Dungeon Explorers

[Lorddarkfrog]

This project was my first RMXP game its a failure and I removed the download as well look for my new game coming soon on RMXP (I don't like the art in VX thats why I prefer XP its more realistic.)
Story

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Dungeon Explorers is a turn based RPG and its my first game actually you play as Alfair the young warrior from a village sent out to stop the darklords evil plans to get ultimate power! after the mayor calls alfair to come to the great tree alfair encounters dark alfair and fights dark alfair he then wins and dark alfair decides to join alfair on his journey he is a decendant of his ancestors from the dark realm and once Alfair has escaped the great tree he sets off an an adventure to find the other three elementals! also if you see bookcases you can find books!

Characters

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Alfair: The main character of the game Alfair is around 13 to 14 years old and was sent to protect all four elementals!
Basil: Basil is Alfairs best friend and he tagged along with alfair he is around the same age as Alfair.
Dark Alfair: Dark Alfair is Alfair in his darkform after losing to Alfair in the great tree he joins Alfair on his adventure!
Kate: Kate is a young mage she kinda thinks Alfairs cute and thinks she should ask Alfair out.
Darklord: the darklord is the villain in the storyline he plans to capture all four elementals to get ultimate power.

Screenshots

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No longer available

Download

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This game is no longer available

Progress

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The project was completed but an utter failure. Look for my new game.

 

[Shingu]

NEED MORE INFO
SCREENSHOTS DON't WORK

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

Its an RPG it requires RMXP and its about 14 hours long? need anyother info?

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

and yeah I tried getting the screenshots to work I will need a few minuites though.

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

there I fixed the screenshots!

 

[Despain]

wow, dude. this is pretty bad. it looks like you just opened up the program for the first time and threw this thing together.

also what's with those screenshots? do you KNOW how to take a real screenshot? because those look like you took them with a camera or something (also, post the images directly on this forum using the tag).

you also need to expand on your information, significantly.

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

I know this is the first game I have made and the first time I have uploaded a game I need some help like how I have no Idea how to get screenshots and a few other things. but yeah other than that this is my first game and I am going to make a sequel to it when I get a little better could you give me a few tips really quick?

 

[dadevvtsvre]

Put the game into fullscreen mode (Alt+Enter) and then press PrtSc+Shift to take an image of the screen. Paste that image into Microsoft Paint and then save it. Upload it to a site such as Photobucket, and then use the image tags (http://image location here[/img]) to embed the images directly onto the forum page.

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

thanks that was a big help! I will do that right now! it will be on in about 15 minuites cause I need time to get to the screenshot locations!

 

[Doctor]

Another joke game? This is getting pretty old.

However, let's not waste the opportunity, if there's a chance this is actually genuine, I'd love a chance to get inside the mind of the author.

Lorddarkfrog, would you mind answering the following questions:

a) How old are you?
b) What do you think of your game?
c) What did you expect the other members of this site to reply?
d) Do you suffer from mental disabilities?
e) Where do you live?

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

a) Lets just say I like keeping my age private. but I am in between 14-18 I will tell you that.
b) Its really cool for a first game and I would not say its Great but I am trying to get better and I would like it if people would try my game so they can give me some info on my future games.
c) I really was not gonna expect stuff like Best game I ever played because its my first game and I dont know much on how to upload stuff yet...
d) No.
e) colorado

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

Ok I fixed the screenshots and its ready!

 

[Doctor]

f) What is your age, really?
g) What is your first language?
h) Why did you bother to post a game that so obviously lacks skill? The only helpful comment anyone can give you right now is "Play around with the maker to get accustomed to it".

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

f) 15.
g) Umm I am typing in English?
h) because I would like to see if anyone has suggestions and any other helpful stuff I am new and would like some helpful info on game making and also I made the game completly by myself so I know its not great I just played around and made a new game.

 

[Doctor]

I also am writing in English, yet it is not my first language.

You see, what you did was bad. Very bad. In every single area. So, here is me helping you:

Step 1) Delete your game.
Step 2) Create a new project that you will not post here, and that you will use solely to get accustomed to RPG Maker.
Step 3) Browse the project discussion forum, play a few games, see what gets everyone to wet themselves over Master of the Wind.
Step 4) When you can look at your game and think "Someone else might enjoy this", post again.

 

[Lorddarkfrog]

okay look this is MY first game I am currently working on a wicked one right now! I just put this one on so I could try and expirement and also so people could kind of tell me what they think I could improve on! if you don't like it fine.

 

[Dark_Cover]

Sorry but if you are new my advice is to not make a game at all, play with the system for a while. See what you are good at(mapping,scripting,spriting,writing) Then You will know where to improve...

This is a place for critique and advertisment not a place to say, "look at this thing that i did in a few seconds, tell me what you think."

Also your grammer is not...well it's not good enough to write a story. Even if it is a test project then you should at least use good practice, by that I mean practice good grammer.

I personally don't think your ready to even think about making a game, seriously.

also no one wants to be rude but when you act ignorant and to not take good advice from a Mod, people get a little angry.

 

[seto9008]

the title dungeon explorer reminds me of something XP, also, good luck on your project  :thumb:

 

[HarryE]

This is a good game for a first try... but you don't yet have the skill to have it posted here. You're still using RTP-issued characters, and skills, by the looks of it.

These little projects are good, because as you make them, your skill grows. However, nobody online really wants to see your training game. You keep these games back, use them to learn various skills and techniques, and then you use them in your 40-hour dungeon crawler and you're crowned king of the world.

 

[crazymew]

The intro story line in that spoiler as so many grammatical errors, you might want to try and spruce that up abit... Otherwise it sounds pretty good, I like the concept.