First HK Clothing Attempt

[Pink Wabbit]

II tried to attempt to make a yellow jumper for the HK child, but it doesn't look so good, good someone point out the mistakes I did so that I can improve?

I probably have many mistakes, would appreciate some comments and critique. Just remember, this is my first try in spriting something from scratch.

 

[Britchik]

It's not as bad as you think. The main problems are a little bit of pillow shading and too much highlight. Try to remember that the light source is supposed to come from the left, not dead centre. Use more midtones from your palette and reserve the highlight colours for places that really reflect the light. The shape is good though, and it's looking really cute. Well done, keep it up.

 

[Hanzo Kimura]

yeah britchik is right....
your pillow shading it
which is bad xD
you should make it more detailed

more on that... a good start ^^
keep it up
Gambatte!!

 

[Grathea]

Aww... he looks potbellied.

But yeah, if you get rid of the pillowshading, you've got a manageable piece here.

 

[Dawne]

Other then the shading, the only real problem I see is that the sleeves of the shirt should
fall more naturally against the hand, instead of cutting straight across.

 

[Pink Wabbit]

Thanks for all the comments guys! I've redone it and tried not to pillowshade it, I also followed Dawne's suggestion and made the sleeves fall more freely against the hands.

Old Version:

http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee23 ... Jumper.png[/img]

New Version:

http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee23 ... mper-1.png[/img]

Hope you like the new one!

P.S: Could someone tell me how to make a spoiler? So that I can Update my First Post?

 

[Pink Wabbit]

Could Anyone help me here? (I hope bumping is allowed here)

 

[cactus]

I'm not really good at shading advice, but, as for structure! I preferred your other sleeves you could curve the line instead of making them longer and i think it'd look more like a sweater, i only have one where the sleeves are loose like that. Though if you were going for that look then ingore what i just said.

 

[Britchik]

To do a spoiler, use the tags [.spoiler] and [./spoiler], just remove the dots.

As to the jumper, it's still looking a bit flat. It still looks like it has too much light and not enough shadow, even though you took out a lot of the lightest colour. You may want to try taking a look at some of the things in the HKCP. Zoom in on the pieces, study the shading, then try to imitate it. And don't be afraid to use those darker colours; used correctly, they really help give depth.