badmonur;289278 said:
and the fact of me being black and having no rhythm.
I'm a brotha too and I make pretty decent music.
We all got it inside, bro.
This is not bad, in fact it's great, maybe not suited for really deep emotions (e.g anger, sadness, haste etc), but the instrumentation is well and the rhythm is fine. There's nothing really that I can say "this doesn't sound right". Give it another try, maybe you can cook up some hott shizz, cuz this one is showing some good potential.