My first sprite attempt

[Xathia Vastar]

This is my first attempt at making a RMXP character from scratch. I am trying to do a CharaSet template for me to use in my game. Hopefully, if the template is good enough, I'll start adding clothes.

http://img211.imageshack.us/img211/2084/spritemf0.png[/IMG]

Please C&C as harsh as possible. I want to make sure I have the pixel shading and everything else correct. I tried my best to avoid 'pillow-shading,' so I hope I did it right. Thank you in advance!

 

[Lackluster]

The midsection is tineh! xD

 

[Xathia Vastar]

The midsection is tineh! xD

oo really? o.O hmm.. so how many more pixels down do you think I should make it?

 

[bojjenclon]

the legs just look wierd...

 

[Lackluster]

Dunno. Maybe make it take up some leg space? D:

 

[bojjenclon]

the legs look he\she is about to do a periot or whatever its called.

 

[Xathia Vastar]

http://img521.imageshack.us/img521/7258/spritezm8.png[/img]


Thank you so much for the C&C! I've done some changes to it. Moved the body down by 2 pixels and fixed some shading. Is this any better?

 

[bojjenclon]

yeah it better. but make the bottom the feet stick out more. do you have straight feet like that?

 

[Axerax]

Currently, I suggest making the body into a longer form, about 3-4 more pixels down, curve the legs, bring the feet outward some, and make a gap in between the legs, starting about 2 pixels from the groin. Our legs don't stand together like that naturally... think proportions.

 

[bojjenclon]

yeah look at yourself in the mirror, and draw what you see with out clothes, hair, and with pixels. XD

 

[Venetia]

Looks a little like a doll.

Also looks like the RTP eyes, arms, and legs, elongated.

The eyes feel like they're too far down and the torso still feels short. Also don't shade the legs so they appear like they're under a Buddha belly (the Chinese luck Buddha, not the Siddharta Gautma Buddha, which was skinny) ... After all, it's not a 'fat' template, so far as I can tell.

But if you want to make it look like a doll, lighten the palette to resemble a china doll and darken the eyes. Then it'd look a lot like a good living doll template.

 

[Xathia Vastar]

Thanks you guys for all the feedback! I really appreciate it! I'm really learning a lot from all these critiques. Here is my updated one. The sprite itself for now is non-generic. I'm just doign this as I go along. :P How does it look now?

Please be as harsh as you can with it (as long as it's constructive criticism)

http://img206.imageshack.us/img206/2039/spritemu1.png[/img]

 

[ZephyrSkye]

Better, but now the arms look like clubs compared to the how small the legs are. I would make the legs a wee bit larger and shrink the arms a bit.

 

[Xathia Vastar]

http://img219.imageshack.us/img219/4273/spritegc1.png[/img]

How is it now? ^^; I increased/decreased it by 1 pixel.
Also, am I coloring/shading the sprite right?

 

[Lackluster]

Change the legs back >.>

 

[Xathia Vastar]

lol >_>
Alright, they're changed back, but I didn't touch the arms (except to fix a few pixels that were attached to the legs)

http://img530.imageshack.us/img530/6893/spriteqc9.png[/img]

 

[Prexus]

The legs need a bend of some kind, either just a small line of shading for the knee cap or an actual bend. They look like poles atm.

 

[Xathia Vastar]

hope this looks remotely like knees...I wasn't sure how to draw pixellized knees o.O

http://img135.imageshack.us/img135/9599/spritelv5.png[/img]

 

[sixtyandaquarter]

Save those middle of the legs. But keep them for the back pose. Cause unless it's me, which might be lord knows... it looks like the knees bend reversed like some kind of bird... that's not a bad idea though heh.

Other than that it looks really nice actually. Nice improvements and work thus far, keep it up.

 

[Shedlight]

yeah look at yourself in the mirror, and draw what you see with out clothes, hair, and with pixels. XD

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