My first illustrated short story.

[Cruelty]

http://www.fileden.com/files/2007/8/13/ ... winnie.pdf
if you have firefox, you can just click the link, and it'll open acrobat reader in a FF tab. if you're using some other browser, you may have to 'save target as' it.

So for as long as i can remember (since last november tbh), I've wanted to write illustrated children books. And i finally stepped up and gave it a shot..It is called "Winnie Likes to Eat Mushrooms". It's 11 pages including the cover, and 'end' page. There's not much reading, it's very short and simple. This is my absolute first attempt at doing anything like this, so it looks kinda shabby.

how did i do?

(btw i could NOT figure out whether to post this in the writing, or the graphics forum, cause its a 50/50 thing)

 

[Grathea]

...that was interesting.
The art gives me a fairly strong Tim Burton vibe - whether that's good or bad I'm not sure.

But yeah, definitely quite fucked up.

 

[Venetia]

@_@ yeah somehow I don't see a childrens' books publisher scooping this up

But the drawings are pretty swanky and cool, though messy, and difficult to see through the compressed JPG garbage. (Also "It's" refers to "It is", not "Its" as in "Its head")

 

[dadevvtsvre]

O_o

Uhh...the quality of the drawings are pretty good. (glad there isn't any colour)

That...that was one of the most messed up things I've ever read. If you want to illustrate kid's books, you might have to veer off into a different direction.

I have nothing to say...except that was pretty cool, really unique style ya got going there, I imagine if you drew more kid-oriented drawings in that style it'd be pretty neat

 

[Despain]

I don't really like it. It seems too forced or fake. Like you're trying to have this crazy LOL MESSED UP CHILDREN THING but you're trying too hard and it doesn't really fit who you are. It feels very much like you made this for the shock value rather than to tell a story.

 

[monkeydlu]

O_O

I shoulda scrolled down first... x.x

 

[moog]

I actually liked it until the very end. Randominity is cool to me but the whole PULLED OUT ORGANS LOL page kinda threw me for a loop.

Nice animations, though!

 

[Venetia]

Yeah I would have actually liked it a lot if it hadn't ended with an awkward "omggross!LOLOL" moment. Seems like a cop-out.

 

[Cruelty]

...that was interesting.
The art gives me a fairly strong Tim Burton vibe - whether that's good or bad I'm not sure.

But yeah, definitely quite fucked up.

this was inspired by angus oblong. :}
i think i'm subconsciously inspired by tim burton. i like his work, but i hate that i like it because its so trendy to try to emulate him and i'm a terrible cynic.

@_@ yeah somehow I don't see a childrens' books publisher scooping this up

But the drawings are pretty swanky and cool, though messy, and difficult to see through the compressed JPG garbage. (Also "It's" refers to "It is", not "Its" as in "Its head")

its not really meant for children. i know its probably misleading to say 'hey i wanna write for kids' then post a picture book. that's just my overall goal; this is just practice!

i usually pass my writings through my friend to check for grammatical/spelling errors. he wasn't available in the time i made this. and the images aren't all that compressed. actually they were set to 100% quality jpg in photoshop, maybe the pages were just stretched out to fit your browser, cause the pictures are actually pretty small in resolution.

O_o

Uhh...the quality of the drawings are pretty good. (glad there isn't any colour)

That...that was one of the most messed up things I've ever read. If you want to illustrate kid's books, you might have to veer off into a different direction.

I have nothing to say...except that was pretty cool, really unique style ya got going there, I imagine if you drew more kid-oriented drawings in that style it'd be pretty neat

i almost colored it. almost.. but this was a short project (three days, if you can believe it actually took that long).

and thanks, bro. i'm totally going in a sensible direction at some point. with a different, less disturbing art style, tho. :\

I don't really like it. It seems too forced or fake. Like you're trying to have this crazy LOL MESSED UP CHILDREN THING but you're trying too hard and it doesn't really fit who you are. It feels very much like you made this for the shock value rather than to tell a story.

tbh you're totally right bro. :\
i mean, i dislike pointless 'shock' b/s as well (and i've been critical of this at many times), but i can't even deny that that's all the ending is. it seemed funny at the time, and i just wanted the ending to be totally bananas. in retrospect, maybe it wasn't so funny.

I actually liked it until the very end. Randominity is cool to me but the whole PULLED OUT ORGANS LOL page kinda threw me for a loop.

Nice animations, though!

:hercule:
thanks for the kind words. i couldn't really think of any other way to end it. i actually didn't have an ending until after i was illustrating it. at some point i drew he pulling the head off of her tongue, and it came to me. it was an impulse ending without a whole lot of thought. @_@


thanks for the reactions, everybody. you all gave me plenty of ideas on what i need to work on. :}

 

[Mascarpone]

abuh @___@

 

[linkz0r]

eek...

Gross.