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Heaven Divide

Hi there people this is my first post so here goes...

Heaven divide

Elke is a young adolescent who lives with his best friend Ren in a small farming village

Life for Elke and Ren is very carefree and easygoing until one day... Their home is destroyed by the northern army for reasons unknown to Elke

Thus starts a journey where Elke fights alongside the south to stop the tyranny of the north, little does he or anyone know, there is a much more fearsome evil lurking in wait

History

The war of heaven
There was once a god called the creator who's methods we cruel and malicious. some angels disagreed with this and thus the great war of heaven began. The war ended when an angel called Ophiel finally proved it possible to kill a god and struck down the creator. When the creator died his body formed into a crystal that then shattered and scattered across the world, this crystal is known as the lucid crystal

The lucid realm
The lucid crystal when reformed is believed to grant access to another plain of existence where one can attain the power to become the next god. It is believed the the north are trying to gather the shards and reform the crystal thus a war began, however there are stronger forces at work also trying to reform the lucid crystal for their own purposes.

Characters

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Elke
The Hero
Age: 17
Class: Fighter
Background: Elke is a hotheaded wannabe adventurer who has spent his entire life in a small farming village. He has always been very hotheaded and sometimes even aggressive, however when his village is destroyed he finally matures and decides to join the south in order to get revenge

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Ren
The Sidekick
Age: 16
Class: Thief
Background: Ren is Elke's best friend and Regardless of her being the younger of the two spends most of her time looking after Elke. She has a very bubbly, happy go lucky attitude to life, even after her village is destroyed she still manages to keep her smile.

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Tao
Rens Uncle
Age: 27
Class: Mage
Background: Tao is the older uncle of Ren and dear friend to the village elder. He spends his time practicing his magic arts and keeping Ren and Elke out of trouble. Tao is very composed and focused and when everyone else is in panic he will maintain a sense of calm. After his village is destroyed he decides to stay with Elke and Ren so that he can watch over them as they are the last survivors of the village he failed to protect.

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Juno
Southern Knight Commander
Age: 19
Class: Lancer
Background:Juno is the leader of the southern army as well as the one who rescued Elke Ren and Tao after their village was destroyed. Juno focuses solely on searching for her brother Janus who disappeared during the war, however due to certain circumstances cannot continue the search and must fight alongside Elke. Over time Juno and Elke's bond starts to develop into something more than just a friendship and after the war is over she plans to leave the army to be with Elke, but...

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Grail
Southern Knight Lieutenant
Age: 29
Class: Dark Knight
Background: Grail is Juno's lieutenant. He keeps to himself most of the time but when he does talk he usually has an air of arrogance to him. Elke despises Grail due to Grail talking down to him as if he were a child. Grail is also and unrivaled swordsman and could very well become the commander of the southern knights, strangely he does not wish to take the position, maybe he has other plans...

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Ophiel
Fallen Angel
Age: ???
Class: Fallen Angel
Background: The last god, the great creator, was a malicious tyrant who's methods were cruel and bitter. Some of his angels disagreed with his methods and thus a war in heaven begun. Ophiel, one of the most powerful angels finally broke through the creators palace gates and after a fierce battle proved it possible to kill a god. after this transgression however, Ophiel and his 4 comrades were banished from heaven and to this day seek revenge on there angel brethren who cast them out for doing what they believed to be justice

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Vayle
Northern Knight Commander
Age: 30
Class: Lancer
Background: Vayle is the leader of the northern army and lead the attack on Elke's village. He is cruel, uncaring and his lust for blood is never ending. Vayle is the main if not only reason Elke is fighting in the war against the north.

Screenies

Game
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The Title Screen

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Elanade Castle

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Ishtar Mountains

Battle
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The game uses a FF7 style time based combat system

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The game also uses no RTP battlers except naramura RTP and VX imports

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The game also uses Naramura's plus some of my own summoning animations

Feel free to leave feedback as this is my first game in production and i would apreciate the help.

cheers
 
Btw i forgot to mention time...

Ive finished about 2 hours (if you actually bother to read the dialog if not probably 1.5).

The eventual aim however is around 25-30 hours without sidequests.

cheers...
 
The maps are very ugly. The top of one of the cliffs is sliced off! And the other map is fairly bland.

The story is very generic from what I can see. It seems to be a typical "teenager has to save the world" sort of thing. This plot has been repeated many times. Also, you don't give enough story. I can barely get anything out of what you've got there.

Each of your characters has a ONE WORD description. It's obvious you haven't thought them through too much. What are their goals? Their motivations? Their strengths? Weaknesses? Possibly even their history? What is each character's role in the game?

Try adding more information and look for a mapping tutorial beforeyou continue, and possibly think about fleshing out your story.
 
I agree with pokemaniac. This game needs some real polishing, unless you want it to go down as one of all those bad games created so far.

On another note: Maybe you shouldn't use the Arshes sprite (Fighter-001) since he is overused and people are totally sick of this guy.

Hope that helps

~Dalton~
 
The castle map is well, okay. But the other one is really ugly :s
Check out Tindy's mapping tutorials.
Your didn't post a lot of info about your story, so i wont comment on that. It might be a good story but the starting situation looks a little generic i think. Elke = Arshes? That char really is overused i'm afraid. By the way: where i live Elke is a name for girls only ;)
 
so mainly I need to fix the mapping shiz... k cool
cheers to pokemanic btw I didnt notice that cliff screw up... strangely.

story however is supposed to be very generic fantasy rpgesque as its an easy place to start for a first game, ive updated the char details btw and there is a bit more to them than previously thought

as for using arshes... I'm sticking with it, I like the sprite and I'm making a game that I myself would play but I appreciate that people will be sick of him by now, however if my voice acting makes enough impact it might compensate for him being so overused.

cheers for the feedback
 
If it's you first game just make it and get it out, dont worry about little details, by the looks of things very few people will play it anyway. It does look very amateurish. Just make sure it's a good learning process for your second game... and third game...
 
Pokemaniac":23qwktp5 said:
First game and you're talking about voice-acting? Simple bit of advice -
DON'T GO THERE.

your kidding right, voice acting is probably one of the easiest bits... then again i was a music tech student for 2 years so i am good with audio software, that reminds me, a few bits of the soundtrack are homemade too.

Calibre":23qwktp5 said:
If it's you first game just make it and get it out, dont worry about little details, by the looks of things very few people will play it anyway. It does look very amateurish. Just make sure it's a good learning process for your second game... and third game...

I am actualy working on another project to release while im working on this one and i am hopefully going to apply what i learn from other projects toward this particular one to improve it and make it less amateurish

Justin Lee":23qwktp5 said:
You'll end up like the CD-I zelda series.

never played em... tbh I dont really like zelda that much, Its not gritty enough, to full of fairys and cliche happy endings and stuff.

I like my rpgs to have some really harsh moments and happy endings but with great costs, the best example of this is probably the suikoden series or FF7
 

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