Fable of the Phoenix

[Yivyn]

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created by: Zach Godin / Studio Dusk

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When Renton Alexander sneaks down into the Linatin Valley, he discovers a phoenix egg. It hatches in front of his eyes, but as soon as it hatches, it's captured by the nation of the ocean. After this is found out, Renton is put in prison for travelling into the valley. But a mercenary that's also locked up, Elrohri Anwaname, assists him in getting out, only to betray him and run off on him later. Later on his quest to get to the Ocean Nation capital, he meets a young girl, who assists him in his quest, but something seems different about this girl...the fire magic...the ability to fly...Renton begins to wonder if she has any relation to the phoenix...but all that needs to be set aside for the real problem...getting in and out without dying...

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Left to Right: Renton Alexander, Evelyn Harris, & Elrohri Anwaname / Profiles coming soon.

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-Add on to the Standard Battle System
-Part-Time Job System
-More to be added later-

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In front of the Hotel Airius
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In the Hotel Airius
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The music playing piano...dude.
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Inside the coolest shop I've ever made in RMXP.
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On the bridge to the other side of Linatin.
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In a field of flowers on the other side of Linatin.
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In front of the castle.
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Linatin: From the Event Layer's point of view.

Project Started: January 28th, 2007
Last Updated: February 3rd, 2007
Possible Release Date: April 1st, 2007

Hiring:
I'm currently hiring spriters. Interested? PM me.

 

[jbart321]

Looks like you got a good start here, but the mapping needs some work. I can't quite put my finger on it, but it just looks kind weird.

 

[Deathbane]

I kinda like the simple mapping but it does not need to be that simple. you can add some more detail into the maps.

 

[Rain]

The mapping is very big, and very dull as well. Why does everything have to be in a straight line?

Also looking at the background is that place supposed to be flying? or is it on a cliff or something?

I think your mapping could use some addressing because sadly the majority of people will quit your game pretty early on if they walk past the same tree 50 times on there straight path to the door with the straight line flowers.
Also the interiors seem very large with a lot of open space. The rows upon rows of empty tables make it seem even emptier than it is.

You really should condense the interiors down a little.

I hope I'm not coming across as nasty in any way as it's not my intention.

Good luck with your project

Camisado

 

[the_retro_fox]

The story sounds good-maybe just think of a name for "the ocean nation" but try not to be so symetrical with your mapping.