we pay respect to all those
who died in the name of peace and
on this day 15 years ago our hero
LEON lead our nation to victory and brought
peace to our nation. He was a great
soldier and a dear friend. Now MIA granddaughter
of our hero will light the torch on
this statue as a sign of Apris
bright future.
The torch is lit
MIA
Let the celebration begin.
With the ceremony over everyone walks away to join the festival
but MIA still stands looking proudly at her Grandfather's
memorial. KYROS approaches MIA
MIA
So you came back then
KYROS
We'll i couldn't miss this. You
must be very proud of
MIA
Yeah although i don't remember him
much. I feel honored to have had a
grandfather like him. Every time
things get rough I use think about him
and he inspire me to push myself,
to become just like him.
KYROS
Don't you feel like your just
living in his shadow.
MIA
How do you mean?
KYROS
I mean people expect you to be like
him and they dont relay see you for
who you are.
MIA
Of course.
KYROS
Doesn't that bother you.
MIA
Sometimes but its the things you do
that determines how people see you.
What have I done to make people
think otherwise.
PAN LEFT:
AKANE notices KYROS as he is about to approach him he is called
by his brother ZAAK
ZAAK (O.S)
Where do you think you'r going?
ZAAK walks on to screen
AKANE
It looks like the weakling has
returned.
ZAAK
Brother what is your problem with
KYROS your always jumping on him
every chance you get.
AKANE
Everyone favors him just cause his
the son of a captain. Tomorrow is
my chance to prove I'm better than
him.
ZAAK
You know he feels the same way. You
to are more alike than you know.
AKANE
ZAAK.
ZAAK
What.
AKANE
Tomorrow the exam will be tough I
know you'll do well but i want you
to be careful.
ZAAK
(Sarcastic)
Are you worried about your little
brother.
AKANE
I'd hate to break mothers dying
wish.
AKANE walks off screen
PAN RIGHT:
CAPTAIN GARDU walks over to KYROS and MIA
GARDU
I see you made it back then.
KYROS
I suppose I'm gonna get a lecture
now huh. Look I'm sorry
GARDU
Well I'm just glad to see you
alive. Are you ready for tomorrow I
hope you wasn't wasting your time.
KYROS
Im ready
GARDU
I hope you are cause it's not going
to be a easy. Dont stay out to late
your going to need your rest for
tomorrow. Remember to head towards the
cave west of here. Thats where the
exam will take place. Well I wont
see you tomorrow so good luck to
you both.
MIA
He's right i need to prepare. I see
you tomorrow KYROS.
INT. SIX CAVE - MORNING
KYROS wakes up and begin to head towards the cave to the
west of the village. Where CAPTAIN SHINA has gathered all
eighteen candidates to start the exam.
SHINA
Now that everyone has arrives we
can begin. You all the ability to
be apart of the Apris Special
Forces if that was not true you all none
of you would be here. However today
is the day you must prove your
worthy to become an Apris Elite
Soldier.
KYROS (V.O)
This is it.
MIA (V.O)
Grandfather i wont let you down.
SHINA
I will now explain how the test
will work. There are six entrances
to this cave inside there are three
spheres with the Apris crest on them.
Your goal is to locate the crest
and bring them to the exit.
DAN
Sounds easy is this really the test
you have to pas to become part of
the special force team.
SHINA
Well your quick to answer as usual.
I forgot to mention that inside
this cave is like a maze Im sure
while your trying to figure out its
secrets the creatures that live in
there will keep you occupied.
RUBY
(Nervous)
Creatures.
JETTA
Ha there's nothing to worry about.
SHINA
If somehow you manage to get past
them there are highly trained
soldiers from the Apris Army
guarding each sphere.
NEBRA
If we have to fight soldiers does
that mean there are rules for
battle.
SHINA
No, as soon as the test starts you
can do what ever it takes to get
your hands on one of the sphere's.
OBURA
So if there's only three sphere's
does that mean only three of us
will pass.
SHINA
You will all be divided into six
teams of three.
KYROS (V.O)
Teams i hope I'm not with AKANE.
SHINA
When I call your name please step
Forward. Team A NEBRA, AKANE, RUBY
NEBRA (V.O.)
I guess I lucked out with AKANE on
my team
AKANE (V.O.)
Stuck with two girls
RUBY (V.O.)
I wont let anyone down
SHINA
Team B EDWARD, ROY, SAKURA. Team C
will be OBURA, KYROS and MIA.
KYROS (V.O)
I've worked with MIA before but
OBURA I don't know a thing about
him.
OBURA (V.O.)
This could be interesting.
MIA (V.O)
Grandfather watch over me.
SHINA
Team D SID, YUMI and KEN. Team E
JETTA, DAN and ZAAK.
JETTA (V.O.)
Why do I have to be with ZAAK he's
so lazy.
DAN (V.O.)
Why did AKANE get two cute girls.
ZAAK (V.O.)
This is my chance to show JETTA
what i can do.
SHINA
The three of you left will be Team
F. Now each team will go to one of
the six entrances of the cave.
Remember for you to pass this
examination you have to work as a
team. I'll be waiting at the exit
when i give you the signal its time
to start good luck to you all.